::..Rupt Rates You..::

[Erupt da Monsta]

RUPT RATES YOU

Post your best verse.... One verse per person.. Make it your best.. I'll break it down, and let you know what I think you should work on. I will also rate you from 1-10 and after a certain amount of people have submitted I will then rate the top 10 active textcees that posted in this thread.. Any amount of people can post a verse... Then 10 will be placed in order as top 10 active.

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Post your verses.

[Erupt da Monsta]

RUPT RATES YOU

Post your best verse.... One verse per person.. Make it your best.. I'll break it down, and let you know what I think you should work on. I will also rate you from 1-10 and after a certain amount of people have submitted I will then rate the top 10 active textcees that posted in this thread.. Any amount of people can post a verse... Then 10 will be placed in order as top 10 active.

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Post your verses.

[smiG]

Whats in it for me¿

---------- Post added at 12:39 AM ---------- Previous post was at 12:28 AM ----------

Haha no but for real @Erupt, can I redeem my rupt-vote-n-rate redeem coupon by havin' you drop a fair for me... no hate & im loser if ya think so, plz thx... then rate would be boo

---------- Post added at 12:42 AM ---------- Previous post was at 12:39 AM ----------

http://www.letsbeef.com/battle_detai...n=tb&id=482285


then sign me up too plz

[smiG]

Whats in it for me¿

---------- Post added at 12:39 AM ---------- Previous post was at 12:28 AM ----------

Haha no but for real @Erupt, can I redeem my rupt-vote-n-rate redeem coupon by havin' you drop a fair for me... no hate & im loser if ya think so, plz thx... then rate would be boo

---------- Post added at 12:42 AM ---------- Previous post was at 12:39 AM ----------

http://www.letsbeef.com/battle_detai...n=tb&id=482285


then sign me up too plz

His Illmania battle? They’ll EASILY KILL EM cause “you couldn’t profit from recording this fuck” reLEASING AND FILMING someone SLEEPING WITH HILTON! Being picked for audio was like aCHIEVING FULFILMENT and I wish I could say this EMCEE WAS AN ILL PICK; for ACs the “test” wasn't “multiple choice” but Blnk's NEED TO BE FILLED IN! ACs? He couldn’t see the “bigger picture” with a smartphone SCREEN THAT HE’S TILTING; he’d “branch out” but “leaves shrived up” like a TREE THAT IS WILTING! Your stay here is temporary, just LEASING THE BUILDING so for “Home Improvement”; we’ll “cut him” to “save face” like HE WAS OUR WILSON! After this, you beLEIVING YOU’RE STILL SICK? Nah if he’s SEEN ON SOME “KING” SHIT; Ima turn LA Police and straight BEAT THE CIVILLIAN! This faker pretends he’s got GREEN IN THE MILLIONS or EVEN A BILLION but if you see “Bleu with the cheddar” it’s EATING SOME STILTON! Sure he’s battled for years and thinks WE ARE HIS CHILDREN but you couldn’t be a “pioneer by trade” swapping BEADS WITH THE PILGRIMS! Bitches? If the “pussy is smooth” he reCEIVED A BRAZILLIAN so if this dudes in the "SHEETS” WITH A MILF IT’S chilling with his moms with a NEEDLE AND QUILTIN’!


*Scheme battle Vs Bleu
**Bleu was picked for audio last minute after BLNK left ACs.

His Illmania battle? They’ll EASILY KILL EM cause “you couldn’t profit from recording this fuck” reLEASING AND FILMING someone SLEEPING WITH HILTON! Being picked for audio was like aCHIEVING FULFILMENT and I wish I could say this EMCEE WAS AN ILL PICK; for ACs the “test” wasn't “multiple choice” but Blnk's NEED TO BE FILLED IN! ACs? He couldn’t see the “bigger picture” with a smartphone SCREEN THAT HE’S TILTING; he’d “branch out” but “leaves shrived up” like a TREE THAT IS WILTING! Your stay here is temporary, just LEASING THE BUILDING so for “Home Improvement”; we’ll “cut him” to “save face” like HE WAS OUR WILSON! After this, you beLEIVING YOU’RE STILL SICK? Nah if he’s SEEN ON SOME “KING” SHIT; Ima turn LA Police and straight BEAT THE CIVILLIAN! This faker pretends he’s got GREEN IN THE MILLIONS or EVEN A BILLION but if you see “Bleu with the cheddar” it’s EATING SOME STILTON! Sure he’s battled for years and thinks WE ARE HIS CHILDREN but you couldn’t be a “pioneer by trade” swapping BEADS WITH THE PILGRIMS! Bitches? If the “pussy is smooth” he reCEIVED A BRAZILLIAN so if this dudes in the "SHEETS” WITH A MILF IT’S chilling with his moms with a NEEDLE AND QUILTIN’!


*Scheme battle Vs Bleu
**Bleu was picked for audio last minute after BLNK left ACs.

[Shodan]

“stocks will be crashing” when i BLAST A GAUGE or EMPTY MAGS! sorry to “burst ur bubble” but your JABS’LL FAIL to SET ME BACK & i wouldn’t “buy in to those, homes” w/ FANNIE MAE & FREDDIE MAC! "it's not me, it's you" livin IN HIS MOMMA'S BASEMENT, i wanted to face a “monster” but i GET THIS FRAUD IN PLACEMENT? you’ll need a “hero to save you now” but my LYRICS AREN’T CONTAINING shit that’s CHRISTIAN ROCK RELATED like a SKILLET COMPILATION!!/bred knows ill win, first we TEXT, THEN I’LL BEAT YOUR VERSES & for my NEXT WIN? DEFEAT A MURDA; you wont “go in, to defy or place” less you STEPPED IN A HEATED FURNACE n i aint seen “o bomb a squad” unLESS ITS THE SECRET SERVICE or the PRESIDENT’S TEAM OF SERVANTS!! (the fireplace, Obama squad.) if you wrote lines alone? you couldnt even TRY TO TOP MINE, i mean we know acs helps to WRITE YA BARS, GUY, but they just “assist your suicide” - hence a “CRYSIS HOTLINE!” you’re a rap machine? “Obey, you’re human!” but tryna BEAT GOD IN A CONTEST? since you can “cause no harm” you better run to “save your life” no THREE LAWS OF ROBOTICS!!!/i mean, he thinks he’s ACTUALLY KILLING ME? i’ll make ya “head spin,” hope someone HAPPENS TO INTERVENE if you "draw to put dots in I?" ur like ANIME IN DEFEAT cause weapons? we might see “bey’ blade, tops!” like JAPANESE FIGURINES!

Versus Obey in the most recent GC.

[Shodan]

“stocks will be crashing” when i BLAST A GAUGE or EMPTY MAGS! sorry to “burst ur bubble” but your JABS’LL FAIL to SET ME BACK & i wouldn’t “buy in to those, homes” w/ FANNIE MAE & FREDDIE MAC! "it's not me, it's you" livin IN HIS MOMMA'S BASEMENT, i wanted to face a “monster” but i GET THIS FRAUD IN PLACEMENT? you’ll need a “hero to save you now” but my LYRICS AREN’T CONTAINING shit that’s CHRISTIAN ROCK RELATED like a SKILLET COMPILATION!!/bred knows ill win, first we TEXT, THEN I’LL BEAT YOUR VERSES & for my NEXT WIN? DEFEAT A MURDA; you wont “go in, to defy or place” less you STEPPED IN A HEATED FURNACE n i aint seen “o bomb a squad” unLESS ITS THE SECRET SERVICE or the PRESIDENT’S TEAM OF SERVANTS!! (the fireplace, Obama squad.) if you wrote lines alone? you couldnt even TRY TO TOP MINE, i mean we know acs helps to WRITE YA BARS, GUY, but they just “assist your suicide” - hence a “CRYSIS HOTLINE!” you’re a rap machine? “Obey, you’re human!” but tryna BEAT GOD IN A CONTEST? since you can “cause no harm” you better run to “save your life” no THREE LAWS OF ROBOTICS!!!/i mean, he thinks he’s ACTUALLY KILLING ME? i’ll make ya “head spin,” hope someone HAPPENS TO INTERVENE if you "draw to put dots in I?" ur like ANIME IN DEFEAT cause weapons? we might see “bey’ blade, tops!” like JAPANESE FIGURINES!

Versus Obey in the most recent GC.

Bulls vs Legion has gone 'Nuclear', two MAD FACTION'S ON DECK WHO'S RUNNIN' THE GAME, Manny left the bulls for LoD in Illy 4 and that 'MANHATTAN PROJECT' BLEW UP IN THEIR FACE! The debate was can aC'S HANG WITH THE BUSINESS and BEAT BANKS AND HIS MINIONS? They 'looked hot but faded as we closed in' like 'HEAT WAVES' IN THE DISTANCE! Manny and I never battled so we're MAKING A BET, WHO'S THE WORST? I could 'freestyle' and 'take it off the top' w/o FACING 'EXECUTIONERS' or 'SHAVING HIS HEAD THROUGH THE PERM! He believe's he's a 'SAINT' N SAYS HIS BOOTH'S A 'CHURCH' so if he 'spits with a devil inside him'? It's not that 'SATAN'S' BLED INTO HIS WORK but GAVE QUICK 'HEAD' TO 'LUCIFER'! So LoD's BANGIN TECHS TO SHOOT THE BULLS? Nah they GANGSTA'S SET TO DO A 'ROLE' so when they 'act hard' they'd only 'STAGE' A DEATH AND FUNERAL! You talk bout' 'girls in gats' in songs like you'd BUST A HEATER TO IT but it sounds like LUSTFUL 'TEENS WITH TUNES', THAT threaten "In My World: I'd tell you one time".....queue the 'JUSTIN BIEBER' MUSIC! You aren't a Man, you're a chick I wish WE'D 'BOMB' HER WORLD HARDER! So to be 'Heroes, She must be destroyed in battle' no RESPONSE FROM 'PEARL HARBOR'!(So to be Hiroshima's, be destroyed in battle)

J/K definitely going with this one. Hope I don't mess you up again

Bulls vs Legion has gone 'Nuclear', two MAD FACTION'S ON DECK WHO'S RUNNIN' THE GAME, Manny left the bulls for LoD in Illy 4 and that 'MANHATTAN PROJECT' BLEW UP IN THEIR FACE! The debate was can aC'S HANG WITH THE BUSINESS and BEAT BANKS AND HIS MINIONS? They 'looked hot but faded as we closed in' like 'HEAT WAVES' IN THE DISTANCE! Manny and I never battled so we're MAKING A BET, WHO'S THE WORST? I could 'freestyle' and 'take it off the top' w/o FACING 'EXECUTIONERS' or 'SHAVING HIS HEAD THROUGH THE PERM! He believe's he's a 'SAINT' N SAYS HIS BOOTH'S A 'CHURCH' so if he 'spits with a devil inside him'? It's not that 'SATAN'S' BLED INTO HIS WORK but GAVE QUICK 'HEAD' TO 'LUCIFER'! So LoD's BANGIN TECHS TO SHOOT THE BULLS? Nah they GANGSTA'S SET TO DO A 'ROLE' so when they 'act hard' they'd only 'STAGE' A DEATH AND FUNERAL! You talk bout' 'girls in gats' in songs like you'd BUST A HEATER TO IT but it sounds like LUSTFUL 'TEENS WITH TUNES', THAT threaten "In My World: I'd tell you one time".....queue the 'JUSTIN BIEBER' MUSIC! You aren't a Man, you're a chick I wish WE'D 'BOMB' HER WORLD HARDER! So to be 'Heroes, She must be destroyed in battle' no RESPONSE FROM 'PEARL HARBOR'!(So to be Hiroshima's, be destroyed in battle)

J/K definitely going with this one. Hope I don't mess you up again

[Obey]

Idk if this is my best, but one of my favorites.

I’ll have ‘Kid’s Face on the front-cover again’ if you FEEL TRAGIC AND RUN IN just ‘To exit over the eyes’ when I EXAMINE THIS NOTHING.. KILL, STAB’EM FOR BLUFFING & ‘Show My Street-Side Again’ like the re-release of ‘’ILLMATIC PRODUCTIONS!’’ (2 X it over the eyes) You’re ‘Finally taking it all in’ that you’re BARS’RE SLOPPY N’ WEAK.. All ‘Exhausted from wasting ya breath’ like this CAR HAS GOTTEN’ TA E so how’re you a ‘Hint of Fresh air here’ when you’re just a ‘’CARBON’’ COPY OF ME?! Having followers? I’m GLAD I MADE IT TO PAVE WAYS, yet you’re ‘Pulling down the look’ of CAPTIVATING THE GAME’S FAITH to be ACTIVE, WAITING AND SLAY GREATS..but ‘Ya Test of Time doesn’t make sense’ when you’re always ‘’GRAVITATING TO SAVE FACE!’’ (Think about it..) That Illmania tag-tourney, ‘You weren’t hand-to-hand’ w/ OWNING YA NOTES, them ‘Poor Punches in ya elevation’ ironically ‘’LOWERED MY HOPES’’..knowing you’re ‘Involved w/ the Big show’ you should’ve ‘’went OVER THE ROPES’’.. Listened to ‘’HOVA & ROSE’’! ‘Everything you represent’s backwards’ yet you’re MAKING THE THREATS, it’s ‘No double sided mirror’ but you’ve been ‘’FAKING AFFECTS’’ of ya past of ‘’TRAITING YA SET’’ So it’s ‘Not thoughts of a flipped-flag’ when I say your ‘’mental-STATE’S IN DISTRESS!’’ ACs..

Vs. Enfinite .. a battle that got HEAVILY slept on.

[Obey]

Idk if this is my best, but one of my favorites.

I’ll have ‘Kid’s Face on the front-cover again’ if you FEEL TRAGIC AND RUN IN just ‘To exit over the eyes’ when I EXAMINE THIS NOTHING.. KILL, STAB’EM FOR BLUFFING & ‘Show My Street-Side Again’ like the re-release of ‘’ILLMATIC PRODUCTIONS!’’ (2 X it over the eyes) You’re ‘Finally taking it all in’ that you’re BARS’RE SLOPPY N’ WEAK.. All ‘Exhausted from wasting ya breath’ like this CAR HAS GOTTEN’ TA E so how’re you a ‘Hint of Fresh air here’ when you’re just a ‘’CARBON’’ COPY OF ME?! Having followers? I’m GLAD I MADE IT TO PAVE WAYS, yet you’re ‘Pulling down the look’ of CAPTIVATING THE GAME’S FAITH to be ACTIVE, WAITING AND SLAY GREATS..but ‘Ya Test of Time doesn’t make sense’ when you’re always ‘’GRAVITATING TO SAVE FACE!’’ (Think about it..) That Illmania tag-tourney, ‘You weren’t hand-to-hand’ w/ OWNING YA NOTES, them ‘Poor Punches in ya elevation’ ironically ‘’LOWERED MY HOPES’’..knowing you’re ‘Involved w/ the Big show’ you should’ve ‘’went OVER THE ROPES’’.. Listened to ‘’HOVA & ROSE’’! ‘Everything you represent’s backwards’ yet you’re MAKING THE THREATS, it’s ‘No double sided mirror’ but you’ve been ‘’FAKING AFFECTS’’ of ya past of ‘’TRAITING YA SET’’ So it’s ‘Not thoughts of a flipped-flag’ when I say your ‘’mental-STATE’S IN DISTRESS!’’ ACs..

Vs. Enfinite .. a battle that got HEAVILY slept on.

[Erupt da Monsta]

@smiG

'Gores ass is bleedin,that we ALREADY SEE IN THIS ONE, cuz like "gay jokes bout Gardening in Eden" there will "ALWAYS BE A STEVE IN EM!/ (Wasn't really feeling this as an opener.. wasn't that creative imo, you needed another multi set to make it hit harder but even then the concept itself was pretty weak bro, the multi set was also a little off .. unless you have an accent IN THIS ONE and STEVE IN EM doesnt work because steve doesn't rhyme with in.. you can have multis that don't rhyme when they are little words like I, it, n, etc, but when you have words like STEVE, it almost always has to have a rhyming multi)....: how i creep when DARKENED ITS FITTING..how ya get "left wit no drive & torn aPART WHEN SMIG SPITTING...Like "cars that wont start after PARKIN IN BIG CITIES!/ (i like the inner multis here, the cars wont start set, the concept itself is played, no drive ... cars... could have been flipped better.. also bro I've read a few of your battles, and you seem to have too many syllables in your multis.. aPART WHEN SMIG SPITTING.. 5 syllables.. PARKIN IN BIG CITIES.. 6 syllables.. the syllables have to match for max punch impact and readability, also the concept was really simple here)...: Theres no ARGUIN WITH ME. Ne bitch be as HARD AS THIS SISSY..who "puff up they chest to spiral downward"..like "demi moore LARGENING TITTIES & STAR'n IN STRIPTEASE!"/ (i think the "..." is overused and takes away from the flow n readability of ya verse, could be smoother without them, the concept was actually nice i liked this punch here, im not going to nitpick on wording because i understand not using the word "like" is something that comes later on, good punch tho.. the double multi set was good as well here) i SPAR n WIN VICTORY, so PARDON ME QUICK PLEASE, only time id see a "Key-Blurrin' my senses"..is if STARTIN UP THIS WEEk..city population includes"Elf APARTMENTS iN FIG TREES"!/ (the wordplay was a nice flip here, but once again the transition from STARTIN UP THIS WEEK to city population didnt work because it doesn't read like a sentence "is if STARTIN UP THIS WEEk..city population includes"Elf APARTMENTS iN FIG TREES"!" not sure what you mean here with the transition.. should be more clear and lose the "...." because it takes away from punch impact and you need to use better transition words in this instance)

Punches- 6 -would have been higher if you didn't have to drive /car punch and opener
multis- 7 - you actually have a good grasp on them and would have been higher if you wouldn't have had a broken multi with the wrong syllable count.
readability- 7 .. need to lose all of the ".." in your verse and be sure your transitions into the punches are smoother if that makes sense. Lose those and make the read a lil smoother and this will impact your multis readability alot
delivery/swag- 7 .. You actually have good swag.. you have a good grip on relevant multis and i can see you getting alot better very quickly with a lil tweaking
creativity- 6 .. the creativity was a little above average here with the spiral down concept n the wordplay flip on keibler... I can see you have a good grasp on this as well... a tad bit more creativity overall consistently will bump you up.

Overall - 6.6 - Judging off this verse you have a lot of potential and after a lil tweeking I can actually see you being one of the better texters on LB.. You have a better understanding of W/P and swag/multis then most just need to be sure you match the syllable counts cus this isn't the first battle ive seen you not do that. You have a high upside and mad potential.. You need to change your Avy tho it plays a mental role in this battling shit... vet tip of the week lol

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@EtH

His Illmania battle? They’ll EASILY KILL EM cause “you couldn’t profit from recording this fuck” reLEASING AND FILMING someone SLEEPING WITH HILTON! (multis were good... flow was on point.. concept was meh but flipped a lil and the build made it hit a lil harder, not too creative tho) Being picked for audio was like aCHIEVING FULFILMENT and I wish I could say this EMCEE WAS AN ILL PICK; for ACs the “test” wasn't “multiple choice” but Blnk's NEED TO BE FILLED IN! (the wording here was very good... the concept itself is played but in this case it is relevant, and the multi placement made for a decent personal punch here) ACs? He couldn’t see the “bigger picture” with a smartphone SCREEN THAT HE’S TILTING; he’d “branch out” but “leaves shrived up” like a TREE THAT IS WILTING! (cool double punch i thought the screen tilting punch was better than the last tree punch, once again a flip on a old concept/wp.. the double punch made for good effect but the creativity is lacking) you Your stay here is temporary, just LEASING THE BUILDING so for “Home Improvement”; we’ll “cut him” to “save face” like HE WAS OUR WILSON! ( i thought this was actually decent... cut him to save face haha... punch hit as well because you understand multi placement) After this, you beLEIVING YOU’RE STILL SICK? Nah if he’s SEEN ON SOME “KING” SHIT; Ima turn LA Police and straight BEAT THE CIVILLIAN! This faker pretends he’s got GREEN IN THE MILLIONS or EVEN A BILLION but if you see “Bleu with the cheddar” it’s EATING SOME STILTON! (meh punch, nothing special or out of the box here, good multis though) Sure he’s battled for years and thinks WE ARE HIS CHILDREN but you couldn’t be a “pioneer by trade” swapping BEADS WITH THE PILGRIMS! (i thought this was dope.... def did a lot for the verse... haven't seen this concept in this form.. dope punch here short n sweet) Bitches? If the “pussy is smooth” he reCEIVED A BRAZILLIAN so if this dudes in the "SHEETS” WITH A MILF IT’S chilling with his moms with a NEEDLE AND QUILTIN’! (another double punch, was decent but nothing that makes you go wow if you feel me, good multis once again though)

Punches-6.5 - You had them, but they were nothing special or wow punches... there were a couple that impressed me though.
Multis- 8 -schemed the entire verse, and the multis were on point and placed in the right places for maximum impact.
Readability- 8 - very smooth read one of your talents/upsides.
Delivery/Swag- 7.5 - You have a good delivery because you understand multi placement which makes your punches hit harder... Adding a little more personality into the verse would push you up a notch... maybe reading some verses from Jason.
Creativity- 6 .. Overall i felt you had a lot of punches that were flipped concepts, some flipped well though... the blnk flip was personal so that was decent.. i thought the pilgrim line was dope.. Overall i would say work on more creativity as that seems to be your only flaw....

Overall- 7.2 - What pushes you a little above 7 is the fact you have a very good understanding of multis/multi placement... which makes for your punches to hit harder... You also kept the scheme up and the readability was very good.. these are all the fundamentals of texting and you have those down... What you need to work on to get to that next level is more creative punches... You flipped a lot of concepts, and nothing really wowed me here... You have the fundamentals down which a lot of texters struggle with.. you don't try to do too much and it comes off as a smooth read. Just think a little harder on the punches while keeping it simple and not over think, and you will be a threat in texting being that you have the basics down pact almost. I think your next step would be adding some inner multis if you want to take it to that level... first I would work on more creativity.

[Erupt da Monsta]

@smiG

'Gores ass is bleedin,that we ALREADY SEE IN THIS ONE, cuz like "gay jokes bout Gardening in Eden" there will "ALWAYS BE A STEVE IN EM!/ (Wasn't really feeling this as an opener.. wasn't that creative imo, you needed another multi set to make it hit harder but even then the concept itself was pretty weak bro, the multi set was also a little off .. unless you have an accent IN THIS ONE and STEVE IN EM doesnt work because steve doesn't rhyme with in.. you can have multis that don't rhyme when they are little words like I, it, n, etc, but when you have words like STEVE, it almost always has to have a rhyming multi)....: how i creep when DARKENED ITS FITTING..how ya get "left wit no drive & torn aPART WHEN SMIG SPITTING...Like "cars that wont start after PARKIN IN BIG CITIES!/ (i like the inner multis here, the cars wont start set, the concept itself is played, no drive ... cars... could have been flipped better.. also bro I've read a few of your battles, and you seem to have too many syllables in your multis.. aPART WHEN SMIG SPITTING.. 5 syllables.. PARKIN IN BIG CITIES.. 6 syllables.. the syllables have to match for max punch impact and readability, also the concept was really simple here)...: Theres no ARGUIN WITH ME. Ne bitch be as HARD AS THIS SISSY..who "puff up they chest to spiral downward"..like "demi moore LARGENING TITTIES & STAR'n IN STRIPTEASE!"/ (i think the "..." is overused and takes away from the flow n readability of ya verse, could be smoother without them, the concept was actually nice i liked this punch here, im not going to nitpick on wording because i understand not using the word "like" is something that comes later on, good punch tho.. the double multi set was good as well here) i SPAR n WIN VICTORY, so PARDON ME QUICK PLEASE, only time id see a "Key-Blurrin' my senses"..is if STARTIN UP THIS WEEk..city population includes"Elf APARTMENTS iN FIG TREES"!/ (the wordplay was a nice flip here, but once again the transition from STARTIN UP THIS WEEK to city population didnt work because it doesn't read like a sentence "is if STARTIN UP THIS WEEk..city population includes"Elf APARTMENTS iN FIG TREES"!" not sure what you mean here with the transition.. should be more clear and lose the "...." because it takes away from punch impact and you need to use better transition words in this instance)

Punches- 6 -would have been higher if you didn't have to drive /car punch and opener
multis- 7 - you actually have a good grasp on them and would have been higher if you wouldn't have had a broken multi with the wrong syllable count.
readability- 7 .. need to lose all of the ".." in your verse and be sure your transitions into the punches are smoother if that makes sense. Lose those and make the read a lil smoother and this will impact your multis readability alot
delivery/swag- 7 .. You actually have good swag.. you have a good grip on relevant multis and i can see you getting alot better very quickly with a lil tweaking
creativity- 6 .. the creativity was a little above average here with the spiral down concept n the wordplay flip on keibler... I can see you have a good grasp on this as well... a tad bit more creativity overall consistently will bump you up.

Overall - 6.6 - Judging off this verse you have a lot of potential and after a lil tweeking I can actually see you being one of the better texters on LB.. You have a better understanding of W/P and swag/multis then most just need to be sure you match the syllable counts cus this isn't the first battle ive seen you not do that. You have a high upside and mad potential.. You need to change your Avy tho it plays a mental role in this battling shit... vet tip of the week lol

---------- Post added at 03:37 PM ---------- Previous post was at 03:00 PM ----------

@EtH

His Illmania battle? They’ll EASILY KILL EM cause “you couldn’t profit from recording this fuck” reLEASING AND FILMING someone SLEEPING WITH HILTON! (multis were good... flow was on point.. concept was meh but flipped a lil and the build made it hit a lil harder, not too creative tho) Being picked for audio was like aCHIEVING FULFILMENT and I wish I could say this EMCEE WAS AN ILL PICK; for ACs the “test” wasn't “multiple choice” but Blnk's NEED TO BE FILLED IN! (the wording here was very good... the concept itself is played but in this case it is relevant, and the multi placement made for a decent personal punch here) ACs? He couldn’t see the “bigger picture” with a smartphone SCREEN THAT HE’S TILTING; he’d “branch out” but “leaves shrived up” like a TREE THAT IS WILTING! (cool double punch i thought the screen tilting punch was better than the last tree punch, once again a flip on a old concept/wp.. the double punch made for good effect but the creativity is lacking) you Your stay here is temporary, just LEASING THE BUILDING so for “Home Improvement”; we’ll “cut him” to “save face” like HE WAS OUR WILSON! ( i thought this was actually decent... cut him to save face haha... punch hit as well because you understand multi placement) After this, you beLEIVING YOU’RE STILL SICK? Nah if he’s SEEN ON SOME “KING” SHIT; Ima turn LA Police and straight BEAT THE CIVILLIAN! This faker pretends he’s got GREEN IN THE MILLIONS or EVEN A BILLION but if you see “Bleu with the cheddar” it’s EATING SOME STILTON! (meh punch, nothing special or out of the box here, good multis though) Sure he’s battled for years and thinks WE ARE HIS CHILDREN but you couldn’t be a “pioneer by trade” swapping BEADS WITH THE PILGRIMS! (i thought this was dope.... def did a lot for the verse... haven't seen this concept in this form.. dope punch here short n sweet) Bitches? If the “pussy is smooth” he reCEIVED A BRAZILLIAN so if this dudes in the "SHEETS” WITH A MILF IT’S chilling with his moms with a NEEDLE AND QUILTIN’! (another double punch, was decent but nothing that makes you go wow if you feel me, good multis once again though)

Punches-6.5 - You had them, but they were nothing special or wow punches... there were a couple that impressed me though.
Multis- 8 -schemed the entire verse, and the multis were on point and placed in the right places for maximum impact.
Readability- 8 - very smooth read one of your talents/upsides.
Delivery/Swag- 7.5 - You have a good delivery because you understand multi placement which makes your punches hit harder... Adding a little more personality into the verse would push you up a notch... maybe reading some verses from Jason.
Creativity- 6 .. Overall i felt you had a lot of punches that were flipped concepts, some flipped well though... the blnk flip was personal so that was decent.. i thought the pilgrim line was dope.. Overall i would say work on more creativity as that seems to be your only flaw....

Overall- 7.2 - What pushes you a little above 7 is the fact you have a very good understanding of multis/multi placement... which makes for your punches to hit harder... You also kept the scheme up and the readability was very good.. these are all the fundamentals of texting and you have those down... What you need to work on to get to that next level is more creative punches... You flipped a lot of concepts, and nothing really wowed me here... You have the fundamentals down which a lot of texters struggle with.. you don't try to do too much and it comes off as a smooth read. Just think a little harder on the punches while keeping it simple and not over think, and you will be a threat in texting being that you have the basics down pact almost. I think your next step would be adding some inner multis if you want to take it to that level... first I would work on more creativity.

[Subreal]

I'mma post highest rated one i guess, since idk what to pick.

If you see a 'Red Cross' it's from shots I-Land not a SAVING STOP FOR HAITIANS but if Manny's 'on-board' 'w/ the Arms out' he's just PLAYING OPERATION!! Manny talks gunplay in all his bars like hes some kinda CRIMINAL CARRIER but all these threats are over a DIGITAL BARRIER so the key's Manny pushing are just like his name - FICTIONAL CHARACTERS! Fists or Guns Manny doesn't FIGHT OR SPRAY VERY WELL, so if hes "standing up for another round" he's in LINE FOR A CAROUSEL! But I rule this shit with an 'iron fist' i'll cause this 'DUDE'S SPLEEN TO BREAK' with blows ya can't 'stomach' that'll make YOU SCREAM IN PAIN to leave ya dead like HOUDINI'S FATE! As for ladies, your whole crew helps ya "PITCH IN" WORDS CHEATER bcuz it's not "good game" how Manny "pulls them chicks" WITH HIS BIRD FEEDER! (pigeon) He's been with his girl since his"coming of age" and still hasn't POPPED HER CHERRY so he'll have to pay for 'rite of passage thru a canal' w/o a PROPER FERRY! You're "drowning", too bad for you I'm RUNNING A SPEED BOAT I'll have this Canadian "sleeping through the 'english channel' without TOUCHING A REMOTE!Its ova, Manny thought he owned the place like he was some kinda NEW MAJOR SETTLER but i just "erased the motherfucker from text" like a NEWSPAPER EDITOR!

Vs Manhattan

[Subreal]

I'mma post highest rated one i guess, since idk what to pick.

If you see a 'Red Cross' it's from shots I-Land not a SAVING STOP FOR HAITIANS but if Manny's 'on-board' 'w/ the Arms out' he's just PLAYING OPERATION!! Manny talks gunplay in all his bars like hes some kinda CRIMINAL CARRIER but all these threats are over a DIGITAL BARRIER so the key's Manny pushing are just like his name - FICTIONAL CHARACTERS! Fists or Guns Manny doesn't FIGHT OR SPRAY VERY WELL, so if hes "standing up for another round" he's in LINE FOR A CAROUSEL! But I rule this shit with an 'iron fist' i'll cause this 'DUDE'S SPLEEN TO BREAK' with blows ya can't 'stomach' that'll make YOU SCREAM IN PAIN to leave ya dead like HOUDINI'S FATE! As for ladies, your whole crew helps ya "PITCH IN" WORDS CHEATER bcuz it's not "good game" how Manny "pulls them chicks" WITH HIS BIRD FEEDER! (pigeon) He's been with his girl since his"coming of age" and still hasn't POPPED HER CHERRY so he'll have to pay for 'rite of passage thru a canal' w/o a PROPER FERRY! You're "drowning", too bad for you I'm RUNNING A SPEED BOAT I'll have this Canadian "sleeping through the 'english channel' without TOUCHING A REMOTE!Its ova, Manny thought he owned the place like he was some kinda NEW MAJOR SETTLER but i just "erased the motherfucker from text" like a NEWSPAPER EDITOR!

Vs Manhattan

[exwhyzee]

@Erupt why are u doing this?

Not trying to downplay ur efforts, just wanted to know the reasoning.

[exwhyzee]

@Erupt why are u doing this?

Not trying to downplay ur efforts, just wanted to know the reasoning.

[Student]

Chico may talk about "Fake Stacks" and "Large Steel, Moving" but he's just referring to movies with BANK FORGERS and speaking of cash...his verse? I couldn't even make "Heads Or Tails" of it like BLANK QUARTERS!! this guy's the "Biggest Joke" look at his WORTHLESS acCOUNTS enough to SERVICE A TOWN so you'd think he'd be just fine but he still can't "Build Up" a punchline while I'll just "Go For The Jugular/Juggler" to kill this CIRCUS CLOWN!! I'm a classy island killer but when I say my lines'll "Wrap Around His Neck" or "Fold His Chest" I don't mean LEI'S OR LAPELS and he's deadly? nah only time he see's "Ass Ass Inns" is going to GAYLORD HOTELS!! he may talk about his "Shit Being Smooth" but that's just his BOTTOM LOTION and you beating me? please..."Don't Kid Yourself" like CONDOM SLOGANS!! I'm Student but I ought a be TEACHING CLASS talking bout' READING MAPS cause I'll put a "Red Stripe Through His Center" like this costa RICAN'S FLAG!! plus he bit on the last tournament and to that there's no STEEP OPPOSITION everyone knows those lines you quickly "Ripped Off” without CHEAP CIRCUMCISION!! last line.this bitch wanna "DICK AROUND" Ri:can catch a beat down like that meltdown from CHRIS BROWN!! F2D!!

vs. Rican for The Old Heads vs. New Head Tournament Champion Title (Which was taken away shortly and converted to an award)

[Student]

Chico may talk about "Fake Stacks" and "Large Steel, Moving" but he's just referring to movies with BANK FORGERS and speaking of cash...his verse? I couldn't even make "Heads Or Tails" of it like BLANK QUARTERS!! this guy's the "Biggest Joke" look at his WORTHLESS acCOUNTS enough to SERVICE A TOWN so you'd think he'd be just fine but he still can't "Build Up" a punchline while I'll just "Go For The Jugular/Juggler" to kill this CIRCUS CLOWN!! I'm a classy island killer but when I say my lines'll "Wrap Around His Neck" or "Fold His Chest" I don't mean LEI'S OR LAPELS and he's deadly? nah only time he see's "Ass Ass Inns" is going to GAYLORD HOTELS!! he may talk about his "Shit Being Smooth" but that's just his BOTTOM LOTION and you beating me? please..."Don't Kid Yourself" like CONDOM SLOGANS!! I'm Student but I ought a be TEACHING CLASS talking bout' READING MAPS cause I'll put a "Red Stripe Through His Center" like this costa RICAN'S FLAG!! plus he bit on the last tournament and to that there's no STEEP OPPOSITION everyone knows those lines you quickly "Ripped Off” without CHEAP CIRCUMCISION!! last line.this bitch wanna "DICK AROUND" Ri:can catch a beat down like that meltdown from CHRIS BROWN!! F2D!!

vs. Rican for The Old Heads vs. New Head Tournament Champion Title (Which was taken away shortly and converted to an award)