what's wrong witht this bar

[stricc]

im tryin to advance my text game but im not sure what text people want.....this is a serious thread so keep ya faggotry to yaself, can someone tell me what's wrong with this punch from my last text verse.....im tryin ta figure out what direction to head in next round.......


your bars are 'sloppy' and 'forced together' it's like you're WEARIN A GIRDLE\ you're not in tha 'right shape' to 'get in this box' wit me, so prePARE FOR THIS HURDLE\ cuz you'll never 'make it thru this round' like you're tryin ta get tha SQUARE IN THA CIRCLE\ ........when i wrote it i thought tha shit was nice but everybody sayin im gon need ta step it up in tha next rounds

[stricc]

im tryin to advance my text game but im not sure what text people want.....this is a serious thread so keep ya faggotry to yaself, can someone tell me what's wrong with this punch from my last text verse.....im tryin ta figure out what direction to head in next round.......


your bars are 'sloppy' and 'forced together' it's like you're WEARIN A GIRDLE\ you're not in tha 'right shape' to 'get in this box' wit me, so prePARE FOR THIS HURDLE\ cuz you'll never 'make it thru this round' like you're tryin ta get tha SQUARE IN THA CIRCLE\ ........when i wrote it i thought tha shit was nice but everybody sayin im gon need ta step it up in tha next rounds