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Anth3m · #1 08-09-2010, 12:04 PM

So I'm tryn to evolve into a new form of flow-ology. Before i would have like two quick multies then like blah blah blah punch
ex. I'm LANDING SHOTS iller than CANCER SPOTS, while this fag is packing more fudge than CANDY SHOPS.

but instead i want to be on some like other level that just sounds killer to read out loud

I've been tryn it in my recents (wwhere all these bars are from, examples are from what I can remember)
Bro�.when I�m FLOWIN ITS POTENT, its natural skills, no buff of POTION THAT�S SMOKIN�..And bitch, I create havoc, I�m 'above PANDEMONIUM', Imma 'peel ya top off' like a CAN THAT�S OPENIN, cuz the only �vest� you got is for FLOATIN IN OCEANS!!!!!!!!!

but in this particular example (a snipe against a dude named pandemonium) the last multie just doesn't seem to hit and sound as good when read outloud which is what I'm goin for. I think I'm almost there but I just need a few tweaks. Any suggestions.....?

Anth3m · 08-09-2010, 12:04 PM

So I'm tryn to evolve into a new form of flow-ology. Before i would have like two quick multies then like blah blah blah punch
ex. I'm LANDING SHOTS iller than CANCER SPOTS, while this fag is packing more fudge than CANDY SHOPS.

but instead i want to be on some like other level that just sounds killer to read out loud

I've been tryn it in my recents (wwhere all these bars are from, examples are from what I can remember)
Bro�.when I�m FLOWIN ITS POTENT, its natural skills, no buff of POTION THAT�S SMOKIN�..And bitch, I create havoc, I�m 'above PANDEMONIUM', Imma 'peel ya top off' like a CAN THAT�S OPENIN, cuz the only �vest� you got is for FLOATIN IN OCEANS!!!!!!!!!

but in this particular example (a snipe against a dude named pandemonium) the last multie just doesn't seem to hit and sound as good when read outloud which is what I'm goin for. I think I'm almost there but I just need a few tweaks. Any suggestions.....?

Anth3m · #2 08-09-2010, 01:57 PM

wow 8 views and no advice...waddafug

Anth3m · 08-09-2010, 01:57 PM

wow 8 views and no advice...waddafug

1DollarShort · #3 08-09-2010, 02:07 PM

... I don't get what your tryin to do? apart from longer/more multi's?

1DollarShort · 08-09-2010, 02:07 PM

... I don't get what your tryin to do? apart from longer/more multi's?

Q · #4 08-09-2010, 02:10 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Screwdini

So I'm tryn to evolve into a new form of flow-ology. Before i would have like two quick multies then like blah blah blah punch
ex. I'm LANDING SHOTS iller than CANCER SPOTS, while this fag is packing more fudge than CANDY SHOPS.

but instead i want to be on some like other level that just sounds killer to read out loud

I've been tryn it in my recents (wwhere all these bars are from, examples are from what I can remember)
Bro�.when I�m FLOWIN ITS POTENT, its natural skills, no buff of POTION THAT�S SMOKIN�..And bitch, I create havoc, I�m 'above PANDEMONIUM', Imma 'peel ya top off' like a CAN THAT�S OPENIN, cuz the only �vest� you got is for FLOATIN IN OCEANS!!!!!!!!!

^Instead of that.....I'd try something like

Imma 'peel ya top off' like a CAN THAT�S OPENIN, only �vest� you got is for FLOATIN IN OCEANS!! I�m FLOWIN ITS POTENT, I create havoc, I�m 'above PANDEMONIUM'......Now add a serious punch here)

Q · 08-09-2010, 02:10 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Screwdini

So I'm tryn to evolve into a new form of flow-ology. Before i would have like two quick multies then like blah blah blah punch
ex. I'm LANDING SHOTS iller than CANCER SPOTS, while this fag is packing more fudge than CANDY SHOPS.

but instead i want to be on some like other level that just sounds killer to read out loud

I've been tryn it in my recents (wwhere all these bars are from, examples are from what I can remember)
Bro�.when I�m FLOWIN ITS POTENT, its natural skills, no buff of POTION THAT�S SMOKIN�..And bitch, I create havoc, I�m 'above PANDEMONIUM', Imma 'peel ya top off' like a CAN THAT�S OPENIN, cuz the only �vest� you got is for FLOATIN IN OCEANS!!!!!!!!!

^Instead of that.....I'd try something like

Imma 'peel ya top off' like a CAN THAT�S OPENIN, only �vest� you got is for FLOATIN IN OCEANS!! I�m FLOWIN ITS POTENT, I create havoc, I�m 'above PANDEMONIUM'......Now add a serious punch here)

Anth3m · #5 08-09-2010, 02:16 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by -SoupErb-

... I don't get what your tryin to do? apart from longer/more multi's?

like instead of a punch at every bar, have like more build up and include different multies inside of the one punch, because to me that makes it better to read out loud

Anth3m · 08-09-2010, 02:16 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by -SoupErb-

... I don't get what your tryin to do? apart from longer/more multi's?

like instead of a punch at every bar, have like more build up and include different multies inside of the one punch, because to me that makes it better to read out loud

1DollarShort · #6 08-09-2010, 02:18 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Screwdini

like instead of a punch at every bar, have like more build up and include different multies inside of the one punch, because to me that makes it better to read out loud

So instead of just... Multi, Multi, Punch

You want like, Multi, mini-punch, multi,multi, big punch?

Or something similar anyway... but yeh if thats what you mean, it is alot better. Dont try too much at once tho.

1DollarShort · 08-09-2010, 02:18 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Screwdini

like instead of a punch at every bar, have like more build up and include different multies inside of the one punch, because to me that makes it better to read out loud

So instead of just... Multi, Multi, Punch

You want like, Multi, mini-punch, multi,multi, big punch?

Or something similar anyway... but yeh if thats what you mean, it is alot better. Dont try too much at once tho.

Anth3m · #7 08-09-2010, 02:18 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by CoRe sOuL

^Instead of that.....I'd try something like

Imma 'peel ya top off' like a CAN THAT�S OPENIN, only �vest� you got is for FLOATIN IN OCEANS!! I�m FLOWIN ITS POTENT, I create havoc, I�m 'above PANDEMONIUM'......Now add a serious punch here)

hmmmm i just want to clarify that i don't think can that's openin and floatin in oceans rhymes...but i see what you're saying still applies, its just kinda like eliminating more words right?

Anth3m · 08-09-2010, 02:18 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by CoRe sOuL

^Instead of that.....I'd try something like

Imma 'peel ya top off' like a CAN THAT�S OPENIN, only �vest� you got is for FLOATIN IN OCEANS!! I�m FLOWIN ITS POTENT, I create havoc, I�m 'above PANDEMONIUM'......Now add a serious punch here)

hmmmm i just want to clarify that i don't think can that's openin and floatin in oceans rhymes...but i see what you're saying still applies, its just kinda like eliminating more words right?

Anth3m · #8 08-09-2010, 02:20 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by -SoupErb-

So instead of just... Multi, Multi, Punch

You want like, Multi, mini-punch, multi,multi, big punch?

Or something similar anyway... but yeh if thats what you mean, it is alot better. Dont try too much at once tho.

that's exactly what i mean, but i'm having trouble incorporating different rhyme schemes into it though i guess

Anth3m · 08-09-2010, 02:20 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by -SoupErb-

So instead of just... Multi, Multi, Punch

You want like, Multi, mini-punch, multi,multi, big punch?

Or something similar anyway... but yeh if thats what you mean, it is alot better. Dont try too much at once tho.

that's exactly what i mean, but i'm having trouble incorporating different rhyme schemes into it though i guess

**Mayneak** · #9 08-09-2010, 04:57 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Screwdini

So I'm tryn to evolve into a new form of flow-ology. Before i would have like two quick multies then like blah blah blah punch
ex. I'm LANDING SHOTS iller than CANCER SPOTS, while this fag is packing more fudge than CANDY SHOPS.

but instead i want to be on some like other level that just sounds killer to read out loud

I've been tryn it in my recents (wwhere all these bars are from, examples are from what I can remember)
Bro�.when I�m FLOWIN ITS POTENT, its natural skills, no buff of POTION THAT�S SMOKIN�..And bitch, I create havoc, I�m 'above PANDEMONIUM', Imma 'peel ya top off' like a CAN THAT�S OPENIN, cuz the only �vest� you got is for FLOATIN IN OCEANS!!!!!!!!!

but in this particular example (a snipe against a dude named pandemonium) the last multie just doesn't seem to hit and sound as good when read outloud which is what I'm goin for. I think I'm almost there but I just need a few tweaks. Any suggestions.....?

Aiight...theres nothing wrong with the way you were doing your battles before (candy shop line)...It is all about elevating so atleast you wanna improve your skills...

I see what you mean about tryna jot down some killer lines...Flow/Readability is very important as the voter has to read it out and not stop, or pause...

"Bro�.when I�m FLOWIN ITS POTENT, its natural skills, no buff of POTION THAT�S SMOKIN�..And bitch, I create havoc, I�m 'above PANDEMONIUM', Imma 'peel ya top off' like a CAN THAT�S OPENIN, cuz the only �vest� you got is for FLOATIN IN OCEANS!!!!!!!!!"

I actually think your previous style was better than this, maybe your still tryna find YOUR style tho so thats understandable...

A problem that i see on a regular basis is people "forcing" words into multies to make it rhyme...Over time i've come to learn that the words dont have to exactly rhyme to flow...Your flow was ok on ^^ that line, not a good punch but it was ok...Freestyling also helps your battles in the text box, freestyle about anything and everything, you'll come out with some fucked up shiit that'll you'll laugh about in the future but it will be worth it if the enthusiasm is there...

Evolving: (I dunno if you do this already)...but tryna think outside the box requires imagination, creativeness & will to learn...

Think of the punch first, then think of everything related to that punch...try and incorporate then within the lines...Study people who got the flow on lock (remarK, -reefer-), you will understand more once you see it...

Also, you cant just say "Ok, im gonna jot down some dope lines right now"...Everything takes time...most of the people that keep the entertainment & readability factor alive have been here a long time and have had a large number of battles, dont rush it, if you wanna to elevate and become one of the best around here then you gotta be patient...

I dunno if anything i said here will help you out but im dropping my 2 cents...

**Mayneak** · 08-09-2010, 04:57 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Screwdini

So I'm tryn to evolve into a new form of flow-ology. Before i would have like two quick multies then like blah blah blah punch
ex. I'm LANDING SHOTS iller than CANCER SPOTS, while this fag is packing more fudge than CANDY SHOPS.

but instead i want to be on some like other level that just sounds killer to read out loud

I've been tryn it in my recents (wwhere all these bars are from, examples are from what I can remember)
Bro�.when I�m FLOWIN ITS POTENT, its natural skills, no buff of POTION THAT�S SMOKIN�..And bitch, I create havoc, I�m 'above PANDEMONIUM', Imma 'peel ya top off' like a CAN THAT�S OPENIN, cuz the only �vest� you got is for FLOATIN IN OCEANS!!!!!!!!!

but in this particular example (a snipe against a dude named pandemonium) the last multie just doesn't seem to hit and sound as good when read outloud which is what I'm goin for. I think I'm almost there but I just need a few tweaks. Any suggestions.....?

Aiight...theres nothing wrong with the way you were doing your battles before (candy shop line)...It is all about elevating so atleast you wanna improve your skills...

I see what you mean about tryna jot down some killer lines...Flow/Readability is very important as the voter has to read it out and not stop, or pause...

"Bro�.when I�m FLOWIN ITS POTENT, its natural skills, no buff of POTION THAT�S SMOKIN�..And bitch, I create havoc, I�m 'above PANDEMONIUM', Imma 'peel ya top off' like a CAN THAT�S OPENIN, cuz the only �vest� you got is for FLOATIN IN OCEANS!!!!!!!!!"

I actually think your previous style was better than this, maybe your still tryna find YOUR style tho so thats understandable...

A problem that i see on a regular basis is people "forcing" words into multies to make it rhyme...Over time i've come to learn that the words dont have to exactly rhyme to flow...Your flow was ok on ^^ that line, not a good punch but it was ok...Freestyling also helps your battles in the text box, freestyle about anything and everything, you'll come out with some fucked up shiit that'll you'll laugh about in the future but it will be worth it if the enthusiasm is there...

Evolving: (I dunno if you do this already)...but tryna think outside the box requires imagination, creativeness & will to learn...

Think of the punch first, then think of everything related to that punch...try and incorporate then within the lines...Study people who got the flow on lock (remarK, -reefer-), you will understand more once you see it...

Also, you cant just say "Ok, im gonna jot down some dope lines right now"...Everything takes time...most of the people that keep the entertainment & readability factor alive have been here a long time and have had a large number of battles, dont rush it, if you wanna to elevate and become one of the best around here then you gotta be patient...

I dunno if anything i said here will help you out but im dropping my 2 cents...

Anth3m · #10 08-09-2010, 05:47 PM

^yeah man, I know those punches were eh...ha I was sniping so I just kinda used them cuz it barely even mattered....but yeah my question was more about a structure that flows well and you def gave me some stuff to think about.
Thanks

Anth3m · 08-09-2010, 05:47 PM

^yeah man, I know those punches were eh...ha I was sniping so I just kinda used them cuz it barely even mattered....but yeah my question was more about a structure that flows well and you def gave me some stuff to think about.
Thanks


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