LB Winter Olympics - Master-Mind vs DonoTheGod

[Dono]

I stand still, overlooking my broken playground
As I watch the last of the weak, fall, choke and stay down
Time's like now I can't stay proud though they start to pray loud
Their own foolishness and weakness brought this day 'round
I watched from afar at the inception of small spars
Saw humans evolve and the invention of all cars
They kept learning, sent an extension out to mars
And considered different dimensions in the stars
I watched it all, as the entire race grew and they flourished
But a piece was missing, something truly malnourished
They built up giant cities founded on concrete and steel
And trusted the material world as completely real
There was too much conflict hardwired into their nature
I should have seen it coming since I was their maker
I vowed only to watch events, never interfere
And I cringed as I saw things turn forever so severe
Those giant nations of men, couldn't keep relations with them
They turned on each other, their aspirations had bent
Used technology for weapons of mass destruction
I created a world for them but they quickly trashed the function
Bombs dropped, boom! moms lost, tombs! the hard core had gone soft too
Not a single person was spared as the onslaught grew
The initial contact annihilated and crippled billions
Radioactive debris covered even the little children
Most dropped to their knees, asking me stop it all please
When they make messes like this I hate mopping up these
I'm the background, I merely create the machinery
Then let the course run, I don't debate what they mean to me
I have no compassion while their teeth are slowly gnashing
Brought on themselves, behaving in a lowly fashion
Humans are prone to violence, aftermath known as silence
But it's beyond my role to be the one to show them guidance
See I'm not the only god, merely one of many
The father of all you know but not the son of any
My only goal is to keep creating planets for humans
Until together they can all stand up in unions
Forever I've known my place in the universe
Had to accept it, no way to trace this unruly curse
So as lost as you might feel buried in the vast space
I'm not further ahead than you, we're all in last place
I also cower and pray to a higher power,
Do as I'm told to avoid making my sire sour
He may be another watchmaker just like me
But I cling to hope that scenario is unlikely
I control your fate and tend to all your business
But learning my own meaning fills my entire wish list

[Dono]

I stand still, overlooking my broken playground
As I watch the last of the weak, fall, choke and stay down
Time's like now I can't stay proud though they start to pray loud
Their own foolishness and weakness brought this day 'round
I watched from afar at the inception of small spars
Saw humans evolve and the invention of all cars
They kept learning, sent an extension out to mars
And considered different dimensions in the stars
I watched it all, as the entire race grew and they flourished
But a piece was missing, something truly malnourished
They built up giant cities founded on concrete and steel
And trusted the material world as completely real
There was too much conflict hardwired into their nature
I should have seen it coming since I was their maker
I vowed only to watch events, never interfere
And I cringed as I saw things turn forever so severe
Those giant nations of men, couldn't keep relations with them
They turned on each other, their aspirations had bent
Used technology for weapons of mass destruction
I created a world for them but they quickly trashed the function
Bombs dropped, boom! moms lost, tombs! the hard core had gone soft too
Not a single person was spared as the onslaught grew
The initial contact annihilated and crippled billions
Radioactive debris covered even the little children
Most dropped to their knees, asking me stop it all please
When they make messes like this I hate mopping up these
I'm the background, I merely create the machinery
Then let the course run, I don't debate what they mean to me
I have no compassion while their teeth are slowly gnashing
Brought on themselves, behaving in a lowly fashion
Humans are prone to violence, aftermath known as silence
But it's beyond my role to be the one to show them guidance
See I'm not the only god, merely one of many
The father of all you know but not the son of any
My only goal is to keep creating planets for humans
Until together they can all stand up in unions
Forever I've known my place in the universe
Had to accept it, no way to trace this unruly curse
So as lost as you might feel buried in the vast space
I'm not further ahead than you, we're all in last place
I also cower and pray to a higher power,
Do as I'm told to avoid making my sire sour
He may be another watchmaker just like me
But I cling to hope that scenario is unlikely
I control your fate and tend to all your business
But learning my own meaning fills my entire wish list

[ozark]

Rhyme scheme/flow- although Master mind didn't lack, and had some witty rhyme points, I feel Dono's rhymed and flowed better-

Vocabulary- easy one here, master mind takes vocab hands down.

Topic meaning- TIE, both had roughly the same idea here, so it's a tie.

Storytelling- another easy cata, master mind wrote a small story.

Emotion- both were pretty good- imma say tie.

Poetic technique- I have to go with Dono here, his was more poetic while M-M was more story

Ending- tie here, I felt both had a good ending-

Master mind GMV- she won more catas, I feel Dono rushed his due to lack of knowledge of the replacement- but was still a good read- GL to the winner

[ozark]

Rhyme scheme/flow- although Master mind didn't lack, and had some witty rhyme points, I feel Dono's rhymed and flowed better-

Vocabulary- easy one here, master mind takes vocab hands down.

Topic meaning- TIE, both had roughly the same idea here, so it's a tie.

Storytelling- another easy cata, master mind wrote a small story.

Emotion- both were pretty good- imma say tie.

Poetic technique- I have to go with Dono here, his was more poetic while M-M was more story

Ending- tie here, I felt both had a good ending-

Master mind GMV- she won more catas, I feel Dono rushed his due to lack of knowledge of the replacement- but was still a good read- GL to the winner

[IV]

I just wrote out a really cunting fucking long expo for each category and my internet browser decided to go back a page randomly, so i'm afraid i'll have to be brief.


Rhyme scheme/flow- Dono - Both very different, Dono's simply flowed well and went really well with his topic path, simple yet effective at first read, but more complex if you really analyse.

Vocabulary- Tie - Master used longer words so at first look the W would go to her, but Dono had a very vast range of vocab. Won't call it.

Topic meaning- Tie - Both went down the same route.

Storytelling- Dono - Both progressed well and painted a picture, but Dono made it easier to empathise with his story, therefore I felt his story. It's almost as is master was telling the story from her point of view, that Dono was creating within his piece.

Emotion- Tie - Emotional in different ways, master really forced her emotion upon us, whilst Dono was more subtle. Both emotional, well done.

Poetic technique- Dono - Really really nice poetic technique used, simple to follow and structured very nicely.

Ending- Dono - Really summed it up well, nice twist that he was the God causing the destruction, not predictable at all and really climaxed the captivation in a positive way.

MVGT- DonoTheGod - No hate Master, it was an exceptional drop for your first topical battle, but Dono was on another level here. Whole piece was so thought out, but was portrayed in a way that was simple to follow and easy to feel the emotion, when reading the verse I actually felt like I was looking down and watching the end of the world, and imagery is an exetremly difficult thing to create when you've already got the topic picture in your head, really brought it to life and animated it. Well done this was very, very good.

[IV]

I just wrote out a really cunting fucking long expo for each category and my internet browser decided to go back a page randomly, so i'm afraid i'll have to be brief.


Rhyme scheme/flow- Dono - Both very different, Dono's simply flowed well and went really well with his topic path, simple yet effective at first read, but more complex if you really analyse.

Vocabulary- Tie - Master used longer words so at first look the W would go to her, but Dono had a very vast range of vocab. Won't call it.

Topic meaning- Tie - Both went down the same route.

Storytelling- Dono - Both progressed well and painted a picture, but Dono made it easier to empathise with his story, therefore I felt his story. It's almost as is master was telling the story from her point of view, that Dono was creating within his piece.

Emotion- Tie - Emotional in different ways, master really forced her emotion upon us, whilst Dono was more subtle. Both emotional, well done.

Poetic technique- Dono - Really really nice poetic technique used, simple to follow and structured very nicely.

Ending- Dono - Really summed it up well, nice twist that he was the God causing the destruction, not predictable at all and really climaxed the captivation in a positive way.

MVGT- DonoTheGod - No hate Master, it was an exceptional drop for your first topical battle, but Dono was on another level here. Whole piece was so thought out, but was portrayed in a way that was simple to follow and easy to feel the emotion, when reading the verse I actually felt like I was looking down and watching the end of the world, and imagery is an exetremly difficult thing to create when you've already got the topic picture in your head, really brought it to life and animated it. Well done this was very, very good.

[NelSyn]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow - Dono - Both were clever & were strong w/ their flow. It was close, but Dono had a smoother read w/ a more complex rhyme scheme..

Vocabulary - Master-Mind - She excelled in this, she added complexity to her verse w/ her extremely vivid vocab. Dono didn't lack though.

Topic/Meaning - Tie - Both basically went the same direction

Storytelling/Progression - Master-Mind - She was more consistent, I felt as if Dono fell off a bit, but then got better, the progression was nice, but boring at some stages.

Emotion - Dono - This was close, Master-Mind had to force it alot though. (EDIT: IMO, in a different way then Verity described it, maybe the same, but I wasn't as much of a fan.) xD

Poetic Techniques - Tie - Both used a strong form of Metaphors, similes, etc. too close to decide.

Ending - Master-Mind - Dono didn't lack in the slightest, both were sick as fuck, but I think Master's ending was more witty and nicely played.


MVGT - Master-Mind
This battle fucking surprised me, both went in & both were dope as hell. It was close as hell. Master-Mind had a lot of clever moments mixed in w/ decent flow, but really good storytelling skills. Some point's of Dono's verse were lackluster, he excelled in his rhyme schemes & portrayed the emotion really well; but not enough to win.

[NelSyn]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow - Dono - Both were clever & were strong w/ their flow. It was close, but Dono had a smoother read w/ a more complex rhyme scheme..

Vocabulary - Master-Mind - She excelled in this, she added complexity to her verse w/ her extremely vivid vocab. Dono didn't lack though.

Topic/Meaning - Tie - Both basically went the same direction

Storytelling/Progression - Master-Mind - She was more consistent, I felt as if Dono fell off a bit, but then got better, the progression was nice, but boring at some stages.

Emotion - Dono - This was close, Master-Mind had to force it alot though. (EDIT: IMO, in a different way then Verity described it, maybe the same, but I wasn't as much of a fan.) xD

Poetic Techniques - Tie - Both used a strong form of Metaphors, similes, etc. too close to decide.

Ending - Master-Mind - Dono didn't lack in the slightest, both were sick as fuck, but I think Master's ending was more witty and nicely played.


MVGT - Master-Mind
This battle fucking surprised me, both went in & both were dope as hell. It was close as hell. Master-Mind had a lot of clever moments mixed in w/ decent flow, but really good storytelling skills. Some point's of Dono's verse were lackluster, he excelled in his rhyme schemes & portrayed the emotion really well; but not enough to win.

[Lizman]

Pew, Pew, Pew [This The Sound Of Futuristic Laser Guns]
Is This Why You Call Yourself Dono Now Instead Of Dono The God?
Because God Has Died And Humans Have Outgrown You?

Started Off Well, Pretty Well Actually... Liked The Part About Invention Of All Cars That Was Coolio... In The Middle I Kinda Thought... This Is Getting Boring And Predictable... And In The End I Was Disappointed Because You Started Degrading The Readers With The Fact That You Are God (Wow What A Revelation)...And Then You Made It Sound Like You Were Not God... Just Gay... The Ending That Is... Started Off Really Good... Got Soso In The Middle And Ended... ... ...
Anywho,
Rhyming Scheme/Flow 7
Vocabulary 6
Topic/Meaning 7
Storytelling/Progression 8
Emotion 4
Poetic Techniques 6
Ending 3

That Makes It.. Uh... One Second... 41... I Think



Subliminal123... Yay... Still Dont Know Your Sex... Anywho...
This Is All Very Iam Legend Ish... Not Necessarily Saying Its A Bad Thing... Hmmm
You Went Well With The Emotion And Storytelling; Sadly Your Overall Presentation Was Lackluster; Does Vocabulary Include Correct Grammar? Because If It Does... ... Anywho
Lets Get Straight To The Votes... Before That Uh Vivid Stuff I Guess

Rhyming Scheme/Flow 6
Vocabulary 5
Topic/Meaning 6
Storytelling/Progression 7
Emotion 7
Poetic Techniques 6
Ending 4

Why Is There No Voting For Overall Presentation? Ugh... 41...



Same Score
However, I Liked Donos Overall Presentation More So DONO WINS In My Eyes

[Lizman]

Pew, Pew, Pew [This The Sound Of Futuristic Laser Guns]
Is This Why You Call Yourself Dono Now Instead Of Dono The God?
Because God Has Died And Humans Have Outgrown You?

Started Off Well, Pretty Well Actually... Liked The Part About Invention Of All Cars That Was Coolio... In The Middle I Kinda Thought... This Is Getting Boring And Predictable... And In The End I Was Disappointed Because You Started Degrading The Readers With The Fact That You Are God (Wow What A Revelation)...And Then You Made It Sound Like You Were Not God... Just Gay... The Ending That Is... Started Off Really Good... Got Soso In The Middle And Ended... ... ...
Anywho,
Rhyming Scheme/Flow 7
Vocabulary 6
Topic/Meaning 7
Storytelling/Progression 8
Emotion 4
Poetic Techniques 6
Ending 3

That Makes It.. Uh... One Second... 41... I Think



Subliminal123... Yay... Still Dont Know Your Sex... Anywho...
This Is All Very Iam Legend Ish... Not Necessarily Saying Its A Bad Thing... Hmmm
You Went Well With The Emotion And Storytelling; Sadly Your Overall Presentation Was Lackluster; Does Vocabulary Include Correct Grammar? Because If It Does... ... Anywho
Lets Get Straight To The Votes... Before That Uh Vivid Stuff I Guess

Rhyming Scheme/Flow 6
Vocabulary 5
Topic/Meaning 6
Storytelling/Progression 7
Emotion 7
Poetic Techniques 6
Ending 4

Why Is There No Voting For Overall Presentation? Ugh... 41...



Same Score
However, I Liked Donos Overall Presentation More So DONO WINS In My Eyes

[Phroxen]

If it wasn't 3:30 AM, I'd take the time to read and vote. Ugh. I hope whoever votes knows what they're doing since it's first to 3. If this isn't closed by mid day tomorrow, I'll drop a vote.

From what I skimmed, both were starting very solid.. good luck to you both.

[Phroxen]

If it wasn't 3:30 AM, I'd take the time to read and vote. Ugh. I hope whoever votes knows what they're doing since it's first to 3. If this isn't closed by mid day tomorrow, I'll drop a vote.

From what I skimmed, both were starting very solid.. good luck to you both.

[NelSyn]

2-2 .. next vote finally wins....smh.

[NelSyn]

2-2 .. next vote finally wins....smh.

[Dono]

It's supposed to be first to five.

It's only supposed to be 3 if it's 3-0.

You're the host though.

Your rules.

[Dono]

It's supposed to be first to five.

It's only supposed to be 3 if it's 3-0.

You're the host though.

Your rules.

[NelSyn]

I changed it because if we're gonna get through this tournament, we gotta cut it a bit..

[NelSyn]

I changed it because if we're gonna get through this tournament, we gotta cut it a bit..

[NelSyn]

One more to close - still.

[NelSyn]

One more to close - still.