ATT Round 2: Writer 5 Vs Writer 13 - (Writer 13 Wins 3-0)

Writer 5 - Your style here really reminded me of an old style I used to use. Perhaps you were slightly too literally to the picture at times. I found "one lady riding a camel" to be strange. If you're going to write a piece where every single thing is a metaphor, your wording has to be absolutely perfect, so it's something for you to continue practising. I felt that you didn't need to go as basic in the rhyming here. Your potential for multiple syllable rhyme schemes was fairly easy here as nothing was overly complex, so I was surprised to see you go down such a simplistic route with it.

Writer 13 - I really enjoyed this piece. The rhyming was simple but very effective. Really pushed the flow forward and allowed me to have no problems going through the verse. I felt the story had all the action that the picture presented. There was no massive twist at the end but all in all it was engaging throughout. You used some fairly solid poetic techniques in there as well which I was impressed by. Great verse.

Overall, I think the winner is fairly evident in this one.

GMV - 13

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Writer 13 Wins 3-0

Writer 5 - Your style here really reminded me of an old style I used to use. Perhaps you were slightly too literally to the picture at times. I found "one lady riding a camel" to be strange. If you're going to write a piece where every single thing is a metaphor, your wording has to be absolutely perfect, so it's something for you to continue practising. I felt that you didn't need to go as basic in the rhyming here. Your potential for multiple syllable rhyme schemes was fairly easy here as nothing was overly complex, so I was surprised to see you go down such a simplistic route with it.

Writer 13 - I really enjoyed this piece. The rhyming was simple but very effective. Really pushed the flow forward and allowed me to have no problems going through the verse. I felt the story had all the action that the picture presented. There was no massive twist at the end but all in all it was engaging throughout. You used some fairly solid poetic techniques in there as well which I was impressed by. Great verse.

Overall, I think the winner is fairly evident in this one.

GMV - 13

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Writer 13 Wins 3-0