Round 1: erupt- Vs LOQuence Triss (erupt- Wins Via 3-0 KO)

erupt- Vs LOQuence Triss
Letsbeef Topical Tournament 2011 Round 1

House Rules Apply. Any questions, contact me.

CHECK INS ARE DUE FRIDAY (09-16-11) AT 11:59PM PST. VERSES ARE DUE WEDNESDAY (09-21-11) AT 11:59PM. NO EXCEPTIONS.
(Note: Deadlines are 1 week due to Sandman's tournament round. Other rounds will be shorter)

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Voting Rubix
Rhyming Scheme/Flow
Vocabulary
Topic/Meaning
Storytelling/Progression
Emotion
Imagery
Poetic Techniques
Ending

GOOD LUCK

erupt- Vs LOQuence Triss
Letsbeef Topical Tournament 2011 Round 1

House Rules Apply. Any questions, contact me.

CHECK INS ARE DUE FRIDAY (09-16-11) AT 11:59PM PST. VERSES ARE DUE WEDNESDAY (09-21-11) AT 11:59PM. NO EXCEPTIONS.
(Note: Deadlines are 1 week due to Sandman's tournament round. Other rounds will be shorter)

Line Length: 20-40 lines.



Voting Rubix
Rhyming Scheme/Flow
Vocabulary
Topic/Meaning
Storytelling/Progression
Emotion
Imagery
Poetic Techniques
Ending

GOOD LUCK

[LOQ]

Check..................

[LOQ]

Check..................

[Erupt da Monsta]

check. just saw this was up

[Erupt da Monsta]

check. just saw this was up

[MAN DOWN]

Worn Out But Still Walking*
Inspired By True People

Chapter 1: The cause of many chills-sent-through-his-bones looking back on those ridiculous-clones living-a-lie he feels-isn't-right like these
promiscuous-hoes not thinking bout problems a pregnancy-could-hold..attached to the spec in her stomach guess quick what fucking decision-she-chose.. nine months times up doctors gotta make an incision-below the moment of happiness is gone in an instant-you-know! Cuz now the daddy of this bastard bitch-dips-to-go with everybody feeling like there living-alone/
Chapter 2:
Don't think the grass is greener on the other side muthafuckas die no matter if you're a kid-or-you-grown cuz lunatics just do the killings-to-boast now the family of lil sean finds out he actually wasn't the victim of gripping-the-chrome so lets see what happens when news reporters follow-the-mom to the possible-spot her children-knew-home/... Stress in her mind she's ready to lie like leave F.B.I.. he's innocent-no, they reply when your sons sentenced-you'll-know.. but it's without visiting-so he's entitled to one call and it counts even if you'ont pick-up-the-phone and don't forget the press silently saying give me an interview-hoe! On tv she's defending-her-own flesh and blood like he did it cuz it's what the hood "fit-ins"-promote/
Final Chapter:
From being afraid to sleep where it's only safe to keep the door to ya living-rooms-closed to having a broken family cuz you couldn't resist in stripping-ya-clothes it's only more than normal for an
individual-to-cope and search for something just to give them a little-of-hope while*scientists digging-up-skulls tryna get under ya skin-to-the-bones by means of disproving-those*unclear distanced-figures that represents-and-pictures-that-most religions-are-different-But-close up the righteous-meaning of needing in a higher-being is persistent-in-them-fasho/*

[MAN DOWN]

Worn Out But Still Walking*
Inspired By True People

Chapter 1: The cause of many chills-sent-through-his-bones looking back on those ridiculous-clones living-a-lie he feels-isn't-right like these
promiscuous-hoes not thinking bout problems a pregnancy-could-hold..attached to the spec in her stomach guess quick what fucking decision-she-chose.. nine months times up doctors gotta make an incision-below the moment of happiness is gone in an instant-you-know! Cuz now the daddy of this bastard bitch-dips-to-go with everybody feeling like there living-alone/
Chapter 2:
Don't think the grass is greener on the other side muthafuckas die no matter if you're a kid-or-you-grown cuz lunatics just do the killings-to-boast now the family of lil sean finds out he actually wasn't the victim of gripping-the-chrome so lets see what happens when news reporters follow-the-mom to the possible-spot her children-knew-home/... Stress in her mind she's ready to lie like leave F.B.I.. he's innocent-no, they reply when your sons sentenced-you'll-know.. but it's without visiting-so he's entitled to one call and it counts even if you'ont pick-up-the-phone and don't forget the press silently saying give me an interview-hoe! On tv she's defending-her-own flesh and blood like he did it cuz it's what the hood "fit-ins"-promote/
Final Chapter:
From being afraid to sleep where it's only safe to keep the door to ya living-rooms-closed to having a broken family cuz you couldn't resist in stripping-ya-clothes it's only more than normal for an
individual-to-cope and search for something just to give them a little-of-hope while*scientists digging-up-skulls tryna get under ya skin-to-the-bones by means of disproving-those*unclear distanced-figures that represents-and-pictures-that-most religions-are-different-But-close up the righteous-meaning of needing in a higher-being is persistent-in-them-fasho/*

[MAN DOWN]

Can someone still tell me how I did? Even tho I get an auto dq win...

[MAN DOWN]

Can someone still tell me how I did? Even tho I get an auto dq win...

[IAmFlow]

He still has until tonight to post and if its a noshow put it in the writers block.

[IAmFlow]

He still has until tonight to post and if its a noshow put it in the writers block.

[MAN DOWN]

Oops my bad...lol I just read the top

[MAN DOWN]

Oops my bad...lol I just read the top

[Dono]

Originally Posted by -Mr SPLAT-

Can someone still tell me how I did? Even tho I get an auto dq win...

If he doesn't drop after it closes send me a pm and I'll critique it for you.

Otherwise I'll probably be dropping a vote.

[Dono]

Originally Posted by -Mr SPLAT-

Can someone still tell me how I did? Even tho I get an auto dq win...

If he doesn't drop after it closes send me a pm and I'll critique it for you.

Otherwise I'll probably be dropping a vote.

[Erupt da Monsta]

im writin now

[Erupt da Monsta]

im writin now

[Erupt da Monsta]

wait i thought i was battlin loq?

[Erupt da Monsta]

wait i thought i was battlin loq?