Wordplay preferences...

[GOOD GRIEF]

Originally Posted by EtH

COMPLETELY disagree.

For me, the grammar has to be down. That's the entire point for me. The reason that's a lame joke is because....it's lame. If lame punches start taking off, then cool, that's a genre I guess? But for me, you HAVE to get your wordplay working both ways.

I can think of two sentences that sound alike just as easily as the next guy, and it's pretty easy to think of a metaphor punch off of anything. The hard part is being able to connect both of those together to be able to make a punch. Here's an example of a line I think is BAD wordplay. Probably Rican's.

I Wonda battle as I Cosmo damage like the FAIRLY ODD PARENTS

It works as in...

I won da battle as I cause mo' damage...

But "I wonda battle". How is that making sense? That's the entire point, to find a way to make it work both ways in sentences.

An example of wordplay that DOES (nearly) work for me is from UA...

the way "Bitches" "Soak Up" this "Pussy's Flow" is an (Oaverie Action)"OVER REACTION" ..."PERIOD!"

Pussy flow is a little bit off, mainly because that's such an off the wall term for period. But it works the two ways I'm meaning.

the way bitches soak up this pussy's flow is an overreaction...period.

the way bitches soak up this pussy's flow is an ovary action;- period. (Added in the grammatical syntax).

Another thing that annoys me is that lines get build up WAY too early now. We're talking like 3 full LB text box lines, with the first few words having like "bitches soak up this pussy's flow" being written in there, but the actual punchline doesn't appear until AGES later. Think of it as live battling. If you through in a subtle reference 20 seconds before you deliver the punch, no one remembers it and it adds nothing.

It's not a lame joke it's for lack of a better word a pun. Puns were the bases for wp and punches. I get what you mean about grammar. It's just another style. There is a better way of doing tho then your example.

---------- Post added at 09:01 PM ---------- Previous post was at 08:55 PM ----------

I'll meet you half way...I admit sometimes it's just bad or lazy execution. But other times it's a good wp overlooked by a fine grammar nazi such as yourself.

[GOOD GRIEF]

Originally Posted by EtH

COMPLETELY disagree.

For me, the grammar has to be down. That's the entire point for me. The reason that's a lame joke is because....it's lame. If lame punches start taking off, then cool, that's a genre I guess? But for me, you HAVE to get your wordplay working both ways.

I can think of two sentences that sound alike just as easily as the next guy, and it's pretty easy to think of a metaphor punch off of anything. The hard part is being able to connect both of those together to be able to make a punch. Here's an example of a line I think is BAD wordplay. Probably Rican's.

I Wonda battle as I Cosmo damage like the FAIRLY ODD PARENTS

It works as in...

I won da battle as I cause mo' damage...

But "I wonda battle". How is that making sense? That's the entire point, to find a way to make it work both ways in sentences.

An example of wordplay that DOES (nearly) work for me is from UA...

the way "Bitches" "Soak Up" this "Pussy's Flow" is an (Oaverie Action)"OVER REACTION" ..."PERIOD!"

Pussy flow is a little bit off, mainly because that's such an off the wall term for period. But it works the two ways I'm meaning.

the way bitches soak up this pussy's flow is an overreaction...period.

the way bitches soak up this pussy's flow is an ovary action;- period. (Added in the grammatical syntax).

Another thing that annoys me is that lines get build up WAY too early now. We're talking like 3 full LB text box lines, with the first few words having like "bitches soak up this pussy's flow" being written in there, but the actual punchline doesn't appear until AGES later. Think of it as live battling. If you through in a subtle reference 20 seconds before you deliver the punch, no one remembers it and it adds nothing.

It's not a lame joke it's for lack of a better word a pun. Puns were the bases for wp and punches. I get what you mean about grammar. It's just another style. There is a better way of doing tho then your example.

---------- Post added at 09:01 PM ---------- Previous post was at 08:55 PM ----------

I'll meet you half way...I admit sometimes it's just bad or lazy execution. But other times it's a good wp overlooked by a fine grammar nazi such as yourself.