It's nice of you to offer help, really I appreciate it, but people offered to help years ago but I turned it down, and the reason why I did that was because; to improve on my battles I'd literally have to change my style and stuff, and to me that's not worth sacrificing, cause then it effects how I write music, ( it'll give my writing habits mixed signals ) and I don't wanna loose that habit I got going, so it doesn't matter to me if I lose a lot of battles, as long as I have that drive to write by facing competition, I'm happy
The practice itself is more satisfying than the win.

If you’re willing to accept help, dm me. I’m not the greatest but I have resources from a lot of really experienced people. All respect to anyone tryna improve G.

Also, don’t apologize to me. Apologize to them. They’re not going to see that apology.

It is an diss tho, particularly a gun bar in specifics. Thats simply a stylistic preference. Most people won’t vote for gun-bars in higher level battles. As well it has wordplay. I could apply that same argument to yours. How is saying your gonna drive a self-driving smart car a diss? You’re just saying you’re gonna kill him, just like he said to you.

Also the rhymes he had were FOUR syllables. Li-Si Tle-Ly, Pu-Fu Tty-Nny and so one and so forth. In that specific example only one part of the multi was broken. It’s two words but complexities of multis are about length of syllables, not words. If you had a verse of consistently COMPLETE rhymes rather than half rhymes (such as the Little / Silly, which is a half rhyme), you might’ve been able to make an argument for better multis there, but you both had some that had half rhymes, and some of your schemes were broken, and his weren’t.

Okay alright alright, I get it, you're right, I'm wrong, ( especially with conspiracy thing ) okay I'm sorry, especially sorry to Masked Reaper..
And yeah okay the " stretch thing " you were talking about, I get, you're right about that, I won't complain about it. but the other dude still didn't do much either, example when he said: SILLY PUTTY / LITTLE DUMMY /ISN'T FUNNY, ( those are just single rhymes with 2 syllables, which is even worse than what I wrote ) ( on top of that, he stuck with a single rhyme the whole way through the verse ) and when he said " You & your crew whole 'will get a shot': DRINKING BUDDIES! " that's not even a diss, let alone a punch, AND what he wrote was really basic. I can write something like that in 20 seconds myself. ) so you can see why I'm upset.

Lastly, you didn’t throw a single punch in your verse. You didn’t write a set-up then a punchline. Everything you had was off-handed diss. Typical punchline structure is to have one line of set-up then one line executing the punch (in an 8).


You can’t better if you don’t open yourself to improvement, and write now using that verse as reference, you’re at about a 4. You also need to stop thinking there’s a fucking conspiracy against you. There’s not. Just get better.

Since you’re trying to flame other members like @Xplissit and @Masked Reaper I’m gonna teach you a lil’ lesson on the basics of battle rap to prove why your verse was undeserving of anything more than a 4.

Like cmon dawg you can’t say shit like “Stretched like Stretch Armstrong”.

1. That’s not wordplay because stretch still means to stretch

2. That is the least creative use of a simile I’ve ever seen. It’s like if I were to say “I’ll leave you blue like a blue headband”.

Also, take a look at your “complex schemes”. Houn-Ding-Me, Moun-Tain-Sheep, Crowd-Can-See. Your longest scheme is that, and your first scheme is completely broken. 3-syllables schemes are considered basic and are usually compensated for with Interior rhyming, which you didn’t use.