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Im completely lost in this one.. Phoenix verse was a bit bland.. The guy kills his self all in what 5 days? Alias.. Was u talkin about a fly or...? Either way, you lost me cus (imo) most readers would not know after reading it.. if you was takin the metaphor route.. it wasnt well executed..
Nevertheless.. my vote goes to Alais.. more entertaining i guess.
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Im completely lost in this one.. Phoenix verse was a bit bland.. The guy kills his self all in what 5 days? Alias.. Was u talkin about a fly or...? Either way, you lost me cus (imo) most readers would not know after reading it.. if you was takin the metaphor route.. it wasnt well executed..
Nevertheless.. my vote goes to Alais.. more entertaining i guess.
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11-12-2013, 08:34 AM
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11-12-2013, 08:34 AM
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Phoenix: you had pretty good flow and vocal. I really wasn't the digging the story very much, especially ending. it was aright and had moments of good imagery, but the narrative wasn't that great.
Handjob: You lost me dude. This verse was all over the place. I feel like it was a bunch of different concepts that just got jumble together. no hate, maybe ry to stick to one strong. concept more next time.
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11-13-2013, 03:26 PM
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Phoenix: you had pretty good flow and vocal. I really wasn't the digging the story very much, especially ending. it was aright and had moments of good imagery, but the narrative wasn't that great.
Handjob: You lost me dude. This verse was all over the place. I feel like it was a bunch of different concepts that just got jumble together. no hate, maybe ry to stick to one strong. concept more next time.
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Handjob, your verse was put together well, and it flowed nicely, no imagery or descriptive writing, thats what i usually look for in a topical verse, but still you had a solid and well put together verse props on that
Phoenix: I really enjoyed your verse, same as handjob it was a solid verse, the rhyming could've been better in my opinion, but unlike your opponent you had some imagery when you described russia had frost etc and you basically described different destinations which i liked.
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11-18-2013, 01:19 PM
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Handjob, your verse was put together well, and it flowed nicely, no imagery or descriptive writing, thats what i usually look for in a topical verse, but still you had a solid and well put together verse props on that
Phoenix: I really enjoyed your verse, same as handjob it was a solid verse, the rhyming could've been better in my opinion, but unlike your opponent you had some imagery when you described russia had frost etc and you basically described different destinations which i liked.
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Phoenix: I actually like the scenery changes relating to the 'oh man the world is shit' guess I can't do much I'll off myself. Not the most engaging ending but the premise was relatively plausible, just not explained deeply enough.
Handjob Alias: I really enjoy the idea here (assuming you were going for some metaphorical piece) but the execution was so so sloppy it was hard to slosh through. Had you cleaned it up a bit I think it would have made for a real nice and unique narrative.
Overall, both pieces had some serious flaws but I can't overlook just how jumbled alias's piece was regardless of how much I enjoyed the concept.
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Phoenix: I actually like the scenery changes relating to the 'oh man the world is shit' guess I can't do much I'll off myself. Not the most engaging ending but the premise was relatively plausible, just not explained deeply enough.
Handjob Alias: I really enjoy the idea here (assuming you were going for some metaphorical piece) but the execution was so so sloppy it was hard to slosh through. Had you cleaned it up a bit I think it would have made for a real nice and unique narrative.
Overall, both pieces had some serious flaws but I can't overlook just how jumbled alias's piece was regardless of how much I enjoyed the concept.
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