Just C vs My Rigga!

[Just C]

http://www.letsbeef.com/battle_detai...n=tb&id=424271

[Just C]

http://www.letsbeef.com/battle_detai...n=tb&id=424271

[RiGGA]

bump...I'm gettin slapped as usual but if anyone cares to tell me exactly wtf is wrong with my 8 this time I'd really appreciate it..It's discouraging as shit to constantly take L's but hopefully there's progress being made...

[RiGGA]

bump...I'm gettin slapped as usual but if anyone cares to tell me exactly wtf is wrong with my 8 this time I'd really appreciate it..It's discouraging as shit to constantly take L's but hopefully there's progress being made...

[Óðinn]

Imma be straight with ya RiGGA.. your bars are basic (to put it politely) even if it was in Audio and had a dope delivery, they'd still be.. eh?... Conceptually wise, your NOT that bad (i've seen way worse, trust me) but you have a lot to improve in every category.. I'll give a very small/quick breakdown...


Look at Just C's opening line:

Rigga ya gettin froggy but never left ya pad

^A played-ish concept, but still a nice metaphor/punchline as the froggy reference goes with the pad.. Lilly Pad's/Frogs be on Lilly pads.. So he's making sense

Look at Your opening line:

Now shit, this is a battle I can 'come to respect', but dont think I'm rattled cuz you 'thump wit ya neck'

The first half ok-ish if it was actually leading into something better/relevant.. but you followed nothing but a multi as your 'punchline'.. dont think im rattled cuz you 'thump wit ya neck'<< One, your concept & execution of it was poor.. I would (if i was going for the 'rattle' ish) would of related to either a baby or a snake, as then the 'rattle' would become relevant..

Your whole verse seem's more like a bad Audio freestyle... your focusing to much on making words rhyme rather than actually saying anything..

Every build up line has to be relevant to the punch.. No good saying things like yO i put 'gun to fool' when im 'done with you' Open a Present..

Better off with something like...

if we were to 'Fight in Person' this vegetable wouldn't 'Turn Up/Turnip im Certain' cos he JUST A CABBAGE!!
^In this line, the Vegetable build up reference goes well as it relate's to the punchline CABBAGE.. as well as the wordplay too...

You've quite a long bit to go, but i've no problem giving ya some pointers via IM..

Hope this help's ya.. Peace

[Óðinn]

Imma be straight with ya RiGGA.. your bars are basic (to put it politely) even if it was in Audio and had a dope delivery, they'd still be.. eh?... Conceptually wise, your NOT that bad (i've seen way worse, trust me) but you have a lot to improve in every category.. I'll give a very small/quick breakdown...


Look at Just C's opening line:

Rigga ya gettin froggy but never left ya pad

^A played-ish concept, but still a nice metaphor/punchline as the froggy reference goes with the pad.. Lilly Pad's/Frogs be on Lilly pads.. So he's making sense

Look at Your opening line:

Now shit, this is a battle I can 'come to respect', but dont think I'm rattled cuz you 'thump wit ya neck'

The first half ok-ish if it was actually leading into something better/relevant.. but you followed nothing but a multi as your 'punchline'.. dont think im rattled cuz you 'thump wit ya neck'<< One, your concept & execution of it was poor.. I would (if i was going for the 'rattle' ish) would of related to either a baby or a snake, as then the 'rattle' would become relevant..

Your whole verse seem's more like a bad Audio freestyle... your focusing to much on making words rhyme rather than actually saying anything..

Every build up line has to be relevant to the punch.. No good saying things like yO i put 'gun to fool' when im 'done with you' Open a Present..

Better off with something like...

if we were to 'Fight in Person' this vegetable wouldn't 'Turn Up/Turnip im Certain' cos he JUST A CABBAGE!!
^In this line, the Vegetable build up reference goes well as it relate's to the punchline CABBAGE.. as well as the wordplay too...

You've quite a long bit to go, but i've no problem giving ya some pointers via IM..

Hope this help's ya.. Peace

[RiGGA]

I don't get it, how is calling someone a cabbage nice though??? Just because it's relevant that makes it dope?? So I can say shit like

"This lame couldn't jump if he wanted to, cuz he's a broke white man!"

I mean it makes sense because "white men can't jump", lame in a physical sense is like broke, and people who are lame/handicapped really can't jump if they wanted to. Tie in to the fact that I'm also saying This lame wouldn't jump hard, as in get tough and it makes perfect sense.

Is this what you niggas consider a good bar? Cuz real talk it took me 15 seconds to think this shit up and if that's what it takes to win then I have possessed the ability to craft punches all along I just didn't know cats were so easily pleased...

By the way I appreciate you choosing to help, that's all I've ever really been asking for lol..

[RiGGA]

I don't get it, how is calling someone a cabbage nice though??? Just because it's relevant that makes it dope?? So I can say shit like

"This lame couldn't jump if he wanted to, cuz he's a broke white man!"

I mean it makes sense because "white men can't jump", lame in a physical sense is like broke, and people who are lame/handicapped really can't jump if they wanted to. Tie in to the fact that I'm also saying This lame wouldn't jump hard, as in get tough and it makes perfect sense.

Is this what you niggas consider a good bar? Cuz real talk it took me 15 seconds to think this shit up and if that's what it takes to win then I have possessed the ability to craft punches all along I just didn't know cats were so easily pleased...

By the way I appreciate you choosing to help, that's all I've ever really been asking for lol..

[Óðinn]

Originally Posted by RiGGA

I don't get it, how is calling someone a cabbage nice though??? Just because it's relevant that makes it dope?? So I can say shit like

"This lame couldn't jump if he wanted to, cuz he's a broke white man!"

I mean it makes sense because "white men can't jump", lame in a physical sense is like broke, and people who are lame/handicapped really can't jump if they wanted to. Tie in to the fact that I'm also saying This lame wouldn't jump hard, as in get tough and it makes perfect sense.

Is this what you niggas consider a good bar? Cuz real talk it took me 15 seconds to think this shit up and if that's what it takes to win I possessed the ability to craft punches all along I just didn't know cats were so easily pleased...

By the way I appreciate you choosing to help, that's all I've ever really been asking for lol..

racist much?? and there is a wide range of handicap symptoms dude... you neve watch/seen or hear of the Specially Olympics.. Your making your self look real bad man... Real Bad.. Its not about how much time you spend on the bar... its how you execute the concept & deliver the bar.. Granted the Cabbage piece might not have been the BEST example to use, but it was first thing that sprung to mind...
CABBAGE as in mentally handicapped/Affraid... aint seen a cabbage turnip/turn up to a fight in person have ya?? cos i aint.. it was a quick ass example, an i never once said the line was Dope...

[Óðinn]

Originally Posted by RiGGA

I don't get it, how is calling someone a cabbage nice though??? Just because it's relevant that makes it dope?? So I can say shit like

"This lame couldn't jump if he wanted to, cuz he's a broke white man!"

I mean it makes sense because "white men can't jump", lame in a physical sense is like broke, and people who are lame/handicapped really can't jump if they wanted to. Tie in to the fact that I'm also saying This lame wouldn't jump hard, as in get tough and it makes perfect sense.

Is this what you niggas consider a good bar? Cuz real talk it took me 15 seconds to think this shit up and if that's what it takes to win I possessed the ability to craft punches all along I just didn't know cats were so easily pleased...

By the way I appreciate you choosing to help, that's all I've ever really been asking for lol..

racist much?? and there is a wide range of handicap symptoms dude... you neve watch/seen or hear of the Specially Olympics.. Your making your self look real bad man... Real Bad.. Its not about how much time you spend on the bar... its how you execute the concept & deliver the bar.. Granted the Cabbage piece might not have been the BEST example to use, but it was first thing that sprung to mind...
CABBAGE as in mentally handicapped/Affraid... aint seen a cabbage turnip/turn up to a fight in person have ya?? cos i aint.. it was a quick ass example, an i never once said the line was Dope...

[Anonymous Poet]

Originally Posted by RiGGA

"This lame couldn't jump if he wanted to, cuz he's a broke white man!"

Blake Griffin.

NBA Slam Dunk Contest Winner.

White Man.

Peace

[Anonymous Poet]

Originally Posted by RiGGA

"This lame couldn't jump if he wanted to, cuz he's a broke white man!"

Blake Griffin.

NBA Slam Dunk Contest Winner.

White Man.

Peace

[RiGGA]

Originally Posted by Anonyme

Blake Griffin.

NBA Slam Dunk Contest Winner.

White Man.

Peace

His father is black.

Peace

[RiGGA]

Originally Posted by Anonyme

Blake Griffin.

NBA Slam Dunk Contest Winner.

White Man.

Peace

His father is black.

Peace

[Anonymous Poet]

Originally Posted by RiGGA

His father is black.

Peace

is he black himself?

Not really. So you still making racist statements

[Anonymous Poet]

Originally Posted by RiGGA

His father is black.

Peace

is he black himself?

Not really. So you still making racist statements

[RiGGA]

Originally Posted by Anonyme

is he black himself?

Not really. So you still making racist statements

Are you fucking retarded??? Yes he's black himself, the fuck?

So Obama white too huh?

[RiGGA]

Originally Posted by Anonyme

is he black himself?

Not really. So you still making racist statements

Are you fucking retarded??? Yes he's black himself, the fuck?

So Obama white too huh?

[Óðinn]

White man Cant jump?? See if you've the same 'Lace of Thoughts' when im jumpin up an down on your head....

[Óðinn]

White man Cant jump?? See if you've the same 'Lace of Thoughts' when im jumpin up an down on your head....