ATT Round 1: Writer 6 vs. Writer 27 (Writer 6 wins 3-0)

[IAmFlow]

Writer 6 - The topic/approach of your story depicted the quote okay. I'll admit, that I do not think that is one of the best approaches that you could have taking on that quote. You could have went for something much deeper as far as both emotion and imagery. I thought you were kind of limited, also didn't feel as if the "deed" justified the quote so much either. Didn't feel the ending violence with violence suited it. As far as the writing you started off well with your rhyme scheme, flow was on point, and your word usage was good. But as the topical went on, I felt it gradually went down hill in those areas. Came to a few iffy spots in flow, and some more simplistic schemes as it went on. I just felt like a different writer wrote the last half of the verse than what wrote the top half.

Writer 27 - Thought your verse lacked substance or a real theme to fly with the quote. Seemed like you were jumping around a bit. It was sloppy and hard to read at times. The flow was off and on, and most of the rhyme scheme was so basic that it did no justice (grin, grim, sin, wins, pins, friends).. Just so simplistic. Gotta be more creative and take a good approach for your topical verse. There isn't much more to say honestly, I don't want to sound harsh but it just wasn't a good verse, IMO. Read some of the other topical battles that get good recognition and get an idea of how they are writing theirs.

MGVT: Writer 6 - This one was an obvious one. The above feedback has all the reasoning you need for the vote.

[IAmFlow]

Writer 6 - The topic/approach of your story depicted the quote okay. I'll admit, that I do not think that is one of the best approaches that you could have taking on that quote. You could have went for something much deeper as far as both emotion and imagery. I thought you were kind of limited, also didn't feel as if the "deed" justified the quote so much either. Didn't feel the ending violence with violence suited it. As far as the writing you started off well with your rhyme scheme, flow was on point, and your word usage was good. But as the topical went on, I felt it gradually went down hill in those areas. Came to a few iffy spots in flow, and some more simplistic schemes as it went on. I just felt like a different writer wrote the last half of the verse than what wrote the top half.

Writer 27 - Thought your verse lacked substance or a real theme to fly with the quote. Seemed like you were jumping around a bit. It was sloppy and hard to read at times. The flow was off and on, and most of the rhyme scheme was so basic that it did no justice (grin, grim, sin, wins, pins, friends).. Just so simplistic. Gotta be more creative and take a good approach for your topical verse. There isn't much more to say honestly, I don't want to sound harsh but it just wasn't a good verse, IMO. Read some of the other topical battles that get good recognition and get an idea of how they are writing theirs.

MGVT: Writer 6 - This one was an obvious one. The above feedback has all the reasoning you need for the vote.