2013 GC RD.4 ELOH_STACKz Vs. M U G G Z (M U G G Z wins 3-0)

[Wonderbred]

I wasn't gonna vote on this since they're both in MM, but since @Lockhart said it was okay and we need to get this tournament going, I'm gonna go ahead and drop one. I'm not biased since they're in the same crew anyway.

M U G G Z: First of all, this was pretty hard to read because of the format. Like, it was a good verse, but when you make it a wall of text it's harder for people to feel your flow. Other than that, it was really imaginative, which got you some points in my book. I agree with RULE in that your vocabulary was repetitive at times, but it didn't detract too much in my opinion. I really liked the perspective, it was pretty original how you were telling a story from a third person narrator who wasn't omnipotent. It gave it a really mythical quality, like a folk tale almost. I would say 85-90% of your multis connected, although there were a few I didn't really feel ("still is bright" and "will to fight" just sounded kind of awkward, especially with the wording in the former). Overall, good drop, but if you touched it up grammatically and visually it would really be top-tier.

ELOH_STACKS: Pretty good story, you also came up with a pretty original take, and I liked the twist at the end. Most of your multis were pretty good except for a few (GENERAL CUSTARD and YELLOW AS MUSTARD didn't really connect, and it's General Custer btw. Also the last four lines were pretty choppy), so the piece flowed pretty well. I'd actually say it had the better flow of the two. The twist was nice, but I'm not really sure about the ending. It seemed kind of gimmicky. The piece also seemed kind of short. Even though the line count was fine, it just didn't really have as much substance as MUGGZ's verse.

Overall, really close battle and dope drops by both of you guys, but in the end I'm going with the piece I thought was more original and had a more in-depth story.
MVGT: @M U G G Z

[Wonderbred]

I wasn't gonna vote on this since they're both in MM, but since @Lockhart said it was okay and we need to get this tournament going, I'm gonna go ahead and drop one. I'm not biased since they're in the same crew anyway.

M U G G Z: First of all, this was pretty hard to read because of the format. Like, it was a good verse, but when you make it a wall of text it's harder for people to feel your flow. Other than that, it was really imaginative, which got you some points in my book. I agree with RULE in that your vocabulary was repetitive at times, but it didn't detract too much in my opinion. I really liked the perspective, it was pretty original how you were telling a story from a third person narrator who wasn't omnipotent. It gave it a really mythical quality, like a folk tale almost. I would say 85-90% of your multis connected, although there were a few I didn't really feel ("still is bright" and "will to fight" just sounded kind of awkward, especially with the wording in the former). Overall, good drop, but if you touched it up grammatically and visually it would really be top-tier.

ELOH_STACKS: Pretty good story, you also came up with a pretty original take, and I liked the twist at the end. Most of your multis were pretty good except for a few (GENERAL CUSTARD and YELLOW AS MUSTARD didn't really connect, and it's General Custer btw. Also the last four lines were pretty choppy), so the piece flowed pretty well. I'd actually say it had the better flow of the two. The twist was nice, but I'm not really sure about the ending. It seemed kind of gimmicky. The piece also seemed kind of short. Even though the line count was fine, it just didn't really have as much substance as MUGGZ's verse.

Overall, really close battle and dope drops by both of you guys, but in the end I'm going with the piece I thought was more original and had a more in-depth story.
MVGT: @M U G G Z