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~KiNg KrAzY~ got A NEW Verse Here...Postin this Up In HERE Strictly to get feedback and advice on ways to tighten flow wordplay punches etc etc etc.....Honest Feedback MUCH APPRECIATED!!!....FAVOR Always Returned...
~*~Mulisha~*~(nough said).....Look.....Understand beatin me's a MIRACLE PUNK consider this a LYRICAL PUNCH/cause I'm BUSTIN DUDES NECK/Go Head SPIN THE WHEEL BEGIN A DEAL either way mark a LOSS DOWN not from MOSCOW/but facin KrAzY's like playin RUSSIAN ROULETTE/trust it's TEMPTIN ta AIM but also SIMPLE n PLAIN/verbal shots hit ya TIMPLE n BRAIN guaranteed ya DIMPLES will STAIN/like FACE MAKE-UP/Trust this QUEER LOVER's gone need 'SHEER COVER' when I TUCK THE SHANK FUCK YA RANK/iss obvious the "letsbeef" PLACE HATES YA!!!!/there's no DEBATE BRUH/it's PLAIN FOLKS this LAME JOKE needs to GROW DEM NUTS holes GO-IN UP/now watch as KiNg escaLATES SLUGS!!!//
ONE LOVE n ++++RESPECT++++
~KiNg--OUT~
~Legit Records CEO~
~*~MIC~*~MELTIN~*~MULISHA~*~ --Undisputed * Cypher * King--
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Battles= CHALLENGERS???
>>>_SIR_>>>"sorry... you can hate me or whatever but i'm going to duck that topical cuz i just can think of anything and really don't wanna do it anymore"<<<_SIR_<<<
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07-30-2010, 06:57 PM
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Honest Feedback
~KiNg KrAzY~ got A NEW Verse Here...Postin this Up In HERE Strictly to get feedback and advice on ways to tighten flow wordplay punches etc etc etc.....Honest Feedback MUCH APPRECIATED!!!....FAVOR Always Returned...
~*~Mulisha~*~(nough said).....Look.....Understand beatin me's a MIRACLE PUNK consider this a LYRICAL PUNCH/cause I'm BUSTIN DUDES NECK/Go Head SPIN THE WHEEL BEGIN A DEAL either way mark a LOSS DOWN not from MOSCOW/but facin KrAzY's like playin RUSSIAN ROULETTE/trust it's TEMPTIN ta AIM but also SIMPLE n PLAIN/verbal shots hit ya TIMPLE n BRAIN guaranteed ya DIMPLES will STAIN/like FACE MAKE-UP/Trust this QUEER LOVER's gone need 'SHEER COVER' when I TUCK THE SHANK FUCK YA RANK/iss obvious the "letsbeef" PLACE HATES YA!!!!/there's no DEBATE BRUH/it's PLAIN FOLKS this LAME JOKE needs to GROW DEM NUTS holes GO-IN UP/now watch as KiNg escaLATES SLUGS!!!//
ONE LOVE n ++++RESPECT++++
~KiNg--OUT~
~Legit Records CEO~
~*~MIC~*~MELTIN~*~MULISHA~*~ --Undisputed * Cypher * King--
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" UNDISPUTED " _ * CyPhEr * _ !@ KING @!
Battles= CHALLENGERS???
>>>_SIR_>>>"sorry... you can hate me or whatever but i'm going to duck that topical cuz i just can think of anything and really don't wanna do it anymore"<<<_SIR_<<<
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07-30-2010, 07:36 PM
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You suck.
There's your honest feedback.
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07-30-2010, 07:36 PM
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You suck.
There's your honest feedback.
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07-30-2010, 09:02 PM
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Originally Posted by Jason
you stole it.. not cool
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No, no.
I borrowed it, is all... :o
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07-30-2010, 09:02 PM
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Originally Posted by Jason
you stole it.. not cool
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No, no.
I borrowed it, is all... :o
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11-09-2010, 06:37 PM
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@Weezy Wannabe & Jason:
Atleast He's Elevating
Haven't Seen Nothing From You Lately Which Suggested Elevation
If You Don't Have Any Valid Constructive Criticism Then Don't Fuckin Post
@Krazy:
Good Stuff Here Man
Liking The New Thing Your Doing With Your Multies
Some Cool Punches; Keep Grinding Bro
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Originally Posted by Student
Wait, how old are you? I feel uncomfortable being inside your head if you're a minor.
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Originally Posted by ILLoKWENT
you still have to give someone the benefit of the doubt regardless of how obvious it looks
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Originally Posted by Edgeworth
Ok so at this point you guys are just being willfully ignorant / not understanding on purpose / or just trolling.
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"Little 4 To 5"? Need To Be "Hand Held"? My "Style" Is Modish Than Basic, I Kid, Joint Clips Follow My "Touch" Like "Co-vid" App Tracing - Lizman Vs MarkThePatriarch
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11-09-2010, 06:37 PM
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@Weezy Wannabe & Jason:
Atleast He's Elevating
Haven't Seen Nothing From You Lately Which Suggested Elevation
If You Don't Have Any Valid Constructive Criticism Then Don't Fuckin Post
@Krazy:
Good Stuff Here Man
Liking The New Thing Your Doing With Your Multies
Some Cool Punches; Keep Grinding Bro
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Originally Posted by Student
Wait, how old are you? I feel uncomfortable being inside your head if you're a minor.
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Originally Posted by ILLoKWENT
you still have to give someone the benefit of the doubt regardless of how obvious it looks
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Originally Posted by Edgeworth
Ok so at this point you guys are just being willfully ignorant / not understanding on purpose / or just trolling.
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"Little 4 To 5"? Need To Be "Hand Held"? My "Style" Is Modish Than Basic, I Kid, Joint Clips Follow My "Touch" Like "Co-vid" App Tracing - Lizman Vs MarkThePatriarch
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11-09-2010, 06:44 PM
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Work on developing creative concepts, add in some wordplay, and more than 3 syllable multies.
You do need a LOT of work to be a top textcee on here though.
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11-09-2010, 06:44 PM
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Work on developing creative concepts, add in some wordplay, and more than 3 syllable multies.
You do need a LOT of work to be a top textcee on here though.
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11-10-2010, 09:19 AM
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Originally Posted by The Black Book
Work on developing creative concepts, add in some wordplay, and more than 3 syllable multies.
You do need a LOT of work to be a top textcee on here though.
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BOOK is right.. get some concepts, create some original punchlines, fix the structure a little and keep the flow u have cause its good, or make it better.. good luck King..
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11-10-2010, 09:19 AM
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Originally Posted by The Black Book
Work on developing creative concepts, add in some wordplay, and more than 3 syllable multies.
You do need a LOT of work to be a top textcee on here though.
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BOOK is right.. get some concepts, create some original punchlines, fix the structure a little and keep the flow u have cause its good, or make it better.. good luck King..
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