Ill Phenom Vs Lizman (Ill Phenom Wins Via 3-0 KO)

[Ill Phenom]

Verse and Checkin Due Today.
20-40 lines.

[Ill Phenom]

Verse and Checkin Due Today.
20-40 lines.

[Ill Phenom]

My Check in.!!

[Ill Phenom]

My Check in.!!

[IV]

That is going to hurt.

[IV]

That is going to hurt.

[Lizman]

Chiggidy Check In
4 Different Submissions By Today And I'm Gonna Make Them All

[Lizman]

Chiggidy Check In
4 Different Submissions By Today And I'm Gonna Make Them All

[Ill Phenom]

Big Ol' Guy, 300 pounds, The Boss and I earned It, No Fear I show
As they Steer the Boat, and its tossin and turnin... well here I go

1,2,3.. Slow Motion..

My knee's bend, and blubber begins to shake on this massive great bod
and the Sea Gets this Stomach that Create's a Nasa Take Off
My whole surrounding, vacationeers with their Sandals N Caps Off
Now My Hearts Pounding, Got Vacant Cheers, And some Camera Snap Shots
The Big Fat Celebrity finally getting a mention
Went a whole life without getting attention,
My Body Over the water, And I'm getting projection,
As I Look down.... Jumping, "Man I'm Wishing I Didn't"
I can feel the Air resistance from thighs to eyes
"man boobs" Flapping from side to side.
Shouldn't have said I'd do it, "Damn You, Ya Mean Girls"
Now I'm stuck putting on a show Like shamu at seaworld
Just cause I had To Impress some skinny beautiful beach babe
I couldn't accept I'm a Mess and fifty, but I Choose to Be brave
Got tired of beiing less and guinea, "Dude For Peeps Sake"
Every Time I walk My Fucking Knees Cave
Now I'm Jumping In the Ocean With Davy Jones and kraken
I'm lucky I didn't Bump In the Boat And My Lazy Bones Went Crackin.
But Instead, I'm free falling off a moving ship, Not that Cute for you
But Girl, If I die.. Then you really are drop dead beautiful
Fuck It.. It's Too Late Now. I'll Open My Arms Let the Fat Wave In The Wind
SPLASSHHH!! Like a swimming pool I broke Upon the waves again.
Cheers Ran Through the Ship and The Girl Waved At Me From the top
In Sheer Reign, And this girl, let her Bra Strap Drop
*I was Successful*
but Fear Came, AS the Boat Dipped and The Water Swirled Round My Jaw
I Began Sinking in the Abyss, Weak and Surrounded..
I guess thats it, I jumped.
And Sacrificed this fat guy, for Compliance from the people around me.!!

Keystyle. It was due tonight and I gotta to leave. One. Goodbattle liz.
and liz it doesn't matter who posts first, so you can read my verse before you post?

[Ill Phenom]

Big Ol' Guy, 300 pounds, The Boss and I earned It, No Fear I show
As they Steer the Boat, and its tossin and turnin... well here I go

1,2,3.. Slow Motion..

My knee's bend, and blubber begins to shake on this massive great bod
and the Sea Gets this Stomach that Create's a Nasa Take Off
My whole surrounding, vacationeers with their Sandals N Caps Off
Now My Hearts Pounding, Got Vacant Cheers, And some Camera Snap Shots
The Big Fat Celebrity finally getting a mention
Went a whole life without getting attention,
My Body Over the water, And I'm getting projection,
As I Look down.... Jumping, "Man I'm Wishing I Didn't"
I can feel the Air resistance from thighs to eyes
"man boobs" Flapping from side to side.
Shouldn't have said I'd do it, "Damn You, Ya Mean Girls"
Now I'm stuck putting on a show Like shamu at seaworld
Just cause I had To Impress some skinny beautiful beach babe
I couldn't accept I'm a Mess and fifty, but I Choose to Be brave
Got tired of beiing less and guinea, "Dude For Peeps Sake"
Every Time I walk My Fucking Knees Cave
Now I'm Jumping In the Ocean With Davy Jones and kraken
I'm lucky I didn't Bump In the Boat And My Lazy Bones Went Crackin.
But Instead, I'm free falling off a moving ship, Not that Cute for you
But Girl, If I die.. Then you really are drop dead beautiful
Fuck It.. It's Too Late Now. I'll Open My Arms Let the Fat Wave In The Wind
SPLASSHHH!! Like a swimming pool I broke Upon the waves again.
Cheers Ran Through the Ship and The Girl Waved At Me From the top
In Sheer Reign, And this girl, let her Bra Strap Drop
*I was Successful*
but Fear Came, AS the Boat Dipped and The Water Swirled Round My Jaw
I Began Sinking in the Abyss, Weak and Surrounded..
I guess thats it, I jumped.
And Sacrificed this fat guy, for Compliance from the people around me.!!

Keystyle. It was due tonight and I gotta to leave. One. Goodbattle liz.
and liz it doesn't matter who posts first, so you can read my verse before you post?

[Lizman]

Ugh
I Thought You Gonna Post First
Might Aswell Drop Smtn And Get The Fudge Outta Here

[Lizman]

Ugh
I Thought You Gonna Post First
Might Aswell Drop Smtn And Get The Fudge Outta Here

[Lizman]

I Got A Fly In My Ass, I'm The Flyest To Crack Jokes, Not The Lightest,
Not In The Slightest Abiding The Laws That Are Deciding My Back Stroke, Undivided, Attention To The Sees, And Reeks I Poke No Mose Es,
That Foe Just Boast The S Sense That Essentially Evanesces My Raft Boat
A Fat Bloke, I Know I Know But My Knows Smells Of Thirst To X Plode
So Therefor The Fort Is Closed For S's And Asses Of The Same Post Of Plain Smoke

The Origin Is An Old Lamp
The Orbs That Reflect The Dialect That Shines On The Prisms
The Prism That Uses Electronic Beams, The System That Fuses Electrons With Steam
The Schism That Divides, The Ism That Unites, The Vision, The Clarity, The Catalism That Sights
Sighs, He Always Wanted To Fly, Always, Always Wanted To Try,
Always Wanted To So Long It Dates Back To Childhood Dreams
Sighs, When He Was Twenty, And He Wanted To Bike, But His Parents Never Let Him, Never Let Him Try
Sighs, When He Was A Teen, Size Mattered, The Matters On Hand Unimportant But He Wasnt Allowed To Try
Three Years Beforehand He Wanted To Die, He Wanted To Know How It Feels Like,
Wanted To Try Not A Knife Into His Hand But A Jump From The Sky
When He Was A Child, He Was Caged And Locked Up, Watched Other Kids Play On The Stage While Boxed Up
Saw Other Kids Hurt In Pain When Mocked, Saw Other Kids Hurt And Maimed When Knocked, Saw Others
But He Still Wanted To Try, Just Try And See What He Became When Knocked, When Mocked, No Brothers
No Bothers, Seemingly From The Parents Viewpoints, They Had It Hard And To Make It Hard For Their Child There Was No Point
Their Baby, He Was Fed When Hungry, Never Bled And Plongy, Never Had His Rest Uncomfy
Never Had A Worry In The World, Never Had To Wory About Girl, Never Had One, Never Had The Choice
Not A Try In His Head, Having Never Tried In His Life, But Now Is His Time, Now His Time Shine
And As We Rewind Through His Life, Back To When He Was Child,
The Signs That His Drive Has Been Tried To Many Times
Tribuned And Trialed, The Dials Back In His Mind,
His Parents Died And He Cried And Now He lies Here In The Sky
Here To Try
Here To Try Or Die, The Freedom Shocks Him Before The Shock Knocks, Eyes That Watch Him But Atleast He's Not Boxed
Not Even Halfway Into Death, His Childhood Carries Out Of Vicinity Into Depths, His Psych Though Infinitely In Rest

[Lizman]

I Got A Fly In My Ass, I'm The Flyest To Crack Jokes, Not The Lightest,
Not In The Slightest Abiding The Laws That Are Deciding My Back Stroke, Undivided, Attention To The Sees, And Reeks I Poke No Mose Es,
That Foe Just Boast The S Sense That Essentially Evanesces My Raft Boat
A Fat Bloke, I Know I Know But My Knows Smells Of Thirst To X Plode
So Therefor The Fort Is Closed For S's And Asses Of The Same Post Of Plain Smoke

The Origin Is An Old Lamp
The Orbs That Reflect The Dialect That Shines On The Prisms
The Prism That Uses Electronic Beams, The System That Fuses Electrons With Steam
The Schism That Divides, The Ism That Unites, The Vision, The Clarity, The Catalism That Sights
Sighs, He Always Wanted To Fly, Always, Always Wanted To Try,
Always Wanted To So Long It Dates Back To Childhood Dreams
Sighs, When He Was Twenty, And He Wanted To Bike, But His Parents Never Let Him, Never Let Him Try
Sighs, When He Was A Teen, Size Mattered, The Matters On Hand Unimportant But He Wasnt Allowed To Try
Three Years Beforehand He Wanted To Die, He Wanted To Know How It Feels Like,
Wanted To Try Not A Knife Into His Hand But A Jump From The Sky
When He Was A Child, He Was Caged And Locked Up, Watched Other Kids Play On The Stage While Boxed Up
Saw Other Kids Hurt In Pain When Mocked, Saw Other Kids Hurt And Maimed When Knocked, Saw Others
But He Still Wanted To Try, Just Try And See What He Became When Knocked, When Mocked, No Brothers
No Bothers, Seemingly From The Parents Viewpoints, They Had It Hard And To Make It Hard For Their Child There Was No Point
Their Baby, He Was Fed When Hungry, Never Bled And Plongy, Never Had His Rest Uncomfy
Never Had A Worry In The World, Never Had To Wory About Girl, Never Had One, Never Had The Choice
Not A Try In His Head, Having Never Tried In His Life, But Now Is His Time, Now His Time Shine
And As We Rewind Through His Life, Back To When He Was Child,
The Signs That His Drive Has Been Tried To Many Times
Tribuned And Trialed, The Dials Back In His Mind,
His Parents Died And He Cried And Now He lies Here In The Sky
Here To Try
Here To Try Or Die, The Freedom Shocks Him Before The Shock Knocks, Eyes That Watch Him But Atleast He's Not Boxed
Not Even Halfway Into Death, His Childhood Carries Out Of Vicinity Into Depths, His Psych Though Infinitely In Rest

[Lizman]

Ain't Gonna Bother With The Fucking Line Parsing

[Lizman]

Ain't Gonna Bother With The Fucking Line Parsing

[Lizman]

I Just Want People To Read Your Verse Before They Read Mine

[Lizman]

I Just Want People To Read Your Verse Before They Read Mine

[Wigsplit]

Voting Rubix
Rhyming Scheme/Flow- Im gonna go with Lizman on it, both was good tho, his just seemed a lil more complex with the Rhyme scheme
Vocabulary- Lizman
Topic/Meaning- I felt that Ill Phenom related to the topic better
Storytelling/Progression- Ima give it to Ill on account his seemed to progress with the picture better
Emotion- Lizman, he edged it in the emotion, tho both was good
Imagery- Ill kept the imagery goin with the picture best, so he gets this cat
Poetic Techniques-Lizman, he was more poetic with it
Ending- Ill Phenom, considering his went with the topic more through my eyes

Overall, I felt Ill stayed on topic better and had a more enjoyable read, not takin anything away from Liz, so the...

Vote=Ill Phenom

[Wigsplit]

Voting Rubix
Rhyming Scheme/Flow- Im gonna go with Lizman on it, both was good tho, his just seemed a lil more complex with the Rhyme scheme
Vocabulary- Lizman
Topic/Meaning- I felt that Ill Phenom related to the topic better
Storytelling/Progression- Ima give it to Ill on account his seemed to progress with the picture better
Emotion- Lizman, he edged it in the emotion, tho both was good
Imagery- Ill kept the imagery goin with the picture best, so he gets this cat
Poetic Techniques-Lizman, he was more poetic with it
Ending- Ill Phenom, considering his went with the topic more through my eyes

Overall, I felt Ill stayed on topic better and had a more enjoyable read, not takin anything away from Liz, so the...

Vote=Ill Phenom