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03-13-2010, 07:38 PM
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And I'm Not FVC?
ok look at my last expo and tell me why i'm not FVC... if you can
A Certain Swag vs. Jack-O-Lantern
damn it this'll be a long expo... Break Down: Swag- opener was just beasting it out, like K said simple but well executed, flow was nice, structured well, concepts original, executed like a hanging, and surprisingly you went without any played lines about pumpking... good work// Jack- opener was nice, your flow is excellent, nice structure, ya got some good vocab, you set things up very well, and then you execute them nicely.... good work ~~ Best Lines: Swag- my favorite from you was--> Its like "Dislexia" the way he FAILING WIT GRAMMA, like a "Lunatic Judge" ill be FLAILING THE HAMMER, only time Jack "Sees/Seas" My "Frame" is SAILING WITH CAMERAS!!... second was---> I Didnt even want to "Waste Words" on this AGGRESSIVE PRICK, but im'a leev "Gay Murked" with A MESSAGE SICK, bashin his Skull till A CREVICE SPLIT, now this "Pussy's Face" lookin like A BLEMISHED CLIT!!//... then my 3rd favorite was ---> I think his EYES DECEIVED, Covered in Blood, Now “Watch” as i put my “Red Hand on his Lungs” so he got Minimum TIME TO BREATHE... Then He’ll “Float N Leave/Floatin Leaf”, And lose his “Bark” like DYING TREES!//... all of these were well set up and executed... good job// Jack- my favoite line from you was --->He ain't TEXTIN BOUT HIS SMITH AND'S, It's just the GAY HE MIGHT SHOW when he talks about "Tossing Me In The Ring" with some 'LADY TYPE' HOLDS, But his bars are "More Stretched Out" than WRESTLING SUBMISSIONS!!//... my 2nd was ---->That wouldn't be fair though, Like a GRIND TIME PRO versus John Cena, Or one of the guys from CRIME TIME... YO mute button... Your Tone-Is-Void, But It ain't hard to see why people LIKE MY PROSE, And "Swag Surfin" like "Soulja-Boy" still couldn't surVIVE MY FLOW!!//... and my 3rd was ---> Look, I'll take, And MAKE YOU DIE SLOW! Punches? "J's Rock" you could SAY THIS GUY'S 'STONED', But he'll never "Point With The Beam" to leave "Cons Hurt" like LASER LIGHT SHOWS!!//... like Swag's they were all nicely se up and executed... good job ~~ Overall: winner was a tough choice.... it was basically versitility & originality verse concepts & flow... both had hard punches and executed well but my descision came down to who i think had the better and more consistent delivery ~~ Scoring: winner recieves high 9 and looser recieves a higher mid 9... ya dig? ~~ fair is in and how can you argue against this expo... probably most thorough one here
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03-13-2010, 07:38 PM
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And I'm Not FVC?
ok look at my last expo and tell me why i'm not FVC... if you can
A Certain Swag vs. Jack-O-Lantern
damn it this'll be a long expo... Break Down: Swag- opener was just beasting it out, like K said simple but well executed, flow was nice, structured well, concepts original, executed like a hanging, and surprisingly you went without any played lines about pumpking... good work// Jack- opener was nice, your flow is excellent, nice structure, ya got some good vocab, you set things up very well, and then you execute them nicely.... good work ~~ Best Lines: Swag- my favorite from you was--> Its like "Dislexia" the way he FAILING WIT GRAMMA, like a "Lunatic Judge" ill be FLAILING THE HAMMER, only time Jack "Sees/Seas" My "Frame" is SAILING WITH CAMERAS!!... second was---> I Didnt even want to "Waste Words" on this AGGRESSIVE PRICK, but im'a leev "Gay Murked" with A MESSAGE SICK, bashin his Skull till A CREVICE SPLIT, now this "Pussy's Face" lookin like A BLEMISHED CLIT!!//... then my 3rd favorite was ---> I think his EYES DECEIVED, Covered in Blood, Now “Watch” as i put my “Red Hand on his Lungs” so he got Minimum TIME TO BREATHE... Then He’ll “Float N Leave/Floatin Leaf”, And lose his “Bark” like DYING TREES!//... all of these were well set up and executed... good job// Jack- my favoite line from you was --->He ain't TEXTIN BOUT HIS SMITH AND'S, It's just the GAY HE MIGHT SHOW when he talks about "Tossing Me In The Ring" with some 'LADY TYPE' HOLDS, But his bars are "More Stretched Out" than WRESTLING SUBMISSIONS!!//... my 2nd was ---->That wouldn't be fair though, Like a GRIND TIME PRO versus John Cena, Or one of the guys from CRIME TIME... YO mute button... Your Tone-Is-Void, But It ain't hard to see why people LIKE MY PROSE, And "Swag Surfin" like "Soulja-Boy" still couldn't surVIVE MY FLOW!!//... and my 3rd was ---> Look, I'll take, And MAKE YOU DIE SLOW! Punches? "J's Rock" you could SAY THIS GUY'S 'STONED', But he'll never "Point With The Beam" to leave "Cons Hurt" like LASER LIGHT SHOWS!!//... like Swag's they were all nicely se up and executed... good job ~~ Overall: winner was a tough choice.... it was basically versitility & originality verse concepts & flow... both had hard punches and executed well but my descision came down to who i think had the better and more consistent delivery ~~ Scoring: winner recieves high 9 and looser recieves a higher mid 9... ya dig? ~~ fair is in and how can you argue against this expo... probably most thorough one here
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