ILLMANIA 4: Track Battle - SuperGuy Vs Mani Mula Vs Punk

[J u s T C]

Superguy.

Beat.

Was okay. middle of the road. Wasn't a bad beat but it never did anything for me. It was kinda bland and safe for my tastes.

Bars.

You suffer from what a lot of "internet" rappers do. They try to display a deep message only to end up saying a lot without really saying anything at all, through an over reliance on multi's which their skill set isn't on the same level to keep up with the heights the emcee puts on himself so it comes across as pretentious nonsense.

If you wan't to be a story teller you should start simple and work your way up to employing more "complex" rhyme schemes. I say "complex" in quotes because the vocab used wasn't complex at all. It was a lot of ABC rhyming. That can be cool when employing a bunch of multi's IF the message is clear and focused. but when it's scatterbrained it never works.

Right now you sound like every other run of the mill wanna be "deep" internet rapper only without the production that papers over their cracks and or even gets them overblown props they don't deserve.

Delivery.

Flat. Where is the emotion? the projection?

The lack of emotion added to the safe middle of the road beat choice and unfocused material just makes for a really un offensive, bland and forgettable track.

There's just nothing there that makes me want to listen. You sound like you can't be assed and if you can't be assed, why should the listener?

Make people pay attention to you, sell yourself and what it is you'e trying to say. The only way you can do that is to rap with confidence.

Also you need to practice more before you record because you tend to stretch and cram your words at different points to keep in tune with the beat.

If you find yourself forcing yourself to stay with the beat you need to go back to your bars and edit them so your not finding yourself at them points where you have to make up ground and so you're not running out of breath on say bar 4 because of something you said in bar 2 or 3.


Production.

Wasn't great but I wasn't expecting it to be. This is a hobby site. I rather judge other aspects. Quality production is a bonus so I'm not going to really make an opinion on that.

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Will get to Mani and Punk some time today.

[J u s T C]

Superguy.

Beat.

Was okay. middle of the road. Wasn't a bad beat but it never did anything for me. It was kinda bland and safe for my tastes.

Bars.

You suffer from what a lot of "internet" rappers do. They try to display a deep message only to end up saying a lot without really saying anything at all, through an over reliance on multi's which their skill set isn't on the same level to keep up with the heights the emcee puts on himself so it comes across as pretentious nonsense.

If you wan't to be a story teller you should start simple and work your way up to employing more "complex" rhyme schemes. I say "complex" in quotes because the vocab used wasn't complex at all. It was a lot of ABC rhyming. That can be cool when employing a bunch of multi's IF the message is clear and focused. but when it's scatterbrained it never works.

Right now you sound like every other run of the mill wanna be "deep" internet rapper only without the production that papers over their cracks and or even gets them overblown props they don't deserve.

Delivery.

Flat. Where is the emotion? the projection?

The lack of emotion added to the safe middle of the road beat choice and unfocused material just makes for a really un offensive, bland and forgettable track.

There's just nothing there that makes me want to listen. You sound like you can't be assed and if you can't be assed, why should the listener?

Make people pay attention to you, sell yourself and what it is you'e trying to say. The only way you can do that is to rap with confidence.

Also you need to practice more before you record because you tend to stretch and cram your words at different points to keep in tune with the beat.

If you find yourself forcing yourself to stay with the beat you need to go back to your bars and edit them so your not finding yourself at them points where you have to make up ground and so you're not running out of breath on say bar 4 because of something you said in bar 2 or 3.


Production.

Wasn't great but I wasn't expecting it to be. This is a hobby site. I rather judge other aspects. Quality production is a bonus so I'm not going to really make an opinion on that.

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Will get to Mani and Punk some time today.