Am I wrong?.
Slaughters An EMBARASSIN EMCEE, It's Funny How He Thinks "His Skill," can Fuck "With Real," He's DARING TO TEST ME! I ATTACK HER WITH MAD BLOWS, Too Many Times I've "Crossed Wacks," But Ur More *Off Track* Then RAPPERS WITH BAD FLOW! Too Get This Win I got the SKILLS INSIDE, But What Does This So Call "Vet Offer?" Bitch u'll *Get~Slaughtered,* Just Like how u KILLED UR PRIDE!! Dog u Really ELEVATED THE WACK WAY, Now watch him Send "In The Hoes,'' an He Think He's Good becuz He Got a *Win Against Oh's...* I Bet he CELEBRATED THAT DAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
YNS; Readability was somewhat better than the first verse but was lacking in areas. Wasn't feeling highlighting random multies. Punchlines, if you could call them that, were extremely simple & basic. Overall it was a poor battle verse. My advice to both would to try to incorporate metaphor's & punchlines. Both need work on there structure. Take this as a hate vote if you wish but im been real with you both so you both can improve.
YNS- seems to have caught feelings over the way I vote. People that know me knows i keep it '100. Do you agree or disagree with the way i have voted?. Im not doing this for my benefit, just wan't to know your opinion. I rated the verse 3.
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