Topic: You are in a haunted house where people start getting killed... who is the killer?

Verses are due by 9/29/22 at 11:59pm EST.

Good reads on both sides. 

Topic: You are in a haunted house where people start getting killed... who is the killer?

To me it looks like one got caught up in trying to rhyme more than story tell which bogged down the story and made it harder/ less fun to read and follow. And the rhymes didn't work well enough to make up for that imo.

The other was easier/funner to read and follow. Both had plot twists that worked,  but voted for which one was a better read overall

One felt more personal but the other was more eloquently written. Both kind of had the same twist but winner's story had better imagery ggz to both

Great topic..both erie as fuck.. felt one was just a bit more detailed with a more of a painted picture with the their killer image.great read by both.salute and good luck to both

Yall both had the same idea! It's a solid idea though. It was tough to find the flow of both, especially Affinity's, but that's how text be. Still I feel like seasoning some more internal schemes would've really helped ya'll even if they don't fully rhyme. Overall, felt about even as far as creativity, my winner edged it with his delivery. 

tough for me cause I'm not really a fan of horror-esque topics. one had some random things that look like it was put there just to rhyme, and ended up making the line just sound awkward and disrupting the read. Thought one flowed a bit better. Got my winner. 

both were pretty good but i felt one was a bit more deeper in his raps that i edged it too. The other was a hit smoother but the winner was more impactful. FV is in.

Both had good ideas, I enjoyed both. Felt one edged it just a bit more. Good job guys.

This particular battle warranted more than just one read, three in total...to be exact. Both read like a movie, but considering the topic...I would have liked to have seen a better flip on the endings, which I had already anticipated before reading both offerings that the killer would likely be yourselves. Since the spoiler was almost identical it seems, I had to look more in detail...there were plenty of flips, but I thought one did a more effective job at implementing them throughout the body of his piece. Good writting from both...both of them could substitute for an actual script! Nice work here my guys!

Enjoy your weekend, big ups! Fairs in! 10/10

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I enjoyed both reads, this is a close one. It’s cool to see both had similar endings about who's the killer. My winner was slightly better with execution & being descriptive. Good battle, fair’s in.

Both had there ups and downs but I was feeling one a little more