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[Babylon]

Originally Posted by Punk

Niggas Sneak Dissin Versace..

Forgive me fam.

---------- Post added at 06:21 PM ---------- Previous post was at 06:09 PM ----------

Originally Posted by Sax0joE

Only problem is the word 'bitch' in there? Am I right? From what you said earlier bitch shouldnt be in there?

Also the t-shirt line shouldnt be in your verse?

Did you do this on purpose to see if I would pick up on it?

---------- Post added at 05:42 PM ---------- Previous post was at 05:14 PM ----------

Have this guy 'jacked up' I got GROOVY WINNER BARS he'll be leavin 'gassed up' like Gremlins in MOVIE CINEMAS!

I have no clue what you're talking about in the beginning of that comment lmao, please elaborate because I'm confused as fuck.

As for that bar, I can see you're improving and I'm glad you're branching out into more complex multi's. You got the first part perfect with GROOVY/MOVIE but WINNER BARS and CINEMAS don't really rhyme well. Though you are getting a lot closer, I'm going to start throwing some multi's at you. Try to create some bars off of them and add at LEAST 2 multi's to the ones I already provide. It doesn't need a punch or anything, this is purely to elevate your multi skills.

I'm a ROGUE SAVAGE, CLOSED CASKET when I TOE TAG HIM... (Finish this bar, add at least two more multis that rhyme with Rogue Savage/Closed Casket/Toe Tag Him. Or not if you just don't want to, that's fine too.)

[Babylon]

Originally Posted by Punk

Niggas Sneak Dissin Versace..

Forgive me fam.

---------- Post added at 06:21 PM ---------- Previous post was at 06:09 PM ----------

Originally Posted by Sax0joE

Only problem is the word 'bitch' in there? Am I right? From what you said earlier bitch shouldnt be in there?

Also the t-shirt line shouldnt be in your verse?

Did you do this on purpose to see if I would pick up on it?

---------- Post added at 05:42 PM ---------- Previous post was at 05:14 PM ----------

Have this guy 'jacked up' I got GROOVY WINNER BARS he'll be leavin 'gassed up' like Gremlins in MOVIE CINEMAS!

I have no clue what you're talking about in the beginning of that comment lmao, please elaborate because I'm confused as fuck.

As for that bar, I can see you're improving and I'm glad you're branching out into more complex multi's. You got the first part perfect with GROOVY/MOVIE but WINNER BARS and CINEMAS don't really rhyme well. Though you are getting a lot closer, I'm going to start throwing some multi's at you. Try to create some bars off of them and add at LEAST 2 multi's to the ones I already provide. It doesn't need a punch or anything, this is purely to elevate your multi skills.

I'm a ROGUE SAVAGE, CLOSED CASKET when I TOE TAG HIM... (Finish this bar, add at least two more multis that rhyme with Rogue Savage/Closed Casket/Toe Tag Him. Or not if you just don't want to, that's fine too.)