Dr. Killz

[ViTRiOL]

Originally Posted by RULE

Its 2012 but ya punches LAME & AVE'RAGE STILL?? the only difference is now you say you AIM A GAT AND PEEL so since this "Small Fry Gotta Toy Now" i guess he beCAME A HAPPY MEAL!! cmonn dont SAY YOU CLAPPIN STEEL cuz he AINT AS HALF AS REAL as he CLAIMIN & FORREAL i wouldnt be in a "Box Off His Hit" w/ the GREATEST ACTING SKILL!! (Box Office Hit)

Dope section and that, RULE.

But AINT AS HALF AS REAL? *shakes head*

[ViTRiOL]

Originally Posted by RULE

Its 2012 but ya punches LAME & AVE'RAGE STILL?? the only difference is now you say you AIM A GAT AND PEEL so since this "Small Fry Gotta Toy Now" i guess he beCAME A HAPPY MEAL!! cmonn dont SAY YOU CLAPPIN STEEL cuz he AINT AS HALF AS REAL as he CLAIMIN & FORREAL i wouldnt be in a "Box Off His Hit" w/ the GREATEST ACTING SKILL!! (Box Office Hit)

Dope section and that, RULE.

But AINT AS HALF AS REAL? *shakes head*

[Just C]

@Itz Killz

Fuck it, I'll play.

But here's some advice to the FEW LAMES THAT'LL MISS YA "Hire an 'Unknown Artist' to start 'enGRAVING THE SCRIPTURES' But when you say ya goodbyes 'screw RAISING A GLASS', 'poor a 40 on the PAVEMENT FOR CHAP' cuz AFTER I 'toast him with inten' It'll be no use 'RAISING THE PITCHERS'/

[Just C]

@Itz Killz

Fuck it, I'll play.

But here's some advice to the FEW LAMES THAT'LL MISS YA "Hire an 'Unknown Artist' to start 'enGRAVING THE SCRIPTURES' But when you say ya goodbyes 'screw RAISING A GLASS', 'poor a 40 on the PAVEMENT FOR CHAP' cuz AFTER I 'toast him with inten' It'll be no use 'RAISING THE PITCHERS'/

[Krhyme Killz]

Originally Posted by ViTRiOL

Complexity?! He's gone too far... on each HORIZON OF NATIONS, can someone ARISE N TRANSLATE HIM?! Skilli must be *Insane* to "Test Steez/Testes Of A God", he'd have better success with POSEIDON'S CASTRATION! But what's this jibber-jabber? I'm expecting some white-coats to ARRIVE N STRAP-TAPE HIM, so he can go "Talk to All His Hoes" at the ASYLUM'S PLANTATION!!! Y'all visit him tryna find the vaGINAS OF PITCHFORKS: Ain't nothin but a tool-fucker or one of Charlie's Angels, seein as he gets LINES FOR A BITCH-CAUSE: Everyone talks 'bout Skilli's textbox being a future threat? But all I see is a "Pussy Stretch Punches" like DYKES IN A FIST WAR!!! So carry on chatting shit, those "Actions'll Get You Grounded Quick" like you're MIMING A RIPCORD: Your text-shit has been bested, watch this scum go HIDE IN A DISHCLOTH, he's in a "Lower Domain", in need of a bigger "Line-for-Line Breakdown" than a SITE W/ A GLITCHED PORT(ww2) - Sheeez! You know that expo would end with a "Bigger List of Things to Kill Off" than KIKES ON A CLIPBOARD!!!

Middle section of my 32 against Skilligan:
(http://www.letsbeef.com/battle_detai...n=tb&id=432470)

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Much appreciated bro. I want another battle with you. I'm 1-0 up atm.

you never beat me, yo
ok...test steez of a god doesnt work, while testes of a god does....remember..its gotta be smooth by both meanings...dope concept thought forreal.plantation line was 'eh'...wait....what the fuck is 'vaginas of pitchforks'?? and the multi set doesnt match...that was odd. and the next concept....wouldnt the punches stretch the pussy in that scenario? decent idea, but execution is off..the rest was decent i guess...seemed forced, and the anti semetic closer was pretty played and worded awkwardly.

overall you got the gist, but you want to start to put shit together more naturally...might i suggest reading some Daddio shit...he's pretty good at making the text box more conversatonal and less jittery

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Originally Posted by Just C

@Itz Killz

Fuck it, I'll play.

But here's some advice to the FEW LAMES THAT'LL MISS YA "Hire an 'Unknown Artist' to start 'enGRAVING THE SCRIPTURES' But when you say ya goodbyes 'screw RAISING A GLASS', 'poor a 40 on the PAVEMENT FOR CHAP' cuz AFTER I 'toast him with inten' It'll be no use 'RAISING THE PITCHERS'/

ummmm..i dont get it lol. started out kinda fresh forreal..i just dont get the 'toast him with inten' part homie..

expo?

[Krhyme Killz]

Originally Posted by ViTRiOL

Complexity?! He's gone too far... on each HORIZON OF NATIONS, can someone ARISE N TRANSLATE HIM?! Skilli must be *Insane* to "Test Steez/Testes Of A God", he'd have better success with POSEIDON'S CASTRATION! But what's this jibber-jabber? I'm expecting some white-coats to ARRIVE N STRAP-TAPE HIM, so he can go "Talk to All His Hoes" at the ASYLUM'S PLANTATION!!! Y'all visit him tryna find the vaGINAS OF PITCHFORKS: Ain't nothin but a tool-fucker or one of Charlie's Angels, seein as he gets LINES FOR A BITCH-CAUSE: Everyone talks 'bout Skilli's textbox being a future threat? But all I see is a "Pussy Stretch Punches" like DYKES IN A FIST WAR!!! So carry on chatting shit, those "Actions'll Get You Grounded Quick" like you're MIMING A RIPCORD: Your text-shit has been bested, watch this scum go HIDE IN A DISHCLOTH, he's in a "Lower Domain", in need of a bigger "Line-for-Line Breakdown" than a SITE W/ A GLITCHED PORT(ww2) - Sheeez! You know that expo would end with a "Bigger List of Things to Kill Off" than KIKES ON A CLIPBOARD!!!

Middle section of my 32 against Skilligan:
(http://www.letsbeef.com/battle_detai...n=tb&id=432470)

---------- Post added at 12:54 AM ---------- Previous post was at 12:52 AM ----------

Much appreciated bro. I want another battle with you. I'm 1-0 up atm.

you never beat me, yo
ok...test steez of a god doesnt work, while testes of a god does....remember..its gotta be smooth by both meanings...dope concept thought forreal.plantation line was 'eh'...wait....what the fuck is 'vaginas of pitchforks'?? and the multi set doesnt match...that was odd. and the next concept....wouldnt the punches stretch the pussy in that scenario? decent idea, but execution is off..the rest was decent i guess...seemed forced, and the anti semetic closer was pretty played and worded awkwardly.

overall you got the gist, but you want to start to put shit together more naturally...might i suggest reading some Daddio shit...he's pretty good at making the text box more conversatonal and less jittery

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Originally Posted by Just C

@Itz Killz

Fuck it, I'll play.

But here's some advice to the FEW LAMES THAT'LL MISS YA "Hire an 'Unknown Artist' to start 'enGRAVING THE SCRIPTURES' But when you say ya goodbyes 'screw RAISING A GLASS', 'poor a 40 on the PAVEMENT FOR CHAP' cuz AFTER I 'toast him with inten' It'll be no use 'RAISING THE PITCHERS'/

ummmm..i dont get it lol. started out kinda fresh forreal..i just dont get the 'toast him with inten' part homie..

expo?

[Just C]

Toast him within ten of my 16
Toast him with intent
Pitchers/pictures.

[Just C]

Toast him within ten of my 16
Toast him with intent
Pitchers/pictures.

[Krhyme Killz]

thanks...

and no...lol...thats a stretch. MAYBE the 'within 10' part...if the fact that it was 16lines or whatever was mentioned or addressed, but without being lead...i'd prolly never come to that conclusion

[Krhyme Killz]

thanks...

and no...lol...thats a stretch. MAYBE the 'within 10' part...if the fact that it was 16lines or whatever was mentioned or addressed, but without being lead...i'd prolly never come to that conclusion

[Just C]

But if you woulda been reading the actual battle in the 16 box to vote it woulda been self explanatory. Plus I said just before or around the 10 line mark. But you read it in here, not the battle cuz I posted it, So I'm not complaining. Thanks.

[Just C]

But if you woulda been reading the actual battle in the 16 box to vote it woulda been self explanatory. Plus I said just before or around the 10 line mark. But you read it in here, not the battle cuz I posted it, So I'm not complaining. Thanks.

[IV]

'Damnnn!!' I CRAFT THOSE ASTONISHIN.. WACK FLOW ABOLISHMENTS!!.. (GASP) HOE.. ACHKNOWLEDGE THIS… you ain’t UP CLOSE OF FOLLOWIN’ infact “milk” ain’t “touching me” as if I’m LACTOSE INTOLLERANT!!

Against Deniro B milk, RULE hates my name play, what you think?

[IV]

'Damnnn!!' I CRAFT THOSE ASTONISHIN.. WACK FLOW ABOLISHMENTS!!.. (GASP) HOE.. ACHKNOWLEDGE THIS… you ain’t UP CLOSE OF FOLLOWIN’ infact “milk” ain’t “touching me” as if I’m LACTOSE INTOLLERANT!!

Against Deniro B milk, RULE hates my name play, what you think?

[ViTRiOL]

Originally Posted by Itz Killz

you never beat me, yo?*

Thanks for the feedback n'all. I'm a bit rusty, so my concepts are coming off a bit forced... I'm tryna drag out all the complexity at once, when I should stick to basic punchlines again and work my way up.

And also, sorry to correct you: http://www.letsbeef.com/battle_detai...n=tb&id=379774

(Aight, that was a cheap shot)

Haha, peace fam...

[ViTRiOL]

Originally Posted by Itz Killz

you never beat me, yo?*

Thanks for the feedback n'all. I'm a bit rusty, so my concepts are coming off a bit forced... I'm tryna drag out all the complexity at once, when I should stick to basic punchlines again and work my way up.

And also, sorry to correct you: http://www.letsbeef.com/battle_detai...n=tb&id=379774

(Aight, that was a cheap shot)

Haha, peace fam...

[Red Dot]

i'm in a different LANE THEN THIS GUY IS, heard him SAY HE GOT DRIVE THEN i 'snapped, shot his mug, put his head in a box'..he ain't been ABLE TO LIE SINCE(license).

[Red Dot]

i'm in a different LANE THEN THIS GUY IS, heard him SAY HE GOT DRIVE THEN i 'snapped, shot his mug, put his head in a box'..he ain't been ABLE TO LIE SINCE(license).

[Krhyme Killz]

Originally Posted by Verity

'Damnnn!!' I CRAFT THOSE ASTONISHIN.. WACK FLOW ABOLISHMENTS!!.. (GASP) HOE.. ACHKNOWLEDGE THIS… you ain’t UP CLOSE OF FOLLOWIN’ infact “milk” ain’t “touching me” as if I’m LACTOSE INTOLLERANT!!

Against Deniro B milk, RULE hates my name play, what you think?

lol..ok...i saw RULE being on his mean shit in that other thread about this very nameplay...

the fact is...this bar was very well constucted. obviously you taking a lil shot at his structure cuz its done (well) in his style...

buuuuuttt....for you to have such a dope build, i would hope that the punch would be fresh as fuck...and for someone actually named "Milk"...i'd hope it'd be fresher...dont get me wrong, if the build was like, "..i dont fuck with milk...LACTOSE INTOLERANT...lb's monster? well breakfast on me when i PACK TOASTS FOR GOBLINS!!." ...or some shit like that..but as the main punch...its a lil played since the name is so obvious n shit...

this was well put together though shordy

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Originally Posted by Red Dot

i'm in a different LANE THEN THIS GUY IS, heard him SAY HE GOT DRIVE THEN i 'snapped, shot his mug, put his head in a box'..he ain't been ABLE TO LIE SINCE(license).

you've got potential yo...that was a nice lil piece...problem is.."he aint been able to license" doesnt compute...and 'he aint been able to lie since' doesnt reallly fit the bar...this was creative and definately on the right path...serious potential man

[Krhyme Killz]

Originally Posted by Verity

'Damnnn!!' I CRAFT THOSE ASTONISHIN.. WACK FLOW ABOLISHMENTS!!.. (GASP) HOE.. ACHKNOWLEDGE THIS… you ain’t UP CLOSE OF FOLLOWIN’ infact “milk” ain’t “touching me” as if I’m LACTOSE INTOLLERANT!!

Against Deniro B milk, RULE hates my name play, what you think?

lol..ok...i saw RULE being on his mean shit in that other thread about this very nameplay...

the fact is...this bar was very well constucted. obviously you taking a lil shot at his structure cuz its done (well) in his style...

buuuuuttt....for you to have such a dope build, i would hope that the punch would be fresh as fuck...and for someone actually named "Milk"...i'd hope it'd be fresher...dont get me wrong, if the build was like, "..i dont fuck with milk...LACTOSE INTOLERANT...lb's monster? well breakfast on me when i PACK TOASTS FOR GOBLINS!!." ...or some shit like that..but as the main punch...its a lil played since the name is so obvious n shit...

this was well put together though shordy

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Originally Posted by Red Dot

i'm in a different LANE THEN THIS GUY IS, heard him SAY HE GOT DRIVE THEN i 'snapped, shot his mug, put his head in a box'..he ain't been ABLE TO LIE SINCE(license).

you've got potential yo...that was a nice lil piece...problem is.."he aint been able to license" doesnt compute...and 'he aint been able to lie since' doesnt reallly fit the bar...this was creative and definately on the right path...serious potential man