2013 GC. Final Dono Vs. M U G G Z Vs. Mcjewfro(Mcjewfro Wins!)

Dono Vs M U G G Z Vs. Mcjewfro

This topical is the FINAL of the 2013 Topical Grand Championship

Rules
Verses are due Tuesday, January 21st.
Verses are to be posted in THIS thread.
There are NO EXTENSIONS.
Verses must be 40-60 lines long.
Vote deductions will happen for people going over.
FIRST TO 5 WINS

Topic

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This is a first ever 3 way final in a tournament, due to a numbers error in earlier rounds. Good luck fella's.

Dono Vs M U G G Z Vs. Mcjewfro

This topical is the FINAL of the 2013 Topical Grand Championship

Rules
Verses are due Tuesday, January 21st.
Verses are to be posted in THIS thread.
There are NO EXTENSIONS.
Verses must be 40-60 lines long.
Vote deductions will happen for people going over.
FIRST TO 5 WINS

Topic

---------- Post added at 04:35 PM ---------- Previous post was at 04:34 PM ----------

This is a first ever 3 way final in a tournament, due to a numbers error in earlier rounds. Good luck fella's.

[Joe MuGGz]

2013 Topical GC: "Go Green"



It all started about a million years ago
My atmosphere was infratrated with humans, geared to go
First it was one ship that landed, they inspected my orgin
Then more came after, declaring their portions
I’ve seen other planets get infected, falling to doom
The humans build factories that produce these horrible fumes
Sadly though, this species thrives on evil stuff
Whenever they are around, it’s disel trucks and trees is cut
Toxic waste, never cleaning up
My ozone is weak, my core is heating up
We all heard about what happened to Earth
The humans used her up, and she exploded shortly after my birth
Earth is now nothing but a urban legend
People never learn their lesson, continuing their yearn for weapons
Never prepared to stop
Their leaders running through worlds like a pair of socks
Now most of my days, behind my eyes is pain
When Im angry it thunders, when I cry it rains
They never saw the signs, acknowledge my cries for change
Wars lasting for years, everyone blind with rage
But today is different.. I woke up feeling kind of strange….

My tempature is rising, I’m quaking way harder
My ozone is thin, the sun baking the water
Ice caps just suffered a nice crack
Axels got me spinning to fast and might snap
I noticed my days are lasting to long
Other planets approaching, gravitational pull is too strong
Tornados, storms, blizzards happening all at once
Mountains forming instantly, like one every month
My blood is boiling, spewing through pores
Untamed forest fires buring their homes and stores
The humans are fleeing, quickly packed their ships
They are done with me, now on another galactic trip..

My surface is cracking, exposing a bright light
I’m ripping in half, so this is what the end of my life’s like?
My oceans flooded the cities, theres no land left
All signs of life has instantly vanished
No more humans slowly killing me, they left me with scars
The days of being a planet is over… I am now a Star...


G'Luck Fellas...

[Joe MuGGz]

2013 Topical GC: "Go Green"



It all started about a million years ago
My atmosphere was infratrated with humans, geared to go
First it was one ship that landed, they inspected my orgin
Then more came after, declaring their portions
I’ve seen other planets get infected, falling to doom
The humans build factories that produce these horrible fumes
Sadly though, this species thrives on evil stuff
Whenever they are around, it’s disel trucks and trees is cut
Toxic waste, never cleaning up
My ozone is weak, my core is heating up
We all heard about what happened to Earth
The humans used her up, and she exploded shortly after my birth
Earth is now nothing but a urban legend
People never learn their lesson, continuing their yearn for weapons
Never prepared to stop
Their leaders running through worlds like a pair of socks
Now most of my days, behind my eyes is pain
When Im angry it thunders, when I cry it rains
They never saw the signs, acknowledge my cries for change
Wars lasting for years, everyone blind with rage
But today is different.. I woke up feeling kind of strange….

My tempature is rising, I’m quaking way harder
My ozone is thin, the sun baking the water
Ice caps just suffered a nice crack
Axels got me spinning to fast and might snap
I noticed my days are lasting to long
Other planets approaching, gravitational pull is too strong
Tornados, storms, blizzards happening all at once
Mountains forming instantly, like one every month
My blood is boiling, spewing through pores
Untamed forest fires buring their homes and stores
The humans are fleeing, quickly packed their ships
They are done with me, now on another galactic trip..

My surface is cracking, exposing a bright light
I’m ripping in half, so this is what the end of my life’s like?
My oceans flooded the cities, theres no land left
All signs of life has instantly vanished
No more humans slowly killing me, they left me with scars
The days of being a planet is over… I am now a Star...


G'Luck Fellas...

[Dono]

When Worlds Collide

Planets orbit through compacted air in a way contact is rare
Rotations with no patience but in collisions, contrasts are bare
Cause when gravity hits, it's with the impact of tragedy's wish
Forces keep crushing until a body will have to be split

That last whisky was too much liquor now I'm damn tipsy
Double vision and even sound's misty, no one stands with me
Not the plan, dizzy - wandered from bars to lonely streets
Hard to hold my feet steady, sit, stare at stars from a lowly steep
Fight urges to slowly weep, I'm just depressed and so drunk
Tons of stress, fuck the ex, thoughts of her could make me throw up
Ya know what....life is shit, not a single part I like of it
Don't know why I try to fit this crinkled heart inside a pit
I'd rather die and quit instead of cry and spit, kill the waste
That's when I heard footsteps - Looked up at a familiar face

When two worlds get near, doesn't matter what'll happen next year
Interaction runs in patterns as if they had been here
While bonds from physics can overcome the longest distance
Meta-physical interests become the strongest visits

Her name was Cassie, a sassy sweetheart and damn was she smart
We split ways years back before life actually seemed hard
Her presence was divine essence, and I looked like a retard
Hugged me with gentle regard, perceptive discretion her keen art
Her touch - faith itself, reason to live, she whispered "What's wrong?"
Made me melt how she could just give, thought of us as dust, gone
But here she was, me, more than severely buzzed, can't undo
the fact I've had one too many drinks to think...."I love you"

A few things ooze out during volcanic activity
That's merely the world's smallest organic facsimile
Cause when balance is rough, the universe didn't plan it enough
In tight space, pressure builds until the planet erupts

She paused "....you're drunk.....sorry.....I've got a husband and kid
We live in different worlds now....this is all I can give"
Something cracked, I screamed in her face 'why won't you love me back,
you fucking hag!' tried to step forward with a lunge and grab
But booze stole the ground underneath, I fell into a jumbled heap

So dumb of me, in the haze she ran, don't know what to think
Nausea came, vomit forcing its way out as I'm calling her name
Damn, a ball and a chain? Ugh, I'm barely crawling away
She'll dwell on that hell tone, none of that is what I meant though
Is that her cell phone? Must have dropped in the rush when she went home

Black holes obscure mass, difficult to see a pure path
Even when wide worlds are directed towards a sure crash
The collision leaves craters, some deeper than others
But some dire damages can only be seen when they suffer

One Missed Call - Text Received 1:06 AM
I need you. Now. I'm outside our old spot. In the eyes of the world I've been blown off.
I hate to show you now that I'm so soft. But without you by my side I'm so lost.
Reply: I don't care, I'll always be here, I love you.
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[Dono]

When Worlds Collide

Planets orbit through compacted air in a way contact is rare
Rotations with no patience but in collisions, contrasts are bare
Cause when gravity hits, it's with the impact of tragedy's wish
Forces keep crushing until a body will have to be split

That last whisky was too much liquor now I'm damn tipsy
Double vision and even sound's misty, no one stands with me
Not the plan, dizzy - wandered from bars to lonely streets
Hard to hold my feet steady, sit, stare at stars from a lowly steep
Fight urges to slowly weep, I'm just depressed and so drunk
Tons of stress, fuck the ex, thoughts of her could make me throw up
Ya know what....life is shit, not a single part I like of it
Don't know why I try to fit this crinkled heart inside a pit
I'd rather die and quit instead of cry and spit, kill the waste
That's when I heard footsteps - Looked up at a familiar face

When two worlds get near, doesn't matter what'll happen next year
Interaction runs in patterns as if they had been here
While bonds from physics can overcome the longest distance
Meta-physical interests become the strongest visits

Her name was Cassie, a sassy sweetheart and damn was she smart
We split ways years back before life actually seemed hard
Her presence was divine essence, and I looked like a retard
Hugged me with gentle regard, perceptive discretion her keen art
Her touch - faith itself, reason to live, she whispered "What's wrong?"
Made me melt how she could just give, thought of us as dust, gone
But here she was, me, more than severely buzzed, can't undo
the fact I've had one too many drinks to think...."I love you"

A few things ooze out during volcanic activity
That's merely the world's smallest organic facsimile
Cause when balance is rough, the universe didn't plan it enough
In tight space, pressure builds until the planet erupts

She paused "....you're drunk.....sorry.....I've got a husband and kid
We live in different worlds now....this is all I can give"
Something cracked, I screamed in her face 'why won't you love me back,
you fucking hag!' tried to step forward with a lunge and grab
But booze stole the ground underneath, I fell into a jumbled heap

So dumb of me, in the haze she ran, don't know what to think
Nausea came, vomit forcing its way out as I'm calling her name
Damn, a ball and a chain? Ugh, I'm barely crawling away
She'll dwell on that hell tone, none of that is what I meant though
Is that her cell phone? Must have dropped in the rush when she went home

Black holes obscure mass, difficult to see a pure path
Even when wide worlds are directed towards a sure crash
The collision leaves craters, some deeper than others
But some dire damages can only be seen when they suffer

One Missed Call - Text Received 1:06 AM
I need you. Now. I'm outside our old spot. In the eyes of the world I've been blown off.
I hate to show you now that I'm so soft. But without you by my side I'm so lost.
Reply: I don't care, I'll always be here, I love you.
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[Wonderbred]

This is the Way the World Ends

2032
The world was at peace, the economy never better
Until U.S. politicians who thought they were fresh and clever
Cut off welfare and health care, every vestige severed
And made military budgets the most distended ever as a preemptive measure.

“We need, for the sake of defense, to craft rockets,” said veteran Sam Wallace,
Defense Secretary in the executive branch office
Sellin’ his plan off to execs with fat wallets, the men who staff Congress
While slippin’ their cash wads in the President’s back pocket

***

BREAKING NEWS! US oil companies merge to form a monopoly!
It’s more than a novelty, it’s horrible ‘cuz honestly
These fools have the power to destroy the economy
The market just rebounded, but see, now it’ll recoil and squash the plebs.

China didn’t like that, but they let the US slide instead of tryin’ to fight back
Tensions raised but heads of state tried to cut the wire slack
Till one day China’s prime minister got sniped at for making a wisecrack
Said, “Fine” as they fired back at Iraq and all the tension in the line snapped…

And with that wild blast the world plunged into a crisis
Pundits criticized it, Republicans denied it
Till the moon exploded, as they duly noted, from the junk they’d left inside it
Subsequent inquirin’ showed that governments had tried at least a hundred different kinds
of weapons bluntly meant for violence
Snow was lifted, poles were shifted, all of it resulted in destruction of the climates

Who started all the new disarray? Would it be too dense to say the US of A?
It was true either way, but Sam’s nukes kept at bay the brute rebel nations and the new friends they made
Till some stupid, insane dude in Kuwait thought to move and invade with bazookas, grenades
And got two tons of hate dropped on his home country; after that, nobody even knew of its name
It was a true fuckin’ shame, but after that things got out of hand
The nuclear experiment gone wrong, they leveled Hong Kong and plowed Japan
Countries used to fight and still proudly stand but now they can’t
‘Cuz they’re too busy askin’ how they plant anything on this brown-gray land…

***

Oil drillin’ was slow to cause the Earth’s foundation to wilt from below
Leaders still didn’t know the bombs would only deal the finishing blow...

***

Sam’s life flashed before his eyes, he tore his tie, lay on the floor and cried
As he bore the lies told to him by mortal guys on the borderlines of their tortured minds
As oceans opened wide and engulfed the sky
Leaving swarms to die, Christians thought it was Rapture
Scientists stopped in their tracks, tried to halt the advance of the particle blaster
The government fucks just covered it up, like, “This is not a disaster!”
Their avarice cost them their chance as they lost at the hands of all the attackers
And showed all the faults of the mass conglomerates, captured
In the fall of one man from the top of the planet to the bottom, in scraps, dirt
For it was not little Sam Wallace, but rather the stars with the last word
The human race had forgotten its past, all the laws and the standards and the progress of man’s work
And ironically that led it all the way back to where it started from scratch--with no gods and no masters...

***

2014
A man walked in and sat, solid in stature,
pulled out his charts and his maps, said to all of his staffers,
“We’ve got a new plan to hydraulically fracture,
The only problem is that it could possibly crack Earth”
They just wanted cheap gas, so those heartless old bastards just nodded in laughter,
Like, “This is probably bad, but does it honestly matter?”

***

A kid lay in his bed, shakin’ his head, remembered bad dreams
Where people would run out yelling, scratching,
A general mad scene where people would cause tremors, smash things
The moon was in bits, looked like a lunar eclipse. Did that mean their heads were lacking?
He’d had these messed-up fantasies since...he wasn’t sure when, exactly, but they always ended badly
He pointed at the moon, his voice was sad and spooked: “Will it be here forever, daddy?”
The dad looked at his kid, unsure of whether he was depressed or happy,
Turned his head, looked and said, “I’m no professor, Sammy.”

-----------------------------------------

Author's note: In case you don't know what hydraulic fracturing ("fracking") is, it's a common form of gas drilling that many people think is actually going to destroy the Earth's foundation eventually. Not to spread propaganda, just provide some context Good luck to everyone!

[Wonderbred]

This is the Way the World Ends

2032
The world was at peace, the economy never better
Until U.S. politicians who thought they were fresh and clever
Cut off welfare and health care, every vestige severed
And made military budgets the most distended ever as a preemptive measure.

“We need, for the sake of defense, to craft rockets,” said veteran Sam Wallace,
Defense Secretary in the executive branch office
Sellin’ his plan off to execs with fat wallets, the men who staff Congress
While slippin’ their cash wads in the President’s back pocket

***

BREAKING NEWS! US oil companies merge to form a monopoly!
It’s more than a novelty, it’s horrible ‘cuz honestly
These fools have the power to destroy the economy
The market just rebounded, but see, now it’ll recoil and squash the plebs.

China didn’t like that, but they let the US slide instead of tryin’ to fight back
Tensions raised but heads of state tried to cut the wire slack
Till one day China’s prime minister got sniped at for making a wisecrack
Said, “Fine” as they fired back at Iraq and all the tension in the line snapped…

And with that wild blast the world plunged into a crisis
Pundits criticized it, Republicans denied it
Till the moon exploded, as they duly noted, from the junk they’d left inside it
Subsequent inquirin’ showed that governments had tried at least a hundred different kinds
of weapons bluntly meant for violence
Snow was lifted, poles were shifted, all of it resulted in destruction of the climates

Who started all the new disarray? Would it be too dense to say the US of A?
It was true either way, but Sam’s nukes kept at bay the brute rebel nations and the new friends they made
Till some stupid, insane dude in Kuwait thought to move and invade with bazookas, grenades
And got two tons of hate dropped on his home country; after that, nobody even knew of its name
It was a true fuckin’ shame, but after that things got out of hand
The nuclear experiment gone wrong, they leveled Hong Kong and plowed Japan
Countries used to fight and still proudly stand but now they can’t
‘Cuz they’re too busy askin’ how they plant anything on this brown-gray land…

***

Oil drillin’ was slow to cause the Earth’s foundation to wilt from below
Leaders still didn’t know the bombs would only deal the finishing blow...

***

Sam’s life flashed before his eyes, he tore his tie, lay on the floor and cried
As he bore the lies told to him by mortal guys on the borderlines of their tortured minds
As oceans opened wide and engulfed the sky
Leaving swarms to die, Christians thought it was Rapture
Scientists stopped in their tracks, tried to halt the advance of the particle blaster
The government fucks just covered it up, like, “This is not a disaster!”
Their avarice cost them their chance as they lost at the hands of all the attackers
And showed all the faults of the mass conglomerates, captured
In the fall of one man from the top of the planet to the bottom, in scraps, dirt
For it was not little Sam Wallace, but rather the stars with the last word
The human race had forgotten its past, all the laws and the standards and the progress of man’s work
And ironically that led it all the way back to where it started from scratch--with no gods and no masters...

***

2014
A man walked in and sat, solid in stature,
pulled out his charts and his maps, said to all of his staffers,
“We’ve got a new plan to hydraulically fracture,
The only problem is that it could possibly crack Earth”
They just wanted cheap gas, so those heartless old bastards just nodded in laughter,
Like, “This is probably bad, but does it honestly matter?”

***

A kid lay in his bed, shakin’ his head, remembered bad dreams
Where people would run out yelling, scratching,
A general mad scene where people would cause tremors, smash things
The moon was in bits, looked like a lunar eclipse. Did that mean their heads were lacking?
He’d had these messed-up fantasies since...he wasn’t sure when, exactly, but they always ended badly
He pointed at the moon, his voice was sad and spooked: “Will it be here forever, daddy?”
The dad looked at his kid, unsure of whether he was depressed or happy,
Turned his head, looked and said, “I’m no professor, Sammy.”

-----------------------------------------

Author's note: In case you don't know what hydraulic fracturing ("fracking") is, it's a common form of gas drilling that many people think is actually going to destroy the Earth's foundation eventually. Not to spread propaganda, just provide some context Good luck to everyone!

This, without a shadow of a doubt, was an absolutely AMAZING Final. All three of you did exceptionally well, but alas, there can only be one winner.

MUGGZ: The fact that you portrayed yourself as the planet itself seemed to be quite challenging, but you did very well in that perspective. I felt that some of your rhyming in spots was a bit shaky and it took away from the flow and the story itself, but it was nothing major enough to where you completely lose points in areas and cost yourself the Final. Overall this was a very solid topical.

Dono: The analogy you used of comparing someone's life crashing down around them to the Earth pretty much destroying itself was pretty hard to do as well, but I felt you illustrated both masterfully by comparing both story lines to each other. I felt the concept of the guy losing the battle to alcohol may have been a little bit overdone and used before, but still very nice work. You put a couple new spins to it.

McJewFro: I felt you did an outstanding job of comparing the end of the world to World War 3 and having it have an Armageddon type feel to it. Definitely a good job in terms of imagery and showing different timelines when it comes to actions happening. I felt that in some areas, your flow was a bit iffy and I mean this by a couple stanzas were a little bit more verbose than others, but it didn't effect how your story was told and how it made it's impact. Great ending, by the way.

Overall: These 3 topicals were completely amazing, but I'm going to give the edge here to : @mcjewfro

Shout outs as well to @Dono and @Muggz. This was completely incredible.

This, without a shadow of a doubt, was an absolutely AMAZING Final. All three of you did exceptionally well, but alas, there can only be one winner.

MUGGZ: The fact that you portrayed yourself as the planet itself seemed to be quite challenging, but you did very well in that perspective. I felt that some of your rhyming in spots was a bit shaky and it took away from the flow and the story itself, but it was nothing major enough to where you completely lose points in areas and cost yourself the Final. Overall this was a very solid topical.

Dono: The analogy you used of comparing someone's life crashing down around them to the Earth pretty much destroying itself was pretty hard to do as well, but I felt you illustrated both masterfully by comparing both story lines to each other. I felt the concept of the guy losing the battle to alcohol may have been a little bit overdone and used before, but still very nice work. You put a couple new spins to it.

McJewFro: I felt you did an outstanding job of comparing the end of the world to World War 3 and having it have an Armageddon type feel to it. Definitely a good job in terms of imagery and showing different timelines when it comes to actions happening. I felt that in some areas, your flow was a bit iffy and I mean this by a couple stanzas were a little bit more verbose than others, but it didn't effect how your story was told and how it made it's impact. Great ending, by the way.

Overall: These 3 topicals were completely amazing, but I'm going to give the edge here to : @mcjewfro

Shout outs as well to @Dono and @Muggz. This was completely incredible.

[RULE]

Muggz: Im torn because i thought your concept was crack. Really liked the angle you took with the POV being the actual planet. Had a few flow issues and the wording was a lil iffy in places but the quality of the concept and overall piece was very high.

Dono: I dunno what to say tbh. Thought that was probably one of the most well written topicals ive read on LB, the poetic elements and structure was top notch. Soo much replay value. The flow was soo tight bordering on great. On the negative i thought it was a little it too obscure in places, the way an author might flex his penmanship in a way that is impressive as a feat but harmful to the story being told. That being said... still one of the top 5 Topicals ive read on LB.

mcjewfro: Thanks alot. After Donos verse i thought this would be straight forward and then you go and drop this. Conceptually a more simplistic route but damn was the execution great. The realism in the piece made it even more potent. Not only that but the flow was really dope. Maybe a couple wording issues here and there but a great piece. right up there with the best ive read on here.

Overall: No offence to Muggz, but this turned into a straight two horse way to me between Dono and mcjewfro. Im torn between Dono's poetic and unique verse and mcjewfros great narrative and realism. Ive said all i can about the verses, and this vote is one i am pained to make. Really had to go with the one that i connected with the most. Fantastic final gents.

My vote goes to: @mcjewfro.

1/

[RULE]

Muggz: Im torn because i thought your concept was crack. Really liked the angle you took with the POV being the actual planet. Had a few flow issues and the wording was a lil iffy in places but the quality of the concept and overall piece was very high.

Dono: I dunno what to say tbh. Thought that was probably one of the most well written topicals ive read on LB, the poetic elements and structure was top notch. Soo much replay value. The flow was soo tight bordering on great. On the negative i thought it was a little it too obscure in places, the way an author might flex his penmanship in a way that is impressive as a feat but harmful to the story being told. That being said... still one of the top 5 Topicals ive read on LB.

mcjewfro: Thanks alot. After Donos verse i thought this would be straight forward and then you go and drop this. Conceptually a more simplistic route but damn was the execution great. The realism in the piece made it even more potent. Not only that but the flow was really dope. Maybe a couple wording issues here and there but a great piece. right up there with the best ive read on here.

Overall: No offence to Muggz, but this turned into a straight two horse way to me between Dono and mcjewfro. Im torn between Dono's poetic and unique verse and mcjewfros great narrative and realism. Ive said all i can about the verses, and this vote is one i am pained to make. Really had to go with the one that i connected with the most. Fantastic final gents.

My vote goes to: @mcjewfro.

1/

Yo, really dope topicals here guys.

Muggs: I liked the point of view used here and the rhymes were ok but as I read the next two verses I felt that they had something on you in both the flow and storytelling aspect. A good stand alone piece but this was a threeway of some very nice writing. I would put you in 3rd place of the 3.

Dono: As always rhyme and flow were on point but I am starting to feel like your pieces are very DONO-y. Like I feel like I could pick out one of your verses from a crowed and that isn't necessarily a bad thing but I wasn't hit with that refreshing feeling of this is something new and unfamiliar. That said I like the direction you took with the topical a lot and how you thought outside the parameters of the picture and turned this into something different. I especially liked your last stanza and how the piece ended. Big ups for that.

McJewFro: Damn son. The rhyme and flow in this piece was top notch. Story was executed smoothly and really carried me through the whole poem. Those rhymes and relevancy were crazy through out. Not once did I feel like a rhyme was forced. I was blown away by this and can't give you enough kudos. Very pleasantly surprised.

Winner: McJewFro

Yo, really dope topicals here guys.

Muggs: I liked the point of view used here and the rhymes were ok but as I read the next two verses I felt that they had something on you in both the flow and storytelling aspect. A good stand alone piece but this was a threeway of some very nice writing. I would put you in 3rd place of the 3.

Dono: As always rhyme and flow were on point but I am starting to feel like your pieces are very DONO-y. Like I feel like I could pick out one of your verses from a crowed and that isn't necessarily a bad thing but I wasn't hit with that refreshing feeling of this is something new and unfamiliar. That said I like the direction you took with the topical a lot and how you thought outside the parameters of the picture and turned this into something different. I especially liked your last stanza and how the piece ended. Big ups for that.

McJewFro: Damn son. The rhyme and flow in this piece was top notch. Story was executed smoothly and really carried me through the whole poem. Those rhymes and relevancy were crazy through out. Not once did I feel like a rhyme was forced. I was blown away by this and can't give you enough kudos. Very pleasantly surprised.

Winner: McJewFro

[Manhattan]

Holy shit fellas...Dope final match here

Muggz- I really liked the pov style of your verse. Felt that your rhymes were decent but could of been executed better. The story was a tad bit bland at some parts but overall you got your point across and for the most part painted a nice picture w/ your imagery.

Dono- This was a really nice topical from you, I liked what you did w/ the picture at hand when you created your idea for the concept behind it all. The story telling and rhymes were on point here. Your imagery is always top notch and the whole topical was well written here.

mcjewfro- I was extremely surprised here...never read a topical from you. Very well written and all of the multis connected..(Nothing forced or random) I felt you told the best story w/ the way you were trying to get your point across. One of the nicest I've ever read on here.

Good shit Muggz....This was extremely close between Dono and mcjewfro. I chose my winner based on the fact that I was simply feeling his story more here.

MVGT- mcjewfro

[Manhattan]

Holy shit fellas...Dope final match here

Muggz- I really liked the pov style of your verse. Felt that your rhymes were decent but could of been executed better. The story was a tad bit bland at some parts but overall you got your point across and for the most part painted a nice picture w/ your imagery.

Dono- This was a really nice topical from you, I liked what you did w/ the picture at hand when you created your idea for the concept behind it all. The story telling and rhymes were on point here. Your imagery is always top notch and the whole topical was well written here.

mcjewfro- I was extremely surprised here...never read a topical from you. Very well written and all of the multis connected..(Nothing forced or random) I felt you told the best story w/ the way you were trying to get your point across. One of the nicest I've ever read on here.

Good shit Muggz....This was extremely close between Dono and mcjewfro. I chose my winner based on the fact that I was simply feeling his story more here.

MVGT- mcjewfro

[The Ghost of Freak]

This was a GREAT triple grand champ TOPICAL battle! Real close and real good work by all competitors, making for all around good reads.

1st @M U G G Z , I enjoyed and appreciated your narrative coming from the perspective of being the planet. You captured the social and ecological damages that humans inflict upon our world. Rhyme scheme was solid. I thought you also did very well capturing the image… arguably the best on that point. You wrote a real solid and enjoyable topical piece… props.

2nd @Dono , I enjoyed the analogy between relational impasses/failures and the image/idea of worlds colliding. Very interesting interpretation that was unique. I think you have super solid scheme structure from your long experience, but felt that some lines were more forced into the topic than others. I feel as if your italic lines having to do more with the image took a secondary status to the relational part, which was where you took a risk of thinking outside the face value of the given image…. sort of a double edged sword. Yet, your topical pieces are always enjoyable, so props regardless.

3rd @mcjewfro , I think you captured the best of both worlds with your piece giving you an edge over your two topical opponents. You captured the social, political, and ecological nature of the planet's destruction, but did so while including a narrative from the perspective of this individual Defense Secretary, Sam Wallace. I feel your rhyme scheme was solid, but maybe could have been presented differently as far as formatting is concerned (but I am not factoring that into my vote too much). Really nice read, well done sir.

MVGT @mcjewfro

[The Ghost of Freak]

This was a GREAT triple grand champ TOPICAL battle! Real close and real good work by all competitors, making for all around good reads.

1st @M U G G Z , I enjoyed and appreciated your narrative coming from the perspective of being the planet. You captured the social and ecological damages that humans inflict upon our world. Rhyme scheme was solid. I thought you also did very well capturing the image… arguably the best on that point. You wrote a real solid and enjoyable topical piece… props.

2nd @Dono , I enjoyed the analogy between relational impasses/failures and the image/idea of worlds colliding. Very interesting interpretation that was unique. I think you have super solid scheme structure from your long experience, but felt that some lines were more forced into the topic than others. I feel as if your italic lines having to do more with the image took a secondary status to the relational part, which was where you took a risk of thinking outside the face value of the given image…. sort of a double edged sword. Yet, your topical pieces are always enjoyable, so props regardless.

3rd @mcjewfro , I think you captured the best of both worlds with your piece giving you an edge over your two topical opponents. You captured the social, political, and ecological nature of the planet's destruction, but did so while including a narrative from the perspective of this individual Defense Secretary, Sam Wallace. I feel your rhyme scheme was solid, but maybe could have been presented differently as far as formatting is concerned (but I am not factoring that into my vote too much). Really nice read, well done sir.

MVGT @mcjewfro

[Dono]

Congrats @mcjewfro

Told you buddy.

[Dono]

Congrats @mcjewfro

Told you buddy.