Topical Tournament RD3: Intricate_Skillz (winner) vs Black-Book (loser)

[ozark]

Are you on your phone fam

[ozark]

Are you on your phone fam

[Ill Phenom]

Originally Posted by Black-Book

I guess we have a different format? Cuz it shows up as 24 lines excluding the title on mine.

Maybe that's why, Only mentioned it cause I had a few people ask me about the line length thing.

[Ill Phenom]

Originally Posted by Black-Book

I guess we have a different format? Cuz it shows up as 24 lines excluding the title on mine.

Maybe that's why, Only mentioned it cause I had a few people ask me about the line length thing.

[Black Book]

Yeah, I'm on my iPhone.

[Black Book]

Yeah, I'm on my iPhone.

[ozark]

Ok thats y then fam- mines like 23 or 24 and it said like 30 on my phone- thats y all my formats are outta wackk- i save errything to my notepad the copy and paste so i'll have a copy of it- and the formats always fucked- next time- send a comment in the forum from ya phone thrn peep it on the desk top or lap- and count how many words basically is one line on either- so u have a better understading- sry for rambling im
Just drunk-

[ozark]

Ok thats y then fam- mines like 23 or 24 and it said like 30 on my phone- thats y all my formats are outta wackk- i save errything to my notepad the copy and paste so i'll have a copy of it- and the formats always fucked- next time- send a comment in the forum from ya phone thrn peep it on the desk top or lap- and count how many words basically is one line on either- so u have a better understading- sry for rambling im
Just drunk-

[Mind Fuck]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow: This was tough for me. Both had some up and down points where i felt they let up then other points where i felt it picked back up. Also both got a tad choppy in places where words were a tad forced but MYGT: Book

Vocabulary: For me this category was a no brainer MVGT: Skills

Topic/Meaning: Now this gets a little tricky here. I really liked both schemes, Meaning became evident earlier in one piece rather than the other. And i believe that edged them out in this category, MVGT: Book

Storytelling/Progression: Once again, I very enjoyed both stories. On one hand i liked one's better because it introduced the story immeaditly to let you know what you're getting into. the other began with Imagery, which isn't bad, it just doesn't leave you anything to take from it initially. Tough decision. MVGT: Book

Emotion: Felt deep emotion in both... But to me one maintained it from beginning to end with more of a bleeding heart feel. MVGT: Skills

Imagery: This is another tought catagory. In books story i felt he painted the actuall storyline pictures better with a good story line that followed thorughly. But, not to say skills didn't have imagery. he started wit it and ended with it, while maintain it throughout the whole piece.... Idn, i think this comes down to preference people. MVGT: Book

Poetic Techniques: This catgory also in my book was pretty easy. Ones storytelling lead them a tad astray from this catgroy IMO... MVGT: Skills

Ending: Suprise factor is what took this catagory for me. In ones piece the ending was a tad expected, nicely written, but no WoW factor. Whwere in the other the story progressed leading up to what you inevitably learn in the end. MVGT: Book

Very close battle here fellas. But in the end... MYGT: Black Book (barely)

[Mind Fuck]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow: This was tough for me. Both had some up and down points where i felt they let up then other points where i felt it picked back up. Also both got a tad choppy in places where words were a tad forced but MYGT: Book

Vocabulary: For me this category was a no brainer MVGT: Skills

Topic/Meaning: Now this gets a little tricky here. I really liked both schemes, Meaning became evident earlier in one piece rather than the other. And i believe that edged them out in this category, MVGT: Book

Storytelling/Progression: Once again, I very enjoyed both stories. On one hand i liked one's better because it introduced the story immeaditly to let you know what you're getting into. the other began with Imagery, which isn't bad, it just doesn't leave you anything to take from it initially. Tough decision. MVGT: Book

Emotion: Felt deep emotion in both... But to me one maintained it from beginning to end with more of a bleeding heart feel. MVGT: Skills

Imagery: This is another tought catagory. In books story i felt he painted the actuall storyline pictures better with a good story line that followed thorughly. But, not to say skills didn't have imagery. he started wit it and ended with it, while maintain it throughout the whole piece.... Idn, i think this comes down to preference people. MVGT: Book

Poetic Techniques: This catgory also in my book was pretty easy. Ones storytelling lead them a tad astray from this catgroy IMO... MVGT: Skills

Ending: Suprise factor is what took this catagory for me. In ones piece the ending was a tad expected, nicely written, but no WoW factor. Whwere in the other the story progressed leading up to what you inevitably learn in the end. MVGT: Book

Very close battle here fellas. But in the end... MYGT: Black Book (barely)

[Ill Phenom]

Battle is 2-2 now. Keep the votes coming in on this.

[Ill Phenom]

Battle is 2-2 now. Keep the votes coming in on this.

[Luke Eamiah]

Rhyme Scheme Flow: Black
Vocab- skillz
topic-black
emotion-black
sotrytelling/progression- skillz
emotion- black
imagery- skillz
poet techniques- skillz \
Ending- skillz

It was a VERY close. call. But one surprised me here. My vote goes to skillz.

[Luke Eamiah]

Rhyme Scheme Flow: Black
Vocab- skillz
topic-black
emotion-black
sotrytelling/progression- skillz
emotion- black
imagery- skillz
poet techniques- skillz \
Ending- skillz

It was a VERY close. call. But one surprised me here. My vote goes to skillz.

[Mind Fuck]

Originally Posted by H3art-N-S0UL

Rhyme Scheme Flow: Black
Vocab- skillz
topic-black
emotion-black
sotrytelling/progression- skillz
emotion- black
imagery- skillz
poet techniques- skillz \
Ending- skillz

It was a VERY close. call. But one surprised me here. My vote goes to skillz.

I think you should HAVE to provide at least a small expo

Instead of

black
skills
black...

Thats just me

[Mind Fuck]

Originally Posted by H3art-N-S0UL

Rhyme Scheme Flow: Black
Vocab- skillz
topic-black
emotion-black
sotrytelling/progression- skillz
emotion- black
imagery- skillz
poet techniques- skillz \
Ending- skillz

It was a VERY close. call. But one surprised me here. My vote goes to skillz.

I think you should HAVE to provide at least a small expo

Instead of

black
skills
black...

Thats just me

[Luke Eamiah]

*sigh* had shit to do today, but since MF thinks I'm a fucking BS voter, I'll give an expo.

Rhyme scheme/flow- Although Black book was choppy with his scheme at the beginning, he leveled out over the writing while Intricate was taking more of a Robert Frost poetic approach.

Vocab- This is self explanatory. I thought skillz was more consistent in the usage of more intricate(no pun intended) words.

Topic- This was easily blacks IMO. I gave it to black because his concept was MUCH more meaning and thought into his concept compared to skillz rather obvious assumption.

Emotion- I think Black took this one kinda easily. His was more personal which always makes it hit harder.

Storytelling/progression- I thought intricate took this because he led up to a point by setting it up in the beginning, whereas Black stated his view of the picture in the first line instead of slowly leading up to the story.

Imagery- I think Skills took this one rather easily. His use of descriptive words painted a vivid picture in my mind. As I could see what black was saying, I don't think he painted a VIVID picture through description as Skillz did.

Poet Techniques- I think Skillz to this one easily, too. I think this is the most obvious category. While Black was telling a story, Intricate's rhyme REALLY felt like you were reading a poem.

Ending- VERY CLOSE. The lethal injection line was a great ending but I liked the fact intricate LED UP to the point, but looking at the category ENDING itself, I'll have to give it a tie instead.

MVGT: Intricate. IMO it felt as if intricate took it more seriously and delivered a better, more poetic all around topical. I felt as if Black book tried to simplify it too much near the middle and end.

PM me if yall want any more details.

[Luke Eamiah]

*sigh* had shit to do today, but since MF thinks I'm a fucking BS voter, I'll give an expo.

Rhyme scheme/flow- Although Black book was choppy with his scheme at the beginning, he leveled out over the writing while Intricate was taking more of a Robert Frost poetic approach.

Vocab- This is self explanatory. I thought skillz was more consistent in the usage of more intricate(no pun intended) words.

Topic- This was easily blacks IMO. I gave it to black because his concept was MUCH more meaning and thought into his concept compared to skillz rather obvious assumption.

Emotion- I think Black took this one kinda easily. His was more personal which always makes it hit harder.

Storytelling/progression- I thought intricate took this because he led up to a point by setting it up in the beginning, whereas Black stated his view of the picture in the first line instead of slowly leading up to the story.

Imagery- I think Skills took this one rather easily. His use of descriptive words painted a vivid picture in my mind. As I could see what black was saying, I don't think he painted a VIVID picture through description as Skillz did.

Poet Techniques- I think Skillz to this one easily, too. I think this is the most obvious category. While Black was telling a story, Intricate's rhyme REALLY felt like you were reading a poem.

Ending- VERY CLOSE. The lethal injection line was a great ending but I liked the fact intricate LED UP to the point, but looking at the category ENDING itself, I'll have to give it a tie instead.

MVGT: Intricate. IMO it felt as if intricate took it more seriously and delivered a better, more poetic all around topical. I felt as if Black book tried to simplify it too much near the middle and end.

PM me if yall want any more details.

[Xander]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow- Honestly, I think Intricate got it. He had a much smoother read.
Vocabulary- Black Book, better choice of words to use.
Topic/Meaning- Black Book, I liked the idea of his story more.
Storytelling/Progression- Intricate, better story telling skills.
Emotion- Intricate.
Imagery- Intricate.
Poetic Techniques- BB
Ending- Intricate

MVGT--- Intricate skills, he showed alot more skills in this, better rhyme scheme, a better story (although black had a better idea) and he made it look and feel like I was in the story. Good verses from both sides.

[Xander]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow- Honestly, I think Intricate got it. He had a much smoother read.
Vocabulary- Black Book, better choice of words to use.
Topic/Meaning- Black Book, I liked the idea of his story more.
Storytelling/Progression- Intricate, better story telling skills.
Emotion- Intricate.
Imagery- Intricate.
Poetic Techniques- BB
Ending- Intricate

MVGT--- Intricate skills, he showed alot more skills in this, better rhyme scheme, a better story (although black had a better idea) and he made it look and feel like I was in the story. Good verses from both sides.