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This verse was dope af. People are sleeping on you man. Your ability to string together punches, personals, etc is dope. You threw some relevant haymakers in here like the closer. There are lots of quotables here, and the personal edge along with the wording, coupled with the punch consistency, and the structure of the verse make you good. Only thing i'd say you need to work on is finding your own personal swag, same as esso. You both have the fundamentals down, good concepts, and you are in fact a HEAVYWEIGHT. Ive watched you climb for awhile now, and you don't get the love you deserve. Maybe you can show us all why i call you a heavyweight with this next LBT run.
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Much appreciated, fam. We'll see how the voting shakes out. Maybe we'll get a spar in sometime soon.
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This verse was dope af. People are sleeping on you man. Your ability to string together punches, personals, etc is dope. You threw some relevant haymakers in here like the closer. There are lots of quotables here, and the personal edge along with the wording, coupled with the punch consistency, and the structure of the verse make you good. Only thing i'd say you need to work on is finding your own personal swag, same as esso. You both have the fundamentals down, good concepts, and you are in fact a HEAVYWEIGHT. Ive watched you climb for awhile now, and you don't get the love you deserve. Maybe you can show us all why i call you a heavyweight with this next LBT run.
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Much appreciated, fam. We'll see how the voting shakes out. Maybe we'll get a spar in sometime soon.
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09-18-2017, 08:39 AM
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"I've been hearing voices" who SAY YOU'RE BITING HELLA SCRIPTS, you MAY DENY THE EVIDENCE but we see “ya strait jack-it, under wraps" like inSANE ASYLUM RESIDENTS who STAY CONFINED reSTRAINED INSIDE PROTECTIVE RIGS / Peeps who "Couldn't figure out the proof?" Should "PRACTICE DOING ADVANCED MATH," cause if "The Evidence Shows Row-Di'nt Bite", THAT’S A CLUE FROM SOME PACK RATS "Shape Up or Ship Out", "You couldn't move into my weight class" as a "TRANSFER STUDENT IN FAT CAMP!!!!” / You'll send me forced concepts then get de-PRESSED WHEN YOU’RE DEFEATED, N’ "Know light setups reflect on your failures" like "SELF CRITICAL PEOPLE WHEN they CHECK MIRRORS TO SEE THEIR SKIN!!!!” So “If he thinks he’s ill? I’ll lay hands on him,” this CLOWN’S NEXT TO CATCH A FIST, "God knows, I’ll handle this snake" like “deVOUT PRESBYTERIANS” / I'm an LBT card-topper, several-stints-in-the-finals while this NERD STAYED BASIC, we won't "Mention-him-with-a-title" you aren’t on a "FIRST NAME BASIS!” / Imitating the best is what this WORTHLESS FAGGOT TRIES TO DO, but as for heavyweights, Voters know their VERSES SMASH YOUR LINES IN TWO, Name your favorites & I'll humiliate them online...if we see "This herb'll tea-bag on the men-u list" someone “ORDERED CHAMOMILE BREWS!!”
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Shodan, whats good man. Cool lil verse here pimp, you def have the structure down, which is one of the hardest things to learn in battle rap. For the most part the structure was good down to the closer where you stretched the line/multi sets between verses smash your lines in two..... and ... ordered camomile brews... The multis also didnt match up syllable wise which is a costly mistake when texting. It also ordered and verses doesnt rhyme at all, so watch that. These are all mistakes that can be fixed rather easy, but what needs to take place here is more creative concepts. Keep the formula/structure, just read some of your favorite texters, and your creativity will go up.
Overall with those mistakes i saw in this battle, with a very solid structure, you are a very strong Lightweight, that is on his way to transitioning to Middleweight. Keep grinding bro.
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Originally Posted by Shodan
"I've been hearing voices" who SAY YOU'RE BITING HELLA SCRIPTS, you MAY DENY THE EVIDENCE but we see “ya strait jack-it, under wraps" like inSANE ASYLUM RESIDENTS who STAY CONFINED reSTRAINED INSIDE PROTECTIVE RIGS / Peeps who "Couldn't figure out the proof?" Should "PRACTICE DOING ADVANCED MATH," cause if "The Evidence Shows Row-Di'nt Bite", THAT’S A CLUE FROM SOME PACK RATS "Shape Up or Ship Out", "You couldn't move into my weight class" as a "TRANSFER STUDENT IN FAT CAMP!!!!” / You'll send me forced concepts then get de-PRESSED WHEN YOU’RE DEFEATED, N’ "Know light setups reflect on your failures" like "SELF CRITICAL PEOPLE WHEN they CHECK MIRRORS TO SEE THEIR SKIN!!!!” So “If he thinks he’s ill? I’ll lay hands on him,” this CLOWN’S NEXT TO CATCH A FIST, "God knows, I’ll handle this snake" like “deVOUT PRESBYTERIANS” / I'm an LBT card-topper, several-stints-in-the-finals while this NERD STAYED BASIC, we won't "Mention-him-with-a-title" you aren’t on a "FIRST NAME BASIS!” / Imitating the best is what this WORTHLESS FAGGOT TRIES TO DO, but as for heavyweights, Voters know their VERSES SMASH YOUR LINES IN TWO, Name your favorites & I'll humiliate them online...if we see "This herb'll tea-bag on the men-u list" someone “ORDERED CHAMOMILE BREWS!!”
https://www.letsbeef.com/battle_deta...n=tb&id=500338
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Shodan, whats good man. Cool lil verse here pimp, you def have the structure down, which is one of the hardest things to learn in battle rap. For the most part the structure was good down to the closer where you stretched the line/multi sets between verses smash your lines in two..... and ... ordered camomile brews... The multis also didnt match up syllable wise which is a costly mistake when texting. It also ordered and verses doesnt rhyme at all, so watch that. These are all mistakes that can be fixed rather easy, but what needs to take place here is more creative concepts. Keep the formula/structure, just read some of your favorite texters, and your creativity will go up.
Overall with those mistakes i saw in this battle, with a very solid structure, you are a very strong Lightweight, that is on his way to transitioning to Middleweight. Keep grinding bro.
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09-18-2017, 08:56 AM
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Mannn stop letting this nigga tell y'all if y'all matter or not. J is badnews!
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Mannn stop letting this nigga tell y'all if y'all matter or not. J is badnews!
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09-18-2017, 08:57 AM
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Lol. you do know that was an open i posted and wrote in like 5 min right? basically saying im retiring from texting lol
You get middle weight status for that shit... bhahahaha
Nah man. Decent verse here, didnt think that was your best verse tbh. There were some haymakers thrown as well, and you do a great job with wording. Ive read a lot of your verses, and what stands out to me are your concepts. You are creative, and throw a good amount of punches. Only thing i'd say you could work on is finding your own style, and swag. Once you find that you could be more than just a regular heavyweight.
You are a Heavyweight, have been catching bodys on the regular, and had a very solid LBT run.
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Breakin balls, homie.....its all fun. Thanks for the positive feed tho...much appreciated.
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Lol. you do know that was an open i posted and wrote in like 5 min right? basically saying im retiring from texting lol
You get middle weight status for that shit... bhahahaha
Nah man. Decent verse here, didnt think that was your best verse tbh. There were some haymakers thrown as well, and you do a great job with wording. Ive read a lot of your verses, and what stands out to me are your concepts. You are creative, and throw a good amount of punches. Only thing i'd say you could work on is finding your own style, and swag. Once you find that you could be more than just a regular heavyweight.
You are a Heavyweight, have been catching bodys on the regular, and had a very solid LBT run.
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Breakin balls, homie.....its all fun. Thanks for the positive feed tho...much appreciated.
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09-18-2017, 09:02 AM
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Breakin balls, homie.....its all fun. Thanks for the positive feed tho...much appreciated.
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Anytime bro. Go get that GC title!
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Mannn stop letting this nigga tell y'all if y'all matter or not. J is badnews!
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Lol working on a song now called Good BadNews. Joints ridinggg haha EP almost finished nigga. Whats with the name change? The new song has a line in it saying " GoodNews, GoodNews, yeah i realllly got the Juice~" haha ironic
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Breakin balls, homie.....its all fun. Thanks for the positive feed tho...much appreciated.
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Anytime bro. Go get that GC title!
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Mannn stop letting this nigga tell y'all if y'all matter or not. J is badnews!
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Lol working on a song now called Good BadNews. Joints ridinggg haha EP almost finished nigga. Whats with the name change? The new song has a line in it saying " GoodNews, GoodNews, yeah i realllly got the Juice~" haha ironic
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09-18-2017, 10:27 AM
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Anytime bro. Go get that GC title!
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Lol working on a song now called Good BadNews. Joints ridinggg haha EP almost finished nigga. Whats with the name change? The new song has a line in it saying " GoodNews, GoodNews, yeah i realllly got the Juice~" haha ironic
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LOOL you should understand that my LB name changes are the most random. And yooooo I found a studio :/
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Anytime bro. Go get that GC title!
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Lol working on a song now called Good BadNews. Joints ridinggg haha EP almost finished nigga. Whats with the name change? The new song has a line in it saying " GoodNews, GoodNews, yeah i realllly got the Juice~" haha ironic
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LOOL you should understand that my LB name changes are the most random. And yooooo I found a studio :/
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09-18-2017, 10:38 AM
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LOOL you should understand that my LB name changes are the most random. And yooooo I found a studio :/
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Thats whats good bruh.... Why the sideways face tho? lol Whats the details
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LOOL you should understand that my LB name changes are the most random. And yooooo I found a studio :/
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Thats whats good bruh.... Why the sideways face tho? lol Whats the details
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09-18-2017, 11:29 AM
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@ Erupt i don't have a whole verse i feel is my best so just rate me offa what you've read from me
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@ Erupt i don't have a whole verse i feel is my best so just rate me offa what you've read from me
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Thats whats good bruh.... Why the sideways face tho? lol Whats the details
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$$$$$
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Thats whats good bruh.... Why the sideways face tho? lol Whats the details
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My name changes > punks name changes
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My name changes > punks name changes
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