"Holding On" new track

[Phroxen]

Decent shit here.. the hook was hideous but the verses were straight. Just try not to sound too whiney if you're going for emotional lyrics. It has to sound real, and hearing a grown man, I'm assuming, talking about crying when he's under the covers doesn't sound right... especially how it was worded. Also, watch the placement of your multies & how far you stretch them... because when they're thrown in combos like the end of your second verse, with no real flow to them, the lyrics just get drowned out. You've got talent, you just need to polish a few things.

[Phroxen]

Decent shit here.. the hook was hideous but the verses were straight. Just try not to sound too whiney if you're going for emotional lyrics. It has to sound real, and hearing a grown man, I'm assuming, talking about crying when he's under the covers doesn't sound right... especially how it was worded. Also, watch the placement of your multies & how far you stretch them... because when they're thrown in combos like the end of your second verse, with no real flow to them, the lyrics just get drowned out. You've got talent, you just need to polish a few things.