Confused By 1 bar

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Originally Posted by Phroxen

Allow me to speak for @Just C .



In your own words, you just said that the wording in your setup wasn't good. Other people in this thread who actually know what they're talking about are agreeing with this. That's all that's being said.

I see what @Verity was talking about in that other thread. It's sad how people hold back from criticizing people because they think they're gonna catch feelings or some shit. lol @ microscope.

Look, here's a microscope..





Most people probably missed the point that you used a weak opener (son to be in front of me). You had to call him "son" which is lame, especially when your entire bar focuses on that. Plus, most son/sun wordplay is preschool shit. It's like holmes/homes.. "Unshakeable here" is a filler multi that doesn't tie into your theme or do anything else besides slightly boast. "Think he's a star / (w)rapping rings around son".. again, same "son" shit I mentioned before. Plus the double meanings are weak here.. you'll rap circles around him... because people think he's a star.. and the sun is a star.. so you'll call him son and make it all work out? Pfft. PLUS, going back to your first part "son to be in front of me / planet orbit".. in front of me is a stretch that most will overlook. Each planet spins on an axis, therefore "sun" won't be in front of them all the time. You could've said "for son to be behind me" and it'd make the same amount of sense.


Moral of the story: You won with a weak bar. Congrats.

This is getting boring now....No ... There was no filler..student gets it... And where did I imply he had to be in front of me all the time?... Your the one whos streatching trying to find flaws .... I just checked your most recent battle ...That was ALL filler... I wouldn't stoop so low as to start posting your bars but maybe you should turn that microscope on your own shit and spend the same amount of time and effort there ... Might be time better spent

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Originally Posted by Phroxen

Allow me to speak for @Just C .



In your own words, you just said that the wording in your setup wasn't good. Other people in this thread who actually know what they're talking about are agreeing with this. That's all that's being said.

I see what @Verity was talking about in that other thread. It's sad how people hold back from criticizing people because they think they're gonna catch feelings or some shit. lol @ microscope.

Look, here's a microscope..





Most people probably missed the point that you used a weak opener (son to be in front of me). You had to call him "son" which is lame, especially when your entire bar focuses on that. Plus, most son/sun wordplay is preschool shit. It's like holmes/homes.. "Unshakeable here" is a filler multi that doesn't tie into your theme or do anything else besides slightly boast. "Think he's a star / (w)rapping rings around son".. again, same "son" shit I mentioned before. Plus the double meanings are weak here.. you'll rap circles around him... because people think he's a star.. and the sun is a star.. so you'll call him son and make it all work out? Pfft. PLUS, going back to your first part "son to be in front of me / planet orbit".. in front of me is a stretch that most will overlook. Each planet spins on an axis, therefore "sun" won't be in front of them all the time. You could've said "for son to be behind me" and it'd make the same amount of sense.


Moral of the story: You won with a weak bar. Congrats.

This is getting boring now....No ... There was no filler..student gets it... And where did I imply he had to be in front of me all the time?... Your the one whos streatching trying to find flaws .... I just checked your most recent battle ...That was ALL filler... I wouldn't stoop so low as to start posting your bars but maybe you should turn that microscope on your own shit and spend the same amount of time and effort there ... Might be time better spent