TalkSick vs NelSyn (Round 1) NelSyn wins! - Page 2 - Lets Beef

**NelSyn** · #11 03-11-2012, 09:01 PM

Finally! People vote please!

**NelSyn** · 03-11-2012, 09:01 PM

Finally! People vote please!

IV · #12 03-12-2012, 04:40 AM

Thanks for both submitting! Open for votes! Good luck!

IV · 03-12-2012, 04:40 AM

Thanks for both submitting! Open for votes! Good luck!

**B U R D E N** · #13 03-12-2012, 05:39 AM

Rhyming Scheme/Flow- Talk
Vocabulary- NelSyn.. TS had some good vocab too but NelSyn got it
Topic/Meaning- NelSyn
Storytelling/Progression- NelSyn
Emotion- imo Talk Edged it
Imagery- NelSyn
Poetic Techniques- i think Talk stood out a little more here
Ending- NelSyn

Both were good.. no doubt. NelSyn seemed to have a better ending which helped him get this win if you ask me. Good read for sure

**B U R D E N** · 03-12-2012, 05:39 AM

Rhyming Scheme/Flow- Talk
Vocabulary- NelSyn.. TS had some good vocab too but NelSyn got it
Topic/Meaning- NelSyn
Storytelling/Progression- NelSyn
Emotion- imo Talk Edged it
Imagery- NelSyn
Poetic Techniques- i think Talk stood out a little more here
Ending- NelSyn

Both were good.. no doubt. NelSyn seemed to have a better ending which helped him get this win if you ask me. Good read for sure

**Revan** · #14 03-12-2012, 10:39 AM

Rhyming Scheme/Flow - TalkSick
Vocabulary - TalkSick
Topic/Meaning - NelSyn
Storytelling/Progression - NelSyn
Emotion - TalkSick
Imagery - TIE
Poetic Techniques - NelSyn
Ending - TIE

After reading i came down to a simple feeling from both verses. Silk - I think you were overwhelmed by your choice of techniques, in simple terms i think you werent skilled enough to pull of your intended execution, and as a side note you had some really forced rhymes which hurt your verse hard. Talk - You were the opposite, i think you executed it well but you didnt break as much ground or attempt to like Silk did. To me Silk SHOULD of took it but too many issued in his execution led me to go with Talk's better executed verse.

MVGT: TalkSick.

**Revan** · 03-12-2012, 10:39 AM

Rhyming Scheme/Flow - TalkSick
Vocabulary - TalkSick
Topic/Meaning - NelSyn
Storytelling/Progression - NelSyn
Emotion - TalkSick
Imagery - TIE
Poetic Techniques - NelSyn
Ending - TIE

After reading i came down to a simple feeling from both verses. Silk - I think you were overwhelmed by your choice of techniques, in simple terms i think you werent skilled enough to pull of your intended execution, and as a side note you had some really forced rhymes which hurt your verse hard. Talk - You were the opposite, i think you executed it well but you didnt break as much ground or attempt to like Silk did. To me Silk SHOULD of took it but too many issued in his execution led me to go with Talk's better executed verse.

MVGT: TalkSick.

**NelSyn** · #15 03-13-2012, 12:10 AM

1-1 keep 'em coming!

**NelSyn** · 03-13-2012, 12:10 AM

1-1 keep 'em coming!

IV · #16 03-13-2012, 04:32 AM

As the votes are split so far, first to 5 votes wins

IV · 03-13-2012, 04:32 AM

As the votes are split so far, first to 5 votes wins

**TalkSick** · #17 03-13-2012, 08:41 PM

bump bump bmo

**TalkSick** · 03-13-2012, 08:41 PM

bump bump bmo

**Prose_** · #18 03-13-2012, 09:12 PM

Voting Rubix
Rhyming Scheme/Flow- Nelson, more complex scheme with smoother flow slightly
Vocabulary- this one goes to Nelson. higher syllable count and less simpleness in his multies.
Topic/Meaning- Talksick really gave me the image of the creature with the man lying unconscious from start to finish. really was on top of the meaning.
Storytelling/Progression- this one is a tie. one explain the events of a man walking into a room looking at horrors in just but a few lines and progressed it easily to years later in again just a few lines without overdoing it. the other displayed great action progression.
Emotion- this one is a tie. again it a kind of deepness vs. action and emotion doesnt neccessarily mean which topical verse is more sadder.
Imagery- have to swing this to Talk. he described the environment of the scene more indepthly
Poetic Techniques- Nelson felt a few rhyming schemes and a similie or two edged it.
Ending- Nelson his was less cliche.

overall looking at my rubric id say Nelsyn got this. was a great battle.

**Prose_** · 03-13-2012, 09:12 PM

Voting Rubix
Rhyming Scheme/Flow- Nelson, more complex scheme with smoother flow slightly
Vocabulary- this one goes to Nelson. higher syllable count and less simpleness in his multies.
Topic/Meaning- Talksick really gave me the image of the creature with the man lying unconscious from start to finish. really was on top of the meaning.
Storytelling/Progression- this one is a tie. one explain the events of a man walking into a room looking at horrors in just but a few lines and progressed it easily to years later in again just a few lines without overdoing it. the other displayed great action progression.
Emotion- this one is a tie. again it a kind of deepness vs. action and emotion doesnt neccessarily mean which topical verse is more sadder.
Imagery- have to swing this to Talk. he described the environment of the scene more indepthly
Poetic Techniques- Nelson felt a few rhyming schemes and a similie or two edged it.
Ending- Nelson his was less cliche.

overall looking at my rubric id say Nelsyn got this. was a great battle.

**-RED-BARON-** · #19 03-13-2012, 09:29 PM

Voting -
RHYME SCHEME/FLOW - TALKSICK
VOCABULARY - NELSON
TOPIC/MEANING - NELSON - this was a hard one to follow, it was a pretty in depth story, almost summarized the movie in his own twisted metaphoric ways.
STORY TELLING/PROGRESSION - NELSON - he gave a whole background story describing the creatures way of being, and used metaphors to describe the planet as well as death.
EMOTION - TALK SICK
IMAGERY - TALK SICK
POETIC TECHNIQUES - Nelson had me feeling more 'as if I was placed in the situation' whereas the other starts at being close to death and ends being close to death.
ENDING - NELSON, his originality and use of metaphors to describe the situation at the end worked for him.

I READ BOTH THESE 4 TIMES EACH. IT WAS REALLY NECK N' NECK..
but Overall NELSON got it with the in depth background story/descriptions using metaphors.

GREAT BATTLE BOTH OF YOU, I REALLY ENJOYED READING THEM n VOTING ON MY FIRST TOPICAL BATTLE.

**-RED-BARON-** · 03-13-2012, 09:29 PM

Voting -
RHYME SCHEME/FLOW - TALKSICK
VOCABULARY - NELSON
TOPIC/MEANING - NELSON - this was a hard one to follow, it was a pretty in depth story, almost summarized the movie in his own twisted metaphoric ways.
STORY TELLING/PROGRESSION - NELSON - he gave a whole background story describing the creatures way of being, and used metaphors to describe the planet as well as death.
EMOTION - TALK SICK
IMAGERY - TALK SICK
POETIC TECHNIQUES - Nelson had me feeling more 'as if I was placed in the situation' whereas the other starts at being close to death and ends being close to death.
ENDING - NELSON, his originality and use of metaphors to describe the situation at the end worked for him.

I READ BOTH THESE 4 TIMES EACH. IT WAS REALLY NECK N' NECK..
but Overall NELSON got it with the in depth background story/descriptions using metaphors.

GREAT BATTLE BOTH OF YOU, I REALLY ENJOYED READING THEM n VOTING ON MY FIRST TOPICAL BATTLE.

IV · #20 03-14-2012, 08:14 PM

Going to close the round with 3-1 to NelSyn. Nelsyn wins! TalkSick will be first reserve for any drop outs from the tournament. Good battle/

IV · 03-14-2012, 08:14 PM

Going to close the round with 3-1 to NelSyn. Nelsyn wins! TalkSick will be first reserve for any drop outs from the tournament. Good battle/


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