RULE's 2 Bar Analysis

[RULE]

Originally Posted by Seul

I can agree with this, thanks for your input.

No problem. The fact that it is an audio bar makes a big difference though. Flow is more valuable to an audio, so its not really a fair comparison. But i hope the feed helps anyway.

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[RULE]

Originally Posted by Seul

I can agree with this, thanks for your input.

No problem. The fact that it is an audio bar makes a big difference though. Flow is more valuable to an audio, so its not really a fair comparison. But i hope the feed helps anyway.

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[KG The Prince]

Originally Posted by RULE

Had to tell you a few times that your WORDING'S QUITE ATROCIOUS, them scripts wouldn't be magical w/ MERLIN'S TYPE OF FOCUS!

Multi set was smooth, the actual line is a bit weird tho. You say your opponents wording is bad, then drop that odd worded second multi set. Merlins type of focus? Passable i guess but if you aiming for top tier this wording needs to be straight.

/ Guided dude, he told me 'quit the horseplay' then I saw the WORST DESIGNS APPROACHING cos I said 'into the belly of the beast' & he couldn't WORK IT LIKE A TROJAN!

Similar to the previous bar the wording is a bit unnatural. the non-capped build is very longer and wordy to me too, feels like you stretched the build to include the horse-play reference. Could of been cleaner and shorter. The concept it good, but the execution wasnt strong. I think the punch could of been better. Work it like a trojan. Many more creative / impactful ways to land the punch.

Thanks for the feed bro

[KG The Prince]

Originally Posted by RULE

Had to tell you a few times that your WORDING'S QUITE ATROCIOUS, them scripts wouldn't be magical w/ MERLIN'S TYPE OF FOCUS!

Multi set was smooth, the actual line is a bit weird tho. You say your opponents wording is bad, then drop that odd worded second multi set. Merlins type of focus? Passable i guess but if you aiming for top tier this wording needs to be straight.

/ Guided dude, he told me 'quit the horseplay' then I saw the WORST DESIGNS APPROACHING cos I said 'into the belly of the beast' & he couldn't WORK IT LIKE A TROJAN!

Similar to the previous bar the wording is a bit unnatural. the non-capped build is very longer and wordy to me too, feels like you stretched the build to include the horse-play reference. Could of been cleaner and shorter. The concept it good, but the execution wasnt strong. I think the punch could of been better. Work it like a trojan. Many more creative / impactful ways to land the punch.

Thanks for the feed bro

[RULE]

We thought he’d turn down this callout, run aWAY N RETIRE ‘Now He Gon Get This Work, Thank God’ as if he PRAYED TA GET HIRED!

Decent set-up, flows nice, decent jab.

6 defenses with no ‘Burn Out’; think youre TAKIN IT HIGHER?

Wording on the set-up seems strange to me. Maybe i dont get the slang. 6 defenses with no burn out? you mean like 6 defense with no clear victory? The wording is too unnatural and hurts the bar imo. More than the fire reference helps.

watch ya old-puns-fa-Row ‘Go Up In Smoke’ coz now youre ‘PLAYING WIT FIRE’!

Bit of a soft punch. playing with fire as a punch is pretty basic. Feel like the first line was the hardest of the bar which is should never be really.

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Frosty you sumamabitch lol.

nigga i got sticks for arms but ya get hit wit da CROSS RIGHT INNIT FAST cuz once i lay yo out in da snow ... ya getting 8 inches of da FRAWST BITE IN YA ASS /

Cant lie this is funny as fuck lol

[RULE]

We thought he’d turn down this callout, run aWAY N RETIRE ‘Now He Gon Get This Work, Thank God’ as if he PRAYED TA GET HIRED!

Decent set-up, flows nice, decent jab.

6 defenses with no ‘Burn Out’; think youre TAKIN IT HIGHER?

Wording on the set-up seems strange to me. Maybe i dont get the slang. 6 defenses with no burn out? you mean like 6 defense with no clear victory? The wording is too unnatural and hurts the bar imo. More than the fire reference helps.

watch ya old-puns-fa-Row ‘Go Up In Smoke’ coz now youre ‘PLAYING WIT FIRE’!

Bit of a soft punch. playing with fire as a punch is pretty basic. Feel like the first line was the hardest of the bar which is should never be really.

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---------- Post added at 10:47 PM ---------- Previous post was at 10:43 PM ----------

Frosty you sumamabitch lol.

nigga i got sticks for arms but ya get hit wit da CROSS RIGHT INNIT FAST cuz once i lay yo out in da snow ... ya getting 8 inches of da FRAWST BITE IN YA ASS /

Cant lie this is funny as fuck lol

Originally Posted by RULE

We thought he’d turn down this callout, run aWAY N RETIRE ‘Now He Gon Get This Work, Thank God’ as if he PRAYED TA GET HIRED!

Decent set-up, flows nice, decent jab.

6 defenses with no ‘Burn Out’; think youre TAKIN IT HIGHER?

Wording on the set-up seems strange to me. Maybe i dont get the slang. 6 defenses with no burn out? you mean like 6 defense with no clear victory? The wording is too unnatural and hurts the bar imo. More than the fire reference helps.

watch ya old-puns-fa-Row ‘Go Up In Smoke’ coz now youre ‘PLAYING WIT FIRE’!

Bit of a soft punch. playing with fire as a punch is pretty basic. Feel like the first line was the hardest of the bar which is should never be really.

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burnout is a state of exhaustion: physical, emotional, (in this case, writing).

but yea you pretty much agreed with my assessment, thanks yo. this is dope

Originally Posted by RULE

We thought he’d turn down this callout, run aWAY N RETIRE ‘Now He Gon Get This Work, Thank God’ as if he PRAYED TA GET HIRED!

Decent set-up, flows nice, decent jab.

6 defenses with no ‘Burn Out’; think youre TAKIN IT HIGHER?

Wording on the set-up seems strange to me. Maybe i dont get the slang. 6 defenses with no burn out? you mean like 6 defense with no clear victory? The wording is too unnatural and hurts the bar imo. More than the fire reference helps.

watch ya old-puns-fa-Row ‘Go Up In Smoke’ coz now youre ‘PLAYING WIT FIRE’!

Bit of a soft punch. playing with fire as a punch is pretty basic. Feel like the first line was the hardest of the bar which is should never be really.

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burnout is a state of exhaustion: physical, emotional, (in this case, writing).

but yea you pretty much agreed with my assessment, thanks yo. this is dope

thanks dawg

thanks dawg

you think you wanna tangle with guts, THEN TEST MINE ya get 'coiled and stuffed' like an INTESTINE ya 'lines is rather shallow' so i'm not afraid of A 'PENDICKS' VERSE and the only time he 'ruptured with a sac' is if his APPENDIX BURST

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also gonna cheat and post a few more. sorry for cheating.

your 'text is ancient' like Mesopotamian CUNIFORMS WROTE so i'm Gilgamesh and YOU KNEE FOR A G.O.A.T his SWAG IS GONE, the FAGGOT SCUM, if he 'carried weight with words like a stone' it was relics ya SALVAGE FROM BABYLON and you gonna 'conquer my legion?' but ya FAILED n PLAN WAS SLOPPY cause the only time he 'grasped at victory' was reading TALES of HAMMURABI


if he a 'warrior type, he snaked himself in' like KEVIN DURANT and the only time he 'present bars of greatness' is biting from REVAN OR RANT


these 'kids sit with lids dim' ya whole crew is a POSSE OF ERROR couple peas of a pod that 'stick a round' sayin yo DROP ME A FAIR but known to 'rattle from the tension' like they COPY A SNARE so if they 'snap when i'm roasting' they PROBABLY AWARE when the 'mug gets the black bruise(brews), my flow is hot n fresh' like COFFEE PREPARED(edited)

you think you wanna tangle with guts, THEN TEST MINE ya get 'coiled and stuffed' like an INTESTINE ya 'lines is rather shallow' so i'm not afraid of A 'PENDICKS' VERSE and the only time he 'ruptured with a sac' is if his APPENDIX BURST

---------- Post added at 07:00 PM ---------- Previous post was at 06:55 PM ----------

also gonna cheat and post a few more. sorry for cheating.

your 'text is ancient' like Mesopotamian CUNIFORMS WROTE so i'm Gilgamesh and YOU KNEE FOR A G.O.A.T his SWAG IS GONE, the FAGGOT SCUM, if he 'carried weight with words like a stone' it was relics ya SALVAGE FROM BABYLON and you gonna 'conquer my legion?' but ya FAILED n PLAN WAS SLOPPY cause the only time he 'grasped at victory' was reading TALES of HAMMURABI


if he a 'warrior type, he snaked himself in' like KEVIN DURANT and the only time he 'present bars of greatness' is biting from REVAN OR RANT


these 'kids sit with lids dim' ya whole crew is a POSSE OF ERROR couple peas of a pod that 'stick a round' sayin yo DROP ME A FAIR but known to 'rattle from the tension' like they COPY A SNARE so if they 'snap when i'm roasting' they PROBABLY AWARE when the 'mug gets the black bruise(brews), my flow is hot n fresh' like COFFEE PREPARED(edited)

gutz like "If I posted a 64 line battle, but put a space every time two bars have passed, that counts right?"

gutz like "If I posted a 64 line battle, but put a space every time two bars have passed, that counts right?"

6 i was trying to think of a wittier response but you beat me to it lol

6 i was trying to think of a wittier response but you beat me to it lol

Originally Posted by Row

6 i was trying to think of a wittier response but you beat me to it lol

lmao. but i get to cheat. just because.

Originally Posted by Row

6 i was trying to think of a wittier response but you beat me to it lol

lmao. but i get to cheat. just because.

gutz would have done well in Murda Muzik.

gutz would have done well in Murda Muzik.