Round 2 Submission Deadline: August 16 at 5pm PST (GMT -7). Good luck gents!

Apoc!

ITS APOC !!! 

Apoc!

WILL DROP MY EXPO WHEN HE POSTS.....APOC!

H-pal-or-I/H-pylori

Lining around

H-pylori is a bacteria that damages the lining of the stomach.

Hard-'n/Harden

James Harden aka Chef Harden

Elephant - gun

EXPO - 'IT' IS A MOVIE ABOUT A CLOWN, AND IN 'CRICKET' ROUNDS ARE SEPERATED AS 'OVERS', AND IF YOUR TEAM LOSES ONE OF THEIR BATSMAN THEY ARE 'DOWN A WICKET'.

'RED RIBBON ARMY' IS FROM 'DRAGON BALL Z'.... I WAS SUPPOSED TO SPELL THA MULTI AS 'DRAGON BALLZ' SO THATS A LIL TYPO.

'JUMBO' IS THA MOTHER OF 'DUMBO'.

WORDPLAYS USED WERE - ROUNDABOUT AND DISABILITY.

Votes in..

SHOOT KG?! MAYNE I THOUGHT WE WAS THA HOMIES 

lmaoo

APOCCCCC ALL DAY

Good battle.

One verse was better in all aspects.

Good luck.

ItzzOver, to be honest with you, I laughed at this verse because I thought it was so bad. I appreciate your attempts at creativity here, I really do, but the way you executed most of your punches ranged from unsettling and mediocre to just absolutely awful. You need to make sure that everything you say sounds natural and, if it's a double-meaning, that it sounds natural both ways. For example, "I'm thinking of hitting H. Pylori kill him" is blatantly ungrammatical, and nobody would ever say that in regular speech, even though the sentence works grammatically after the other meaning of the wordplay is substituted.

You also need to avoid obviously contrived ideas to make your punches work. Like, why in the world would James Harden be on a spaceship? That's outrageous, and it does a disservice to how seriously I can take the bar.

HVK, right off the bat, I want to note two obvious flaws before dissecting further. First off, does RASPBERRY have two syllables in the UK? Over here, it has three, and if it has three over there too, that's a fucking broken multi. Shameful. Also, disability / diss ability is spectacularly played. I remember that Godbody used the same wordplay against me years ago, Xwizit used it against me just a few months ago, and I believe I've seen it other times too.

Beyond that, I thought most of your stuff was seriously forced. A prime example of this was the "Jumbo Jet" bar. What does it mean to jumbo? I get the reference but no reference is worth writing something so completely ungrammatical. On a less sour note, I've never heard anybody refer to using a wheelchair as "wheeling a chair," but maybe that's a UK idiom. In the Dragon Balls punch, the word "homo" is in quotes, but the final punch has nothing to do with the word homo. It has to do with dragons and breathing fire... yeah... not homo sapiens or homosexuality. You ought to know better than to put irrelevant words in quotation marks by now.

Overall, both made strong attempts at bringing good verses, but both drops were seriously marred by issues in concepts and, more severely, execution. I think one was ahead overall though. Fair's in.

Shoot KG! his tussle w/ K? I'll FLY IN A POUND, Um thinking of hitting "H~pal~or~I kill him" since I can easily “damage" your best “LINE~IN A~ROUND“!

Just seems really weird to me that in a battle against HaychVeeKay, the first 2 words out of your mouth are SHOOT KG. Also, this is a pretty brutal WP and capped off with the fact its a ROUNDS line makes me really go yuck.

Years in the "field & still pips ain't dig you well" like "PRICKS WHEN THEY SOW A SEED", So I'll be "wrecking this master craft" till it "CHIPS OFF FROM NOAH,SINCE" you try hard to be like X & Noble but like "paraplegic toilets"; your “SHIT'S ON A LOWER SEAT“!

I mean it's good, there's some good build up here for sure. Redeemed yourself here.

Ya friend Ag? how you “low blow a cheap shot“ & still fail to "PAIN HIS FACE,HIPS“, Cos we thought KO, H'll “whip the shit“ & come on FLAMES W/ PLAIN CLIPS,

PAIN HIS FACE, HIPS is a super unnatural way to speak/rap. This seems like filler overall

thence we sadly realized that only time this “Chef hard~'n his materials out of this world“ .. it's "JAMES ON SPACESHIPS"!

Took a bit too long to get to the ppint here and also for the flow of the line as the rhymes were quite far apart.

Match w/ IO, If he got the "balls i'll take 'em out" quicker than when you "BOLDLY SWOOP A NUT SACK", Concept tourney? Your run w/ Lock was a joke, I mean the kid didn't bring nothing COLD, HE WOULD'VE FUCKED FAG,

Same story, just way too much space inbetween rhymes hurts the flow. also wtf swoop a nut sack?

yet this “veteran failed to string it from the arm“ like an “OLDIE W/A CLUTCH BAG“!

Pretty good final punch to that scheme.

i'll "run him down w/ the elephants" then these "CREATURES SPLAT HIM WHEN THEY FUSS", Fvc leader better "pray" if he's really "hungry for that doe" like when “PREACHERS GET WEAK IN A FAST“, Cos “stepping up to me will get your shit raised“ like a "TEACHER'S PET EAGER TO PASS"! DOUBLE R!!

Wtf is the CREATURES multi supposed to rhyme with? Doesn't have the same count of sylls not really come close to rhyming with the last 2 multis nor the multi preceding it. Punch wasn't bad which is like how im trying to look at it like it was creative enough but technical lapses do cost you points.

this 'pretender?' once he DROPS HIS 'MASK' HES FICKLE me an this 'fake face off' so il 'dis-arm tha dude' then STOP THIS NASTY 'CRIPPLE!'

Pretty good opener.

he wont cause-ah-rumble tha 'fruit' will 'fall-an-crumble' now WATCH THIS 'RASPBERRY' 'RIPPLE!',

Meh, not realy feeling this, also sounds broken when read aloud.

il make ya 'leave this sporting arena' so ya TEAM IS NOW DOWN A 'WICKET' youl watch tha end of 'Itzz' 'over' like ive BEATEN THIS 'CLOWN' AT 'CRICKET!',

That's hard.

if 'push comes to shove?' he be NEEDIN THA CARE TONIGHT coz 'after ya drop?' youl show ya 'diss ability' now hes 'WHEELIN A CHAIR FA LIFE!',

Yep. Nothing to point out here. Solid.

trys his FISTS IN THA BRAWL but youl MISS THEN YA FALL he tried 'shadow boxing fa training' an broke his WRISTS ON THA WALL!,

I mean there just isn't really a ton of substance here. Good flow though but not quite alot of meat on the bones here.

joinin tha 'red ribbon army?' ya basically sayin ''im GAY WIT A BADGE AN ALL'' yeah this 'homo can spit fire' but prefers ta PLAY WIT THA 'DRAGON BALLS!',

Meh, not really feeling this one.

can he 'fly wit tha heavyweights?' lets see how far 'DUMBO' AH GET! coz ya 'carryin all ya mothers baggage' so ya better 'JUMBO' YA 'JET!',

Nice. Multi count is low here but is clean which is whats more important. I'll take a clean 4 count over a dirty 7 count any day.

with my 'punches?' tha 'odds are against ya' everyones 'BETTIN' AH 'POUND YA OUT' an tha 'vultures will be circling' if this scavenger tries GETTIN A'ROUND DA BOUT!',

Little bit basic here but i liked it.

he wont 'advance or make tha cut' so il still BREATHE WHEN HE HOLDS THA KNIFE ya 'miss tha target everytime' so i know he wont aCHIEVE ANY 'GOALS IN LIFE!'// APOC!

Yeah it's pretty good here, just would like to have seen some more relevancy between the set up and punch.

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I think this one is pretty clear. One just had smoother rhyming with stronger concepts and less reaches. This is where my vote goes.

My winner had the better punchs, flow and multies and set some punchs pretty well.. he also stuck to the same concept for a while and ended it with a nice little haymaker wich really made it interesting.. my loser still did his thing I just think this wasnt his clash to win.. he deff had some nice imagination and punchs here and there but it just wasnt enough to take the win here for me... GB both FV

My winner had a action packed verse a went tid for tad with punches word play was fire some metaphors I was digging too loser had a fire verse but it was a bit too beatable and lacked a bit of bit and complexity fv

Simply put, I think both have wording issues that need to be shapened up. It allows for a more clearer read that way. Both were reaching in areas, but one was reaching a little more, imo. Leaning towards the one that got the higher quality hits in, over-all. Fairs in fellas. Good luck to both !