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Originally Posted by MadVerbs
The candle's lit as she sits in ah dim light
the voice of her own thought, mixed w hers sins might.
All noise in her home's stopped n her kid's at ah friends night
can only hear chimes outside, hit when the wind strikes.
She's losing grip on what's been right
choosing hits of ah thin line, doing shit that'll end life.
The high's like thick knifes through her wind pipe.
Does this feel played, like done too many times topic wise? Or are y'all feeling it..
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TBH honest most tpoicals are played but then it all depends on what sort of stroy you sayins and what twists and turns it take the set ups tho almost always kinda similar as with battle bars too more like you couldn't do this if you were (comparions with wordplay or metaphor or both)
With that said and done the piece does seem legitimately crisp and neat as is always the case with you.
I was writing a topical myself a few days again the topic was - if god was a hood nigga - yeah well lol. After talking to caked out tho i came to know that there is some sitcom known as Black Jesus or something which already runs on the same concept so now I'm like should i go ahead with it or scrap it .
What I'm trying to say try challenging yourself with the topics of a different genre itself if you wanna write something real fresh. And kiwi is planining to introduce a monthly topical tourney too so thats there too.