Just C vs Verity ROUND 2 VERITY WINS!!

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Just C vs Verity

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@Just C ..

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@Just C ..

[Just C]

Check @Verity.

[Just C]

Check @Verity.

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Checkity @Just C the train broke down and i've just got home -_- 9 oclock deadline still stand? Or shall we just say it needs to be tonight some time? your choice

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Checkity @Just C the train broke down and i've just got home -_- 9 oclock deadline still stand? Or shall we just say it needs to be tonight some time? your choice

[Just C]

Well since your train broke down.

And City Vs. Chelsea has just kicked off.

You wanna just say anytime tonight?

@Verity.

[Just C]

Well since your train broke down.

And City Vs. Chelsea has just kicked off.

You wanna just say anytime tonight?

@Verity.

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@Just C and the apprentice starts tonight... lol yeah that's cool. As long as the next round kicks off by tomorrow i'm happy, and confident we'll get enough votes to close it soon after us both posting.

G'luck

[IV]

@Just C and the apprentice starts tonight... lol yeah that's cool. As long as the next round kicks off by tomorrow i'm happy, and confident we'll get enough votes to close it soon after us both posting.

G'luck

[IV]

The 14th of next month will mark the 100th anniversary of the sinking of the Titanic, as tribute to this event I have taken this topic at face value. Not only this, but the characters, situations and timing have all been solidly based on fact from research of censors and biographies.

On the 10th of April 1912 the R.M.S Titanic, sailed off from Southampton, England.
Little did the world know, the White Star Line all-star pride would never reach it’s destination; New York City.
In the late hours of April 14th, the Titanic struck an ice berg
In the early hours of the following morning..
The un-sinkable, invincible, even God-couldn’t-sink-it-all ship was lost to Davey Jones locker
She wasn’t alone.
2206 people on board, 703 souls were spared.

April 15th, 1.50am
Setting fire to burning souls made flares from all the ashes
To catch the eye of sailors;
Steering past the masses of tragic chaotic madness
People falling in to the ice-cold abyss, scared but strangely placid
They’d burn the poor for heat; diseased rotten carcass
But don’t care for toxic gases
So the atmosphere is left to freeze like the air across the atlas

April 15th, 2.20am
The lights switch off, the lifeboats drift off
Taking with it whatever hopes were left
Departing chance of savior disappears to the ocean crest
Screaming, cries, yet the tainted silence spoke of death
As the doomed stood upon the broken deck
About to meet their coldest fate
From their hopeless bodies, their souls escape
In the form of mist from frozen breath

First Class. Molly Brown.
11.40PM, April 14th
Dear diary
Ah, another day aboard the beautiful Titanic!
Ending the night with a bottle of scotch (I’ll try not to drink it all!)
We’ve had a collision, a big tear on the side! And its…
Never mind! We’ve been promised the ship is unsinkable
So why panic?
I had a run in with a lovely lady and her two sons, I thought she was a servant
She was a 3rd class passenger, apparently we can’t be friends with them
The venom in their eyes at the sight of her, similar to a serpent
We had a jolly good chat, I’ll never listen to them again!
After speaking with Rosa, It’s funny, the thing is
The epiphany struck after meeting her sons, charming boys
I realized there’s more to life than money and riches
Lovely fe.. what on earth was that alarming noise?
It was just a bloody ice berg! Good Christ, what next!
Nothing to worry about I’m sure, good night, and God bless

Third class. Rhoda ‘Rosa’ Abott.
April 15th, 12.59am
Dear Lord, I know we don’t talk every day
The fate of this ship is falling away
3rd class passengers, too poor to be saved
But my beautiful boys
They’re always behaved
Lord, please hear my cries
Save my babies God leave me to die

Second class. Olaus Jørgensen Abelseth.
April 15th, 2.00am
MOEN! SOHOUT! PLEASE ANSWER MY CRIES
YOU WERE RIGHT BEHIND ME, YOU CAN’T HAVE JUST DIED!
2.15am
I’VE BEEN SWIMMING FOR 15 MINUTES, MY ORGANS ARE SHUTTING DOWN
I’VE SEEN A LIFEBOAT, I’M CLOSE, BUT IT’S ALREADY FLOODED OUT!
REST IN PEACE MY FAMILY, THE PAIN FOR YOU, IT’S OVER
I’M HANGING ON TO HOPE, BUT THE BOAT MIGHT TIP OVER
THEY MaY PULL ME ABOARD, IT’S THE ONLY HOPE THAT’S LEFT
BUT IT’S KILLING ME ANYWAY;
MY CLOSET, DEAD? AND I’M DISSAPEARING AWAY, TO THE OCEAN CREST


2.20am, April 15th.
This was it, the ship went down, the air polluted with babies cries
Still water corrupted with people who were about to die
The sound drowned out, life boat 6 turned around
It was simple; Molly Brown, she saw the world through Laymens eyes
She hijacked the lifeboat that rescued her party, and went back to save their lives

The unsinkable Molly Brown known for her sense of humor and her heroism demanded the crew of her lifeboat returned to the wreck and search for the living. She went on to be known as the most famous person to survive the Titanic.

Rosa escaped the tragedy, she survived but not the others
Rossmore and Eurgene, they had died, and never recovered

When the 3rd class passengers finally had the chance of savior, Rosa got pushed into lifeboat A by the swarms of people trying to aboard the already flooded boat. Her sons were lost forever, their bodies were never recovered. May they Rest In Peace.

Rosa stretched her hand to his
And pulled aboard Mr Abelseth

The boat was flooded, two people froze to death
It wasn’t Rosa, nor Olaus, Blessed was he
But two identified bodies, may they Rest In Peace

Rosa helped Olaus onto the lifeboat after having him cling on to his life for over an hour in the numbing water. He had lost his whole family in the wreck, and, despite his wife being put on an earlier lifeboat she didn’t make the journey. May they Rest In Peace.


April 15th, 1.50am
Setting fire to burning souls made flares from all the ashes
To catch the eye of sailors;
Steering past the masses of tragic chaotic madness
People falling in to the ice-cold abyss, scared but strangely placid
They’d burn the poor for heat; diseased rotten carcass
But don’t care for toxic gases
So the atmosphere is left to freeze like the air across the atlas

April 15th, 2.20am
The lights switch off, the lifeboats drift off
Taking with it whatever hopes were left
Departing chance of savior disappears to the ocean crest
Screaming, cries, yet the tainted silence spoke of death
As the doomed stood upon the broken deck
About to meet their coldest fate
From their hopeless bodies, their souls escape
In the form of mist from frozen breath

[IV]

The 14th of next month will mark the 100th anniversary of the sinking of the Titanic, as tribute to this event I have taken this topic at face value. Not only this, but the characters, situations and timing have all been solidly based on fact from research of censors and biographies.

On the 10th of April 1912 the R.M.S Titanic, sailed off from Southampton, England.
Little did the world know, the White Star Line all-star pride would never reach it’s destination; New York City.
In the late hours of April 14th, the Titanic struck an ice berg
In the early hours of the following morning..
The un-sinkable, invincible, even God-couldn’t-sink-it-all ship was lost to Davey Jones locker
She wasn’t alone.
2206 people on board, 703 souls were spared.

April 15th, 1.50am
Setting fire to burning souls made flares from all the ashes
To catch the eye of sailors;
Steering past the masses of tragic chaotic madness
People falling in to the ice-cold abyss, scared but strangely placid
They’d burn the poor for heat; diseased rotten carcass
But don’t care for toxic gases
So the atmosphere is left to freeze like the air across the atlas

April 15th, 2.20am
The lights switch off, the lifeboats drift off
Taking with it whatever hopes were left
Departing chance of savior disappears to the ocean crest
Screaming, cries, yet the tainted silence spoke of death
As the doomed stood upon the broken deck
About to meet their coldest fate
From their hopeless bodies, their souls escape
In the form of mist from frozen breath

First Class. Molly Brown.
11.40PM, April 14th
Dear diary
Ah, another day aboard the beautiful Titanic!
Ending the night with a bottle of scotch (I’ll try not to drink it all!)
We’ve had a collision, a big tear on the side! And its…
Never mind! We’ve been promised the ship is unsinkable
So why panic?
I had a run in with a lovely lady and her two sons, I thought she was a servant
She was a 3rd class passenger, apparently we can’t be friends with them
The venom in their eyes at the sight of her, similar to a serpent
We had a jolly good chat, I’ll never listen to them again!
After speaking with Rosa, It’s funny, the thing is
The epiphany struck after meeting her sons, charming boys
I realized there’s more to life than money and riches
Lovely fe.. what on earth was that alarming noise?
It was just a bloody ice berg! Good Christ, what next!
Nothing to worry about I’m sure, good night, and God bless

Third class. Rhoda ‘Rosa’ Abott.
April 15th, 12.59am
Dear Lord, I know we don’t talk every day
The fate of this ship is falling away
3rd class passengers, too poor to be saved
But my beautiful boys
They’re always behaved
Lord, please hear my cries
Save my babies God leave me to die

Second class. Olaus Jørgensen Abelseth.
April 15th, 2.00am
MOEN! SOHOUT! PLEASE ANSWER MY CRIES
YOU WERE RIGHT BEHIND ME, YOU CAN’T HAVE JUST DIED!
2.15am
I’VE BEEN SWIMMING FOR 15 MINUTES, MY ORGANS ARE SHUTTING DOWN
I’VE SEEN A LIFEBOAT, I’M CLOSE, BUT IT’S ALREADY FLOODED OUT!
REST IN PEACE MY FAMILY, THE PAIN FOR YOU, IT’S OVER
I’M HANGING ON TO HOPE, BUT THE BOAT MIGHT TIP OVER
THEY MaY PULL ME ABOARD, IT’S THE ONLY HOPE THAT’S LEFT
BUT IT’S KILLING ME ANYWAY;
MY CLOSET, DEAD? AND I’M DISSAPEARING AWAY, TO THE OCEAN CREST


2.20am, April 15th.
This was it, the ship went down, the air polluted with babies cries
Still water corrupted with people who were about to die
The sound drowned out, life boat 6 turned around
It was simple; Molly Brown, she saw the world through Laymens eyes
She hijacked the lifeboat that rescued her party, and went back to save their lives

The unsinkable Molly Brown known for her sense of humor and her heroism demanded the crew of her lifeboat returned to the wreck and search for the living. She went on to be known as the most famous person to survive the Titanic.

Rosa escaped the tragedy, she survived but not the others
Rossmore and Eurgene, they had died, and never recovered

When the 3rd class passengers finally had the chance of savior, Rosa got pushed into lifeboat A by the swarms of people trying to aboard the already flooded boat. Her sons were lost forever, their bodies were never recovered. May they Rest In Peace.

Rosa stretched her hand to his
And pulled aboard Mr Abelseth

The boat was flooded, two people froze to death
It wasn’t Rosa, nor Olaus, Blessed was he
But two identified bodies, may they Rest In Peace

Rosa helped Olaus onto the lifeboat after having him cling on to his life for over an hour in the numbing water. He had lost his whole family in the wreck, and, despite his wife being put on an earlier lifeboat she didn’t make the journey. May they Rest In Peace.


April 15th, 1.50am
Setting fire to burning souls made flares from all the ashes
To catch the eye of sailors;
Steering past the masses of tragic chaotic madness
People falling in to the ice-cold abyss, scared but strangely placid
They’d burn the poor for heat; diseased rotten carcass
But don’t care for toxic gases
So the atmosphere is left to freeze like the air across the atlas

April 15th, 2.20am
The lights switch off, the lifeboats drift off
Taking with it whatever hopes were left
Departing chance of savior disappears to the ocean crest
Screaming, cries, yet the tainted silence spoke of death
As the doomed stood upon the broken deck
About to meet their coldest fate
From their hopeless bodies, their souls escape
In the form of mist from frozen breath

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