Correct me if I'm wrong.. (Help!)

[Obey]

I've been told a lot of my battles lack the smoothness when reading them. But doesn't that seem some-what irrational? I mean, it all depends how you read stuff right? When I read MY rhymes, I read them like a Hopsin/Eminem type of flow.. (Quick paced, stop..then punch line.) I don't know, I just can't seem to understand the concept of flow in a text battle/nor get it down pat. I feel like it's been the determining factors in a shit-load of my battles. I'll give 2 recent link here, read over these battles.. (Voting's optional, feel free to though) and please deliver some feedback.

Me vs. ~Shinigami~ - http://www.letsbeef.com/battle_detai...n=tb&id=454466

Me vs. Duh Great Whyte - http://www.letsbeef.com/battle_detai...n=tb&id=454499

[Obey]

I've been told a lot of my battles lack the smoothness when reading them. But doesn't that seem some-what irrational? I mean, it all depends how you read stuff right? When I read MY rhymes, I read them like a Hopsin/Eminem type of flow.. (Quick paced, stop..then punch line.) I don't know, I just can't seem to understand the concept of flow in a text battle/nor get it down pat. I feel like it's been the determining factors in a shit-load of my battles. I'll give 2 recent link here, read over these battles.. (Voting's optional, feel free to though) and please deliver some feedback.

Me vs. ~Shinigami~ - http://www.letsbeef.com/battle_detai...n=tb&id=454466

Me vs. Duh Great Whyte - http://www.letsbeef.com/battle_detai...n=tb&id=454499

[GRizzEAT]

holla at ma i.m.

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[GRizzEAT]

holla at ma i.m.

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