Feedback on my bars I was supposed to kill BarzILLa with. - Lets Beef

calligraphist · #1 09-21-2014, 09:29 AM

Illa got incoherent lines, no bars.
Hands commence battery,Get his phone confiscated, no bars.
The 4 leaves a red dot on ya face, Lil bitch yr new home is in-the-urn/Indian, Therefore leave a red dot on ya face.
U suck dick to reserve ya spot on tha game. U a fake ass queer,
I'm gud wit rap, also batter wit hands like a puppeteer.
Half a dozen of adolescents on a bungee, I'm dropn sixTeens,
U wuldn't make em throw dey hands/hens up if dey had chickens.
U'l leav me wit no bruise/bru's like kilin my siblings. U a sweet rapper, I hit u wit a Van Illa,
U must be tyin ya laces, cuz u reachin for Defeat nygga.
Had to talk u to this fight, Jerry Springer. Its sad my bru, u been here yet never dropped anythin hot,
U battle newbies just to reserve yr spot,
See u do this out of boredom, with least passion,
I called u out, u was carried away like a sick person,
But u saw ma Barz Illa, you thought of changin your pseudonym.
U kno I'm mad wit rhymes, bad with knives,
Guns? I grab the Nina, make that ho put u to sleep like a caring wife.

calligraphist · 09-21-2014, 09:29 AM

Illa got incoherent lines, no bars.
Hands commence battery,Get his phone confiscated, no bars.
The 4 leaves a red dot on ya face, Lil bitch yr new home is in-the-urn/Indian, Therefore leave a red dot on ya face.
U suck dick to reserve ya spot on tha game. U a fake ass queer,
I'm gud wit rap, also batter wit hands like a puppeteer.
Half a dozen of adolescents on a bungee, I'm dropn sixTeens,
U wuldn't make em throw dey hands/hens up if dey had chickens.
U'l leav me wit no bruise/bru's like kilin my siblings. U a sweet rapper, I hit u wit a Van Illa,
U must be tyin ya laces, cuz u reachin for Defeat nygga.
Had to talk u to this fight, Jerry Springer. Its sad my bru, u been here yet never dropped anythin hot,
U battle newbies just to reserve yr spot,
See u do this out of boredom, with least passion,
I called u out, u was carried away like a sick person,
But u saw ma Barz Illa, you thought of changin your pseudonym.
U kno I'm mad wit rhymes, bad with knives,
Guns? I grab the Nina, make that ho put u to sleep like a caring wife.

**X-Calibur** · #2 09-21-2014, 09:58 AM

You'd have got served .... With that verse go look threw the tutorials and look up Dono and his videos ....

**X-Calibur** · 09-21-2014, 09:58 AM

You'd have got served .... With that verse go look threw the tutorials and look up Dono and his videos ....

calligraphist · #3 09-21-2014, 10:08 AM

Yeah Yeah, ride his dick

calligraphist · 09-21-2014, 10:08 AM

Yeah Yeah, ride his dick

#4 09-21-2014, 12:36 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by calligraphist

Illa got incoherent lines, no bars.
Hands commence battery,Get his phone confiscated, no bars.
The 4 leaves a red dot on ya face, Lil bitch yr new home is in-the-urn/Indian, Therefore leave a red dot on ya face.
U suck dick to reserve ya spot on tha game. U a fake ass queer,
I'm gud wit rap, also batter wit hands like a puppeteer.
Half a dozen of adolescents on a bungee, I'm dropn sixTeens,
U wuldn't make em throw dey hands/hens up if dey had chickens.
U'l leav me wit no bruise/bru's like kilin my siblings. U a sweet rapper, I hit u wit a Van Illa,
U must be tyin ya laces, cuz u reachin for Defeat nygga.
Had to talk u to this fight, Jerry Springer. Its sad my bru, u been here yet never dropped anythin hot,
U battle newbies just to reserve yr spot,
See u do this out of boredom, with least passion,
I called u out, u was carried away like a sick person,
But u saw ma Barz Illa, you thought of changin your pseudonym.
U kno I'm mad wit rhymes, bad with knives,
Guns? I grab the Nina, make that ho put u to sleep like a caring wife.

ass. you're welcome & anytime

09-21-2014, 12:36 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by calligraphist

Illa got incoherent lines, no bars.
Hands commence battery,Get his phone confiscated, no bars.
The 4 leaves a red dot on ya face, Lil bitch yr new home is in-the-urn/Indian, Therefore leave a red dot on ya face.
U suck dick to reserve ya spot on tha game. U a fake ass queer,
I'm gud wit rap, also batter wit hands like a puppeteer.
Half a dozen of adolescents on a bungee, I'm dropn sixTeens,
U wuldn't make em throw dey hands/hens up if dey had chickens.
U'l leav me wit no bruise/bru's like kilin my siblings. U a sweet rapper, I hit u wit a Van Illa,
U must be tyin ya laces, cuz u reachin for Defeat nygga.
Had to talk u to this fight, Jerry Springer. Its sad my bru, u been here yet never dropped anythin hot,
U battle newbies just to reserve yr spot,
See u do this out of boredom, with least passion,
I called u out, u was carried away like a sick person,
But u saw ma Barz Illa, you thought of changin your pseudonym.
U kno I'm mad wit rhymes, bad with knives,
Guns? I grab the Nina, make that ho put u to sleep like a caring wife.

ass. you're welcome & anytime

NatsHubby · #5 09-21-2014, 01:02 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by calligraphist

Illa got incoherent lines, no bars.
Hands commence battery,Get his phone confiscated, no bars.
The 4 leaves a red dot on ya face, Lil bitch yr new home is in-the-urn/Indian, Therefore leave a red dot on ya face.
U suck dick to reserve ya spot on tha game. U a fake ass queer,
I'm gud wit rap, also batter wit hands like a puppeteer.
Half a dozen of adolescents on a bungee, I'm dropn sixTeens,
U wuldn't make em throw dey hands/hens up if dey had chickens.
U'l leav me wit no bruise/bru's like kilin my siblings. U a sweet rapper, I hit u wit a Van Illa,
U must be tyin ya laces, cuz u reachin for Defeat nygga.
Had to talk u to this fight, Jerry Springer. Its sad my bru, u been here yet never dropped anythin hot,
U battle newbies just to reserve yr spot,
See u do this out of boredom, with least passion,
I called u out, u was carried away like a sick person,
But u saw ma Barz Illa, you thought of changin your pseudonym.
U kno I'm mad wit rhymes, bad with knives,
Guns? I grab the Nina, make that ho put u to sleep like a caring wife.

Garb

Thank you come again

NatsHubby · 09-21-2014, 01:02 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by calligraphist

Illa got incoherent lines, no bars.
Hands commence battery,Get his phone confiscated, no bars.
The 4 leaves a red dot on ya face, Lil bitch yr new home is in-the-urn/Indian, Therefore leave a red dot on ya face.
U suck dick to reserve ya spot on tha game. U a fake ass queer,
I'm gud wit rap, also batter wit hands like a puppeteer.
Half a dozen of adolescents on a bungee, I'm dropn sixTeens,
U wuldn't make em throw dey hands/hens up if dey had chickens.
U'l leav me wit no bruise/bru's like kilin my siblings. U a sweet rapper, I hit u wit a Van Illa,
U must be tyin ya laces, cuz u reachin for Defeat nygga.
Had to talk u to this fight, Jerry Springer. Its sad my bru, u been here yet never dropped anythin hot,
U battle newbies just to reserve yr spot,
See u do this out of boredom, with least passion,
I called u out, u was carried away like a sick person,
But u saw ma Barz Illa, you thought of changin your pseudonym.
U kno I'm mad wit rhymes, bad with knives,
Guns? I grab the Nina, make that ho put u to sleep like a caring wife.

Garb

Thank you come again

**Wonderbred** · #6 09-21-2014, 04:58 PM

>asks for feedback
>turns into a whiny bitch when people give him feedback

Seriously, if those are the lines that you were supposed to kill BarzILLa with, then this is the lotto ticket I was supposed to win a million dollars with.

**Wonderbred** · 09-21-2014, 04:58 PM

>asks for feedback
>turns into a whiny bitch when people give him feedback

Seriously, if those are the lines that you were supposed to kill BarzILLa with, then this is the lotto ticket I was supposed to win a million dollars with.

**stricc** · #7 09-21-2014, 05:06 PM

hands down some of tha worst shit to hit lb and lb has had some pretty bad shit come thru

**stricc** · 09-21-2014, 05:06 PM

hands down some of tha worst shit to hit lb and lb has had some pretty bad shit come thru

**AfterThought** · #8 09-21-2014, 05:17 PM

Yeah that was garbage.

Keep elevatin tho.

**AfterThought** · 09-21-2014, 05:17 PM

Yeah that was garbage.

Keep elevatin tho.

**Shodan** · #9 09-21-2014, 07:26 PM

I wonder if this is what daddio sees when he reads our battles

**Shodan** · 09-21-2014, 07:26 PM

I wonder if this is what daddio sees when he reads our battles

Silver Dollar Sam · #10 09-22-2014, 08:44 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Octavia

I wonder if this is what daddio sees when he reads our battles

^^^^

lmao...true

---------- Post added at 02:44 PM ---------- Previous post was at 02:19 PM ----------

Quote:

Originally Posted by calligraphist

Illa got incoherent lines, no bars.
Hands commence battery,Get his phone confiscated, no bars.
The 4 leaves a red dot on ya face, Lil bitch yr new home is in-the-urn/Indian, Therefore leave a red dot on ya face.
U suck dick to reserve ya spot on tha game. U a fake ass queer,
I'm gud wit rap, also batter wit hands like a puppeteer.
Half a dozen of adolescents on a bungee, I'm dropn sixTeens,
U wuldn't make em throw dey hands/hens up if dey had chickens.
U'l leav me wit no bruise/bru's like kilin my siblings. U a sweet rapper, I hit u wit a Van Illa,
U must be tyin ya laces, cuz u reachin for Defeat nygga.
Had to talk u to this fight, Jerry Springer. Its sad my bru, u been here yet never dropped anythin hot,
U battle newbies just to reserve yr spot,
See u do this out of boredom, with least passion,
I called u out, u was carried away like a sick person,
But u saw ma Barz Illa, you thought of changin your pseudonym.
U kno I'm mad wit rhymes, bad with knives,
Guns? I grab the Nina, make that ho put u to sleep like a caring wife.

Noone was gona die offa this fam. Take criticism and keep elevating boi...

Yo....@BarzILLA you lucky fuck lmao....

Silver Dollar Sam · 09-22-2014, 08:44 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Octavia

I wonder if this is what daddio sees when he reads our battles

^^^^

lmao...true

---------- Post added at 02:44 PM ---------- Previous post was at 02:19 PM ----------

Quote:

Originally Posted by calligraphist

Illa got incoherent lines, no bars.
Hands commence battery,Get his phone confiscated, no bars.
The 4 leaves a red dot on ya face, Lil bitch yr new home is in-the-urn/Indian, Therefore leave a red dot on ya face.
U suck dick to reserve ya spot on tha game. U a fake ass queer,
I'm gud wit rap, also batter wit hands like a puppeteer.
Half a dozen of adolescents on a bungee, I'm dropn sixTeens,
U wuldn't make em throw dey hands/hens up if dey had chickens.
U'l leav me wit no bruise/bru's like kilin my siblings. U a sweet rapper, I hit u wit a Van Illa,
U must be tyin ya laces, cuz u reachin for Defeat nygga.
Had to talk u to this fight, Jerry Springer. Its sad my bru, u been here yet never dropped anythin hot,
U battle newbies just to reserve yr spot,
See u do this out of boredom, with least passion,
I called u out, u was carried away like a sick person,
But u saw ma Barz Illa, you thought of changin your pseudonym.
U kno I'm mad wit rhymes, bad with knives,
Guns? I grab the Nina, make that ho put u to sleep like a caring wife.

Noone was gona die offa this fam. Take criticism and keep elevating boi...

Yo....@BarzILLA you lucky fuck lmao....


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