I just realised I forgot to give any actual feedback on the verse itself lol. EtH has a point about how it’s a wall-of-text, but nonetheless it was a really enjoyable read that left me very curious to see where it’s going next. It feels like a TV episode how it finished just as your curiosity and investment in what happened next reached its peak lmao. Nice rhyming, interesting story, obviously since it hasn’t reached its conclusion the twists and turns and meta stuff hasn’t happened yet but thus far it’s definitely dope, please finish it and don’t leave us hanging