B - SLEAZY: RULES AND SIGNUP

Originally Posted by customadepoetry

Hi guys, I won't be a part of this battle, I don't like the topic. but check out my rap example. Its 12 lines but tell me if it fits in four bars, and if it follows all the rules.

brayne ded's girl got the cutest butt dimple
she had it all in mah face. shoot! she coulda busted a pimple
I said girl where you from? she said "i live in Nebraska,
n I can make my cheeks clap for you like you was winnin as oscar"
I said " Girl I'm not an astronaut but i'm about to take a trip to Uranus,
cum with me, i'll show you so many stars you'd think u were famous"
The night was clear and out came the full moon
she jumped on mah rocket and quaked the whole room
nearly came, she nearly pushed me over the top, had me dancing within a thin a line
What a dame! she was so rough! mann, this was skin on skin crime
2 hours later... b4lastoff! your girl- she was screaming
Jus kidding, I only jackoff. mans a virgin, I was dreaming

Uh... Hard pass on that.

Originally Posted by customadepoetry

Hi guys, I won't be a part of this battle, I don't like the topic. but check out my rap example. Its 12 lines but tell me if it fits in four bars, and if it follows all the rules.

brayne ded's girl got the cutest butt dimple
she had it all in mah face. shoot! she coulda busted a pimple
I said girl where you from? she said "i live in Nebraska,
n I can make my cheeks clap for you like you was winnin as oscar"
I said " Girl I'm not an astronaut but i'm about to take a trip to Uranus,
cum with me, i'll show you so many stars you'd think u were famous"
The night was clear and out came the full moon
she jumped on mah rocket and quaked the whole room
nearly came, she nearly pushed me over the top, had me dancing within a thin a line
What a dame! she was so rough! mann, this was skin on skin crime
2 hours later... b4lastoff! your girl- she was screaming
Jus kidding, I only jackoff. mans a virgin, I was dreaming

Uh... Hard pass on that.