2013 GC: RD1 - HandJob Alias Vs Phoenix - (Phoenix Wins 5-3) - Lets Beef

**Dono** · #15 11-18-2013, 01:32 PM

Phoenix: I actually like the scenery changes relating to the 'oh man the world is shit' guess I can't do much I'll off myself. Not the most engaging ending but the premise was relatively plausible, just not explained deeply enough.

Handjob Alias: I really enjoy the idea here (assuming you were going for some metaphorical piece) but the execution was so so sloppy it was hard to slosh through. Had you cleaned it up a bit I think it would have made for a real nice and unique narrative.

Overall, both pieces had some serious flaws but I can't overlook just how jumbled alias's piece was regardless of how much I enjoyed the concept.

Vote to Phoenix.

**Dono** · 11-18-2013, 01:32 PM

Phoenix: I actually like the scenery changes relating to the 'oh man the world is shit' guess I can't do much I'll off myself. Not the most engaging ending but the premise was relatively plausible, just not explained deeply enough.

Handjob Alias: I really enjoy the idea here (assuming you were going for some metaphorical piece) but the execution was so so sloppy it was hard to slosh through. Had you cleaned it up a bit I think it would have made for a real nice and unique narrative.

Overall, both pieces had some serious flaws but I can't overlook just how jumbled alias's piece was regardless of how much I enjoyed the concept.

Vote to Phoenix.


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