Round 1: Beyond Lunatic Vs God G Kool (God G Kool Wins 5-2)

Beyond Lunatic Vs God G Kool
Letsbeef Topical Tournament 2011 Round 1

House Rules Apply. Any questions, contact me.

CHECK INS ARE DUE FRIDAY (09-16-11) AT 11:59PM PST. VERSES ARE DUE WEDNESDAY (09-21-11) AT 11:59PM. NO EXCEPTIONS.
(Note: Deadlines are 1 week due to Sandman's tournament round. Other rounds will be shorter)

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Voting Rubix
Rhyming Scheme/Flow
Vocabulary
Topic/Meaning
Storytelling/Progression
Emotion
Imagery
Poetic Techniques
Ending

GOOD LUCK

Beyond Lunatic Vs God G Kool
Letsbeef Topical Tournament 2011 Round 1

House Rules Apply. Any questions, contact me.

CHECK INS ARE DUE FRIDAY (09-16-11) AT 11:59PM PST. VERSES ARE DUE WEDNESDAY (09-21-11) AT 11:59PM. NO EXCEPTIONS.
(Note: Deadlines are 1 week due to Sandman's tournament round. Other rounds will be shorter)

Line Length: 20-40 lines.



Voting Rubix
Rhyming Scheme/Flow
Vocabulary
Topic/Meaning
Storytelling/Progression
Emotion
Imagery
Poetic Techniques
Ending

GOOD LUCK

[Eye G]

bump this.....Up

[Eye G]

bump this.....Up

[Beyond Lunatic]

''Colors Of Hope To Heaven Bridge''

As A Human,You Left Me Lonely & Reclusive In This Earth/Then
As A Creature,My Analysis Identified Animal's Words Through Heart/
I Philosophize To Illustrate Prefect Virtuous Fiction To Heaven/
Where Me And My Pet-Friend;Gratify The Moment 247;No 9/11/
It Aint Hood;It's All Good;Bush Approach Obama To Forgive Laden/
This Is What I Dream;More Materialize Less Abstract/
Love Is Felt Rather Than Deep-Thinkin' And Attract/
Im Stompin Feet Of Yeti But My Egotistical Wont Be Killin' Insects/
My Best-Homie Was My Dog;I Was Bitchless for Chillin' Impress/
Without A Surname;He Goes By The Name Of ''Blood''/
We Were Close-To-End Like Haemoglobin & Vein On Drugs/
Friendship Is Perceived By Inner Sense;Dedicates An Eternal Consciousness/
Jay-Z Phrase We ''Young Forever'' But ''99 Problems'' Of Death Took My Acquaintance/
My Dawg Aparted Away Before Joy Of Adolescents/
''Blood'' Is Gone So How Can This Boy Be Convalescent/
He Was A Real Dog To Life;Aint No Bitch/
Impeccable Soul Migrated Him To Rainbow Bridge/So
Still He Is Delighted Now;Even Smile On Tears/
He Was My Domestic Now Im Wild N' Rare/
I Missed The Word Spoke Through Language Of Heart/
I Wish I Be There With You;God,Please Reincarnate My Birth/
Dragin Our Past;We'll Be Livin To Heave-&-Play Together/
Reminiscencin Those Days In The Street-All-Day Together/
Past Is Hopeless;I Cant Bring It Back;I Just Remember That/
Future Is Faith So I Desire To Cross That Rainbow Bridge Together Fast/

[Beyond Lunatic]

''Colors Of Hope To Heaven Bridge''

As A Human,You Left Me Lonely & Reclusive In This Earth/Then
As A Creature,My Analysis Identified Animal's Words Through Heart/
I Philosophize To Illustrate Prefect Virtuous Fiction To Heaven/
Where Me And My Pet-Friend;Gratify The Moment 247;No 9/11/
It Aint Hood;It's All Good;Bush Approach Obama To Forgive Laden/
This Is What I Dream;More Materialize Less Abstract/
Love Is Felt Rather Than Deep-Thinkin' And Attract/
Im Stompin Feet Of Yeti But My Egotistical Wont Be Killin' Insects/
My Best-Homie Was My Dog;I Was Bitchless for Chillin' Impress/
Without A Surname;He Goes By The Name Of ''Blood''/
We Were Close-To-End Like Haemoglobin & Vein On Drugs/
Friendship Is Perceived By Inner Sense;Dedicates An Eternal Consciousness/
Jay-Z Phrase We ''Young Forever'' But ''99 Problems'' Of Death Took My Acquaintance/
My Dawg Aparted Away Before Joy Of Adolescents/
''Blood'' Is Gone So How Can This Boy Be Convalescent/
He Was A Real Dog To Life;Aint No Bitch/
Impeccable Soul Migrated Him To Rainbow Bridge/So
Still He Is Delighted Now;Even Smile On Tears/
He Was My Domestic Now Im Wild N' Rare/
I Missed The Word Spoke Through Language Of Heart/
I Wish I Be There With You;God,Please Reincarnate My Birth/
Dragin Our Past;We'll Be Livin To Heave-&-Play Together/
Reminiscencin Those Days In The Street-All-Day Together/
Past Is Hopeless;I Cant Bring It Back;I Just Remember That/
Future Is Faith So I Desire To Cross That Rainbow Bridge Together Fast/

[Beyond Lunatic]

there you go..g'luck!!

[Beyond Lunatic]

there you go..g'luck!!

[Eye G]

...::Freedom to live::.....


all my feelings and emotions are flowing in a creek,
structural demise, but my soul is going thru new crib,
i feel so good that theirs no agony and pain in ma life,
now ma views and desires won't end in a vain, coz i see light,
that illuminates the path that i was willing to walk,
all those wounds caused by old memories are filling w/a chalk,
i never expected my life to be colorful like rainbow
this beauty hits ma psyche and hormones inside ma vein flow,
the sky is shining w/the groups of stars,
now i don't have to work hard w/ soldiers troops on wars,
theres only one best path to follow,
walking along new friends thru the bridge chasing apollo,
now i see the peace and beautiful life outta earth,
for a second when i reminisce the past, i feel like why i took the birth,
now i please to the god, not to make me lil wayne i need no rebirth,
coz living on that planet theres no extention of lives it never worth,
theires no lives for we animals, coz we are governed by humane,
we are the victims of the society they blew our brain...
i'm buzy at the work so i couldnot drop hard,
but don't worry i'll illuminate this picture on next bar...

[Eye G]

...::Freedom to live::.....


all my feelings and emotions are flowing in a creek,
structural demise, but my soul is going thru new crib,
i feel so good that theirs no agony and pain in ma life,
now ma views and desires won't end in a vain, coz i see light,
that illuminates the path that i was willing to walk,
all those wounds caused by old memories are filling w/a chalk,
i never expected my life to be colorful like rainbow
this beauty hits ma psyche and hormones inside ma vein flow,
the sky is shining w/the groups of stars,
now i don't have to work hard w/ soldiers troops on wars,
theres only one best path to follow,
walking along new friends thru the bridge chasing apollo,
now i see the peace and beautiful life outta earth,
for a second when i reminisce the past, i feel like why i took the birth,
now i please to the god, not to make me lil wayne i need no rebirth,
coz living on that planet theres no extention of lives it never worth,
theires no lives for we animals, coz we are governed by humane,
we are the victims of the society they blew our brain...
i'm buzy at the work so i couldnot drop hard,
but don't worry i'll illuminate this picture on next bar...

[Beyond Lunatic]

Bumpin!!!!!!!!!!

[Beyond Lunatic]

Bumpin!!!!!!!!!!

[IV]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow--- parts of lunatics flowed really nice, but Kool was more consistent- kool
Vocabulary- lunatic, very complex, nice
Topic/Meaning- Lunatic, liked the dead dog route, sad though..
Storytelling/Progression- lunatic had a clearer storyline
Emotion- both very emotional, but lunatic
Imagery- lunatic
Poetic Techniques- lunatic showed it wasn't all about a perfect rhyme structure
Ending- Kool your ending was funny, could tell it wasn't your best and you wanted to drop. Lunatic i liked your ending

Overall- Lunatic i think your verse was emotional, different, and articulate. Although it didn't flow or rhyme perfectly it still had a good impact with a clear story line. Kool your verse was emotional and rhymed well, flowed nicely, not much of a story line/progression and think you could have done better.

Vote- Beyond Lunatic

[IV]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow--- parts of lunatics flowed really nice, but Kool was more consistent- kool
Vocabulary- lunatic, very complex, nice
Topic/Meaning- Lunatic, liked the dead dog route, sad though..
Storytelling/Progression- lunatic had a clearer storyline
Emotion- both very emotional, but lunatic
Imagery- lunatic
Poetic Techniques- lunatic showed it wasn't all about a perfect rhyme structure
Ending- Kool your ending was funny, could tell it wasn't your best and you wanted to drop. Lunatic i liked your ending

Overall- Lunatic i think your verse was emotional, different, and articulate. Although it didn't flow or rhyme perfectly it still had a good impact with a clear story line. Kool your verse was emotional and rhymed well, flowed nicely, not much of a story line/progression and think you could have done better.

Vote- Beyond Lunatic

[ozark]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow- imma go with G on this, his flowed a lil better imo
Vocabulary- beyond got this cata, though g had nice usage also
Topic/Meaning- i liked g's direction a bit more, but luna had a great read also
Storytelling/Progression- both had nice reads imo so tie
Emotion- luna had more emotion imo- but g didnt lack much
Imagery- luna- painted a better picture imo
Poetict Techniques- im caught on this one, both good imo
Ending- i liked gs ending more tbh- great from both though- keep it up- gl to both

Mvgt GGK

[ozark]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow- imma go with G on this, his flowed a lil better imo
Vocabulary- beyond got this cata, though g had nice usage also
Topic/Meaning- i liked g's direction a bit more, but luna had a great read also
Storytelling/Progression- both had nice reads imo so tie
Emotion- luna had more emotion imo- but g didnt lack much
Imagery- luna- painted a better picture imo
Poetict Techniques- im caught on this one, both good imo
Ending- i liked gs ending more tbh- great from both though- keep it up- gl to both

Mvgt GGK

[Luke Eamiah]

rhyme scheme and flow- G was flowing a little more clearly imo
Vocab- Beyond was real deep with the vocab. Gotta go with him.
Topic- I liked G's idea more BUT he didn't really illustrate it. Giving it to Beyond
Emotion- I thought G was almost like a cypher the last bit. so i have to give the heartfelt emotion to beyond
storytelling- I have to give this to beyond since G was a little over the place.
Imagery- as to having the picture painted in my head, beyond tried to be to complex so the picture wasn't real visible. going with G on this one.
Poetic technique- this is where Beyond excelled imo
Ending- was loving G till the ending bar.... like he just used a filler. Giving it to beyond

Overall- Great battle. First topical ever so you guys are going to help me alot getting into it myself. Both used skill and thought to try to formulate a hard hitting, emotional verse. Although it was close, I think one edged a bit more due to a few things.

vote- Beyond lunatic

[Luke Eamiah]

rhyme scheme and flow- G was flowing a little more clearly imo
Vocab- Beyond was real deep with the vocab. Gotta go with him.
Topic- I liked G's idea more BUT he didn't really illustrate it. Giving it to Beyond
Emotion- I thought G was almost like a cypher the last bit. so i have to give the heartfelt emotion to beyond
storytelling- I have to give this to beyond since G was a little over the place.
Imagery- as to having the picture painted in my head, beyond tried to be to complex so the picture wasn't real visible. going with G on this one.
Poetic technique- this is where Beyond excelled imo
Ending- was loving G till the ending bar.... like he just used a filler. Giving it to beyond

Overall- Great battle. First topical ever so you guys are going to help me alot getting into it myself. Both used skill and thought to try to formulate a hard hitting, emotional verse. Although it was close, I think one edged a bit more due to a few things.

vote- Beyond lunatic

[Eye G]

was going to give a deep thought but was at work .....so couldn't do so.././///thanks newayz appreciate it,.....as i told .....i'm buzy at the work so i couldnot drop hard,
but don't worry i'll illuminate this picture on next bar..........i'll picture out next 16/32lines on the same thing but not for battle....

[Eye G]

was going to give a deep thought but was at work .....so couldn't do so.././///thanks newayz appreciate it,.....as i told .....i'm buzy at the work so i couldnot drop hard,
but don't worry i'll illuminate this picture on next bar..........i'll picture out next 16/32lines on the same thing but not for battle....