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Topical Tournament RD3: Intricate_Skillz (winner) vs Black-Book (loser)
TOPICAL TOURNAMENT 2011 ROUND 3
Intricate_Skillz Vs Black-Book
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Voting Rubix
Rhyming Scheme/Flow
Vocabulary
Topic/Meaning
Storytelling/Progression
Emotion
Imagery
Poetic Techniques
Ending
GOOD LUCK
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Topical Tournament RD3: Intricate_Skillz (winner) vs Black-Book (loser)
TOPICAL TOURNAMENT 2011 ROUND 3
Intricate_Skillz Vs Black-Book
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CHECK INS ARE DUE FRIDAY (10-07-11) AT 11:59PM EST. VERSES ARE DUE SUNDAY (10-09-11) AT 11:59PM. EST. NO EXCEPTIONS.
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Voting Rubix
Rhyming Scheme/Flow
Vocabulary
Topic/Meaning
Storytelling/Progression
Emotion
Imagery
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GOOD LUCK
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"WINDOW TO THE SOUL"
It is believed that your eyes are inlets to your soul,
Windows of emotion, beyond a broken frame, lyes a viewers hold,
Its clear to see, this mans trapped in despair, the path to his lair,
Behind glasses, which work as a 2-way mirror,*
shards are torn, as lifes image is impaired,
The torment is clear, as flames rage his hearts lustic passion,
A lover with shatterd hopes, through a jagged lens, an optic fashion,
He stands in awe, as flashback visions pervade his mind,
To a time when their love was new, without a hinderance to find,
The visions took him back, to a place where warmth was felt in a touch,
A gush of emotion, taken in stride, never overwhelmd in a rush,
Love was embraced by youth, and tender feelings,
Bound by flesh and immortalized by kindred dealings,
Their journeys commence was sealed with a kiss,
But the years aged this bond, hatred became of the bliss,
Through time, with swift passing, their love shared was dearly missed,
Unseen by psychic eyes, the devotion was severed by tough faults,*
Feelings expressed in hallway notions, came to an abrupt hault,
Now silence portrays his life, his wife no longer finds interest *in conversation,
His heart cries out in his souls voice, his anger is humbled by patience,
His memories past, breaks through the barriers*of this mirrors glass, a second glance,
New flowers bloom on this tainted romance, another chance,
To breake free from his tortured hearts hold,*
He snaps out of his trance, and his love returns, to fix the broken window to his soul-
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"WINDOW TO THE SOUL"
It is believed that your eyes are inlets to your soul,
Windows of emotion, beyond a broken frame, lyes a viewers hold,
Its clear to see, this mans trapped in despair, the path to his lair,
Behind glasses, which work as a 2-way mirror,*
shards are torn, as lifes image is impaired,
The torment is clear, as flames rage his hearts lustic passion,
A lover with shatterd hopes, through a jagged lens, an optic fashion,
He stands in awe, as flashback visions pervade his mind,
To a time when their love was new, without a hinderance to find,
The visions took him back, to a place where warmth was felt in a touch,
A gush of emotion, taken in stride, never overwhelmd in a rush,
Love was embraced by youth, and tender feelings,
Bound by flesh and immortalized by kindred dealings,
Their journeys commence was sealed with a kiss,
But the years aged this bond, hatred became of the bliss,
Through time, with swift passing, their love shared was dearly missed,
Unseen by psychic eyes, the devotion was severed by tough faults,*
Feelings expressed in hallway notions, came to an abrupt hault,
Now silence portrays his life, his wife no longer finds interest *in conversation,
His heart cries out in his souls voice, his anger is humbled by patience,
His memories past, breaks through the barriers*of this mirrors glass, a second glance,
New flowers bloom on this tainted romance, another chance,
To breake free from his tortured hearts hold,*
He snaps out of his trance, and his love returns, to fix the broken window to his soul-
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10-05-2011, 02:00 PM
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Good luck homie-
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10-05-2011, 02:00 PM
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Good luck homie-
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Live Through My Eyes
He's had his eyes closed for twenty years. Twenty years of darkness & many fears. He misses his family, the world, & his friendly peers.
At the thought of death, he becomes frightened. So before it comes, I try to let some light in.
I'll be his eyes, & let him see this life's sweetest sights.
He's knows nothing of today. He was only 20 when he was sent away to where he's surrounded by walls of gray.
So I'll travel & take in what I see. Then convey to him views of the lively world that makes you bless the almighty.
Just so that instead of paining & of straining to hold onto his time remaining, he can look at the pictures in the framing.
He climbs from the abyss because no longer is there something amiss. Everything feels right, so he makes a wish. He wants to see his daughter blow him a kiss.
As his eyes, I make the travel down a country road with my tires kicking up gravel. I pull up to a farm, seeing the chickens & the cattle. There she is sitting on a horse's saddle.
I take the picture & go to write of it because, you see? This just is how I let my brother see the world while on death row for a crime he didn't commit.
I'm his eyes that let him step in this world to give his own inspection before he receives the lethal injection.
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Live Through My Eyes
He's had his eyes closed for twenty years. Twenty years of darkness & many fears. He misses his family, the world, & his friendly peers.
At the thought of death, he becomes frightened. So before it comes, I try to let some light in.
I'll be his eyes, & let him see this life's sweetest sights.
He's knows nothing of today. He was only 20 when he was sent away to where he's surrounded by walls of gray.
So I'll travel & take in what I see. Then convey to him views of the lively world that makes you bless the almighty.
Just so that instead of paining & of straining to hold onto his time remaining, he can look at the pictures in the framing.
He climbs from the abyss because no longer is there something amiss. Everything feels right, so he makes a wish. He wants to see his daughter blow him a kiss.
As his eyes, I make the travel down a country road with my tires kicking up gravel. I pull up to a farm, seeing the chickens & the cattle. There she is sitting on a horse's saddle.
I take the picture & go to write of it because, you see? This just is how I let my brother see the world while on death row for a crime he didn't commit.
I'm his eyes that let him step in this world to give his own inspection before he receives the lethal injection.
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Respect for posting today also- good shit fam and good luck
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10-06-2011, 12:17 AM
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Respect for posting today also- good shit fam and good luck
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Voting Rubix
Rhyming Scheme/Flow- Intricate took this cat
Vocabulary- Intricate
Topic/Meaning- Tie, both was good, had real nice stories
Storytelling/Progression- Intricate edged it, both had good shit, but I was diggin Skillz a lil more
Emotion- Intricate, another close one, but Skillz had it here
Imagery- Tie, both painted good pictures
Poetic Techniques- Intricate Skillz
Ending- Tie, I liked how both ended it, yall was dope with it
MVGT- Intricate Skillz, his topical was deep to me, he started and ended really well, it went with the pic real good, BB had a dope ass concept too, I really liked his story, but I was jus feelin Intricates more, good battle from both, n good luck
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Rhyming Scheme/Flow- Intricate took this cat
Vocabulary- Intricate
Topic/Meaning- Tie, both was good, had real nice stories
Storytelling/Progression- Intricate edged it, both had good shit, but I was diggin Skillz a lil more
Emotion- Intricate, another close one, but Skillz had it here
Imagery- Tie, both painted good pictures
Poetic Techniques- Intricate Skillz
Ending- Tie, I liked how both ended it, yall was dope with it
MVGT- Intricate Skillz, his topical was deep to me, he started and ended really well, it went with the pic real good, BB had a dope ass concept too, I really liked his story, but I was jus feelin Intricates more, good battle from both, n good luck
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Ohh shit tho.
Rhyming Scheme/Flow: One of the most clear cut of the catagories, this dude was clearly stronger - Book.
Vocabulary: Again fairly one sided - Skillz.
Topic/Meaning: Weird one, i felt Book had a fresher spin on the picture whilst Skillz's piece related better with it. Fuck it - TIE.
Storytelling/Progression: Another hard one to decide. Again i think - TIE.
Emotion: Cunts. lol another catagory very close. I think one edged this tho - Book.
Imagery: I think Skillz managed to be a lil more descriptive with his drop, Books piece felt more real though. Nah cant call it. - TIE.
Poetic Techniques: I think Skillz unleashed a bigger arsonal of poetic techniques in this one. - Skillz.
Ending: Again close, but i felt ones payoff was a bit better. - Book.
Overview: Catagories didnt help, so i can only judge on the complete pieces. Skillz has been a major darkhorse in this tourney, his drop was deep and used some nice vocab. Book came with flow and some real nice storytelling. I guess this one is gonna be down to voters preference, personally i just felt ones drop a lil more. Like a LILLLL more lol. Wish both could go thru tbh.
My Vote Goes To: Book.
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Ohh shit tho.
Rhyming Scheme/Flow: One of the most clear cut of the catagories, this dude was clearly stronger - Book.
Vocabulary: Again fairly one sided - Skillz.
Topic/Meaning: Weird one, i felt Book had a fresher spin on the picture whilst Skillz's piece related better with it. Fuck it - TIE.
Storytelling/Progression: Another hard one to decide. Again i think - TIE.
Emotion: Cunts. lol another catagory very close. I think one edged this tho - Book.
Imagery: I think Skillz managed to be a lil more descriptive with his drop, Books piece felt more real though. Nah cant call it. - TIE.
Poetic Techniques: I think Skillz unleashed a bigger arsonal of poetic techniques in this one. - Skillz.
Ending: Again close, but i felt ones payoff was a bit better. - Book.
Overview: Catagories didnt help, so i can only judge on the complete pieces. Skillz has been a major darkhorse in this tourney, his drop was deep and used some nice vocab. Book came with flow and some real nice storytelling. I guess this one is gonna be down to voters preference, personally i just felt ones drop a lil more. Like a LILLLL more lol. Wish both could go thru tbh.
My Vote Goes To: Book.
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Rhyming Scheme/Flow - Tie - TBH both slipped with the flow in certain spots so I have to give it a tie.
Vocabulary - Skillz - Book came a bit basic here with the word usage that he normally does and skillz stepped it up in this category.
Topic/Meaning - Tie - Both of the meanings conveyed here were pretty dope, def. liked the concepts that were brought to the table. Skillz with the more heart-touched emotions, as Book had the views from being secluded inside a prison.
Storytelling/Progression - Intricate - Slighty edged this. I felt that he was better in transition. Black Book seemed a bit repetitive for me (he's had his eyes, ill be his eyes, im his eyes, as his eyes) if you catch my drift the stages of the story all seemed to have that same transition there, felt it took away from the progression a bit.
Emotion - Tie - It's close. I can see the emotion from both angles on this one.
Imagery - Book - Book def. painted the better picture here. Although skillz wording seemed a bit better to me, book had the actual image that pulls you into the seen with him.
Poetic Techniques - Skillz - Skillz verse def. had more of a poetic feel to it with the way he wrote it.
Ending - Skillz - I felt that books kind of ended on the spot for me. I felt that it was just chopped in half, that last line didn't put a close to for me. It was still a close one on the ending, but because of that, I think skillz edged this cat.
Skillz GMV. Great battle from both. Liked both of the concepts brought here. I felt skillz executed his better, as Book brought the better idea to the table, but his verse seemed a bit rushed to me. Also book watch your lines, I'll count the title and the word in. as a line, but if not you went under the limit. Overall... Propz to both and stay up!
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Rhyming Scheme/Flow - Tie - TBH both slipped with the flow in certain spots so I have to give it a tie.
Vocabulary - Skillz - Book came a bit basic here with the word usage that he normally does and skillz stepped it up in this category.
Topic/Meaning - Tie - Both of the meanings conveyed here were pretty dope, def. liked the concepts that were brought to the table. Skillz with the more heart-touched emotions, as Book had the views from being secluded inside a prison.
Storytelling/Progression - Intricate - Slighty edged this. I felt that he was better in transition. Black Book seemed a bit repetitive for me (he's had his eyes, ill be his eyes, im his eyes, as his eyes) if you catch my drift the stages of the story all seemed to have that same transition there, felt it took away from the progression a bit.
Emotion - Tie - It's close. I can see the emotion from both angles on this one.
Imagery - Book - Book def. painted the better picture here. Although skillz wording seemed a bit better to me, book had the actual image that pulls you into the seen with him.
Poetic Techniques - Skillz - Skillz verse def. had more of a poetic feel to it with the way he wrote it.
Ending - Skillz - I felt that books kind of ended on the spot for me. I felt that it was just chopped in half, that last line didn't put a close to for me. It was still a close one on the ending, but because of that, I think skillz edged this cat.
Skillz GMV. Great battle from both. Liked both of the concepts brought here. I felt skillz executed his better, as Book brought the better idea to the table, but his verse seemed a bit rushed to me. Also book watch your lines, I'll count the title and the word in. as a line, but if not you went under the limit. Overall... Propz to both and stay up!
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I guess we have a different format? Cuz it shows up as 24 lines excluding the title on mine.
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I guess we have a different format? Cuz it shows up as 24 lines excluding the title on mine.
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