work in progress

[INFERNO727]

i know this part of the forum is for more or less finished tracks but it doesn't really have a place for, well obviously unfinished tracks or for people who are trying to get some kind of critique on there verses before they finish what could ultimately be a completly garbage ass song so that's why im here. i just got bored and wrote this verse. got a beat picked out just dont know if i should continue to go with it or not....(i really only do this as a hobby so negative criticism is just as welcome as positive, please hold no punches, i have no feelings anyway)



I wanna write the kind of sick rhyme that stays in ya mind suspended in time
Till the words hold no meaning and the view that's behind it is further and beyond
Any form of thought process, I'll never give u
Any kind of nonsense content
never be spittin the typical bullshit at u get at me I get at u wat it do
I wanna command the kinda respect to make u bow down in the presence of me
Make u understand I spit so sick and eloquently, intelligently
Lyrics comin straight from the belly of the beast on cowards imma feast cuz I'm so famished
Raise my hand kids I'm your champion
Never in my life ignored a challenge
Look at the...creativity lyrically listen to me I'm givin the u god of st. Pete
U gotta hate me but don't blame me
Ain't no whip nor no bitch in the world that can tame me

[INFERNO727]

i know this part of the forum is for more or less finished tracks but it doesn't really have a place for, well obviously unfinished tracks or for people who are trying to get some kind of critique on there verses before they finish what could ultimately be a completly garbage ass song so that's why im here. i just got bored and wrote this verse. got a beat picked out just dont know if i should continue to go with it or not....(i really only do this as a hobby so negative criticism is just as welcome as positive, please hold no punches, i have no feelings anyway)



I wanna write the kind of sick rhyme that stays in ya mind suspended in time
Till the words hold no meaning and the view that's behind it is further and beyond
Any form of thought process, I'll never give u
Any kind of nonsense content
never be spittin the typical bullshit at u get at me I get at u wat it do
I wanna command the kinda respect to make u bow down in the presence of me
Make u understand I spit so sick and eloquently, intelligently
Lyrics comin straight from the belly of the beast on cowards imma feast cuz I'm so famished
Raise my hand kids I'm your champion
Never in my life ignored a challenge
Look at the...creativity lyrically listen to me I'm givin the u god of st. Pete
U gotta hate me but don't blame me
Ain't no whip nor no bitch in the world that can tame me