A little writing I did...

[IAmFlow]

Come down little girls.

Book - I like the feeling and what the piece meant. The opening was well down as well as the closing with a repeat about the bedtime stories. It put a poetic touch on it. On the bad note of it, it was kind of short living, so no real emotion, or painted picture came from it. It was just a quick in and out. Which I realize that is all it was meant to be, just wish the piece was longer. Also, the flow and wording wasn't always the smoothest in some of the lines. I felt like a few of them could have been a little more short and sweet so it flowed better.

^ Theres some real feedback, instead of the two word wonders that people leave.

ET - Go write and post in your own thread. Book posted this up obviously to get feed, and have people read it or he wouldn't have posted it at all. I'm sure he wasn't looking for someone to hop in here and start posting their own shit.

[IAmFlow]

Come down little girls.

Book - I like the feeling and what the piece meant. The opening was well down as well as the closing with a repeat about the bedtime stories. It put a poetic touch on it. On the bad note of it, it was kind of short living, so no real emotion, or painted picture came from it. It was just a quick in and out. Which I realize that is all it was meant to be, just wish the piece was longer. Also, the flow and wording wasn't always the smoothest in some of the lines. I felt like a few of them could have been a little more short and sweet so it flowed better.

^ Theres some real feedback, instead of the two word wonders that people leave.

ET - Go write and post in your own thread. Book posted this up obviously to get feed, and have people read it or he wouldn't have posted it at all. I'm sure he wasn't looking for someone to hop in here and start posting their own shit.