Judge Me

[kashelg]

Ok, please be honest and tell me how this sounds! i want to try this rap with audio but im a lil shy with my shit and im waiting to get the house to myself ....also how do u format this? i was told my shit is read confusingly....but i can rap it very clearly. i dont get it. anyway here it is... (second verse not complete. just tryna see if this is worth anything. i might need to quit while im ahead) lol
to "stay schemin" by rick ross

verse I

im lookn at the time
like "what happend to the TIME?"
listening to these voices
like "what happend to my MIND?"
what is this shit up in me?
its time i gotta FIND (it)
get a rock n a bowl
i say bitch u gotta GRIND (it)
like im CHEROKEE
these demons up in ME
my spirit tell em FLEE
dont get the best of ME
2 teams spiritually, red and blue
which one r U.
what the fuck is UP?
i say, FUCK my PURPLE GUTS.
God, i'm SORRY, dare not FOLLOW ME
i cant take u to the wizard
im not DOROTHY
that nigga aint even the nigga that im tryna SEE
that bitch aint worth shit, but thats what u wanna BE?
no class, n ur principles' the BLAME
sloppy bitches wobble while they looking for a BRAIN
cut of the same mold, yeah,ya bitches all the SAME
picture perfect? then get yo ass back in the FRAME
fuck ya mirrors, n stay in yo got damn LANE. (im coming thru)

chorus x2
a hustle is a hustle is a hustle is a hustle
now i'm rushing to the hustle like
my first name should be russell
breaking bread like barney's friends
would u like some pumpernickle
this game got the same cards
its time that ya did a shuffle

Verse II

i wasnt with u when u was shootin in the gym
but i was with up in court on ur side. no win
u wasnt with me when i told ur seed about them
baby boy in the street. where the fuck have u been?
tyrna calm ur lil boy with a tempter so raw
writing u letters, mann, he hates that chore
see, the nigga like u. he cant tell no lie
it dont take all day to write "why?"

chorus II x2

im headed home
where them goons breed goons
and when they grown
they shit on ur silver spoons
i'll be gone till november.
but i'll be back by june
flow crazy hott. yeah, call this a looney tune

[kashelg]

Ok, please be honest and tell me how this sounds! i want to try this rap with audio but im a lil shy with my shit and im waiting to get the house to myself ....also how do u format this? i was told my shit is read confusingly....but i can rap it very clearly. i dont get it. anyway here it is... (second verse not complete. just tryna see if this is worth anything. i might need to quit while im ahead) lol
to "stay schemin" by rick ross

verse I

im lookn at the time
like "what happend to the TIME?"
listening to these voices
like "what happend to my MIND?"
what is this shit up in me?
its time i gotta FIND (it)
get a rock n a bowl
i say bitch u gotta GRIND (it)
like im CHEROKEE
these demons up in ME
my spirit tell em FLEE
dont get the best of ME
2 teams spiritually, red and blue
which one r U.
what the fuck is UP?
i say, FUCK my PURPLE GUTS.
God, i'm SORRY, dare not FOLLOW ME
i cant take u to the wizard
im not DOROTHY
that nigga aint even the nigga that im tryna SEE
that bitch aint worth shit, but thats what u wanna BE?
no class, n ur principles' the BLAME
sloppy bitches wobble while they looking for a BRAIN
cut of the same mold, yeah,ya bitches all the SAME
picture perfect? then get yo ass back in the FRAME
fuck ya mirrors, n stay in yo got damn LANE. (im coming thru)

chorus x2
a hustle is a hustle is a hustle is a hustle
now i'm rushing to the hustle like
my first name should be russell
breaking bread like barney's friends
would u like some pumpernickle
this game got the same cards
its time that ya did a shuffle

Verse II

i wasnt with u when u was shootin in the gym
but i was with up in court on ur side. no win
u wasnt with me when i told ur seed about them
baby boy in the street. where the fuck have u been?
tyrna calm ur lil boy with a tempter so raw
writing u letters, mann, he hates that chore
see, the nigga like u. he cant tell no lie
it dont take all day to write "why?"

chorus II x2

im headed home
where them goons breed goons
and when they grown
they shit on ur silver spoons
i'll be gone till november.
but i'll be back by june
flow crazy hott. yeah, call this a looney tune

[EgoTizTiK]

First Verse is to Long With no real Point ... I got Bored of reading after the first couple Bars .. Just think quality over quantity...

[EgoTizTiK]

First Verse is to Long With no real Point ... I got Bored of reading after the first couple Bars .. Just think quality over quantity...