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Hello. I am JussA Mazing and simply need help with one thing.
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I will take constuctive Critisim or whatever. Just please take a lot at my verses and let me know what I can work on .
Please and thank you
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I need Help
Hello. I am JussA Mazing and simply need help with one thing.
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I will take constuctive Critisim or whatever. Just please take a lot at my verses and let me know what I can work on .
Please and thank you
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01-26-2010, 04:57 PM
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i only read your last verse, but mainly you should try and work on the delivery/swagg.. the multis are average but those will come in time, try not to force the multis and work on having relative multis to the punches.
the punches werent too clear and the delivery wasnt very smooth, with that said i think youve deff. got potential. you just cant think youre gonna be great overnight, everyone on here can always improve, id advise you to read some verses of others and pinpoint the swag they have, even if you have to swagger jack for awhile until you find youre own style.
potential for sure though homie.
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i only read your last verse, but mainly you should try and work on the delivery/swagg.. the multis are average but those will come in time, try not to force the multis and work on having relative multis to the punches.
the punches werent too clear and the delivery wasnt very smooth, with that said i think youve deff. got potential. you just cant think youre gonna be great overnight, everyone on here can always improve, id advise you to read some verses of others and pinpoint the swag they have, even if you have to swagger jack for awhile until you find youre own style.
potential for sure though homie.
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01-26-2010, 05:00 PM
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Thank famo...I will look into that...see records dont mean MUCH to me...but one day i want to be in the top 10
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Thank famo...I will look into that...see records dont mean MUCH to me...but one day i want to be in the top 10
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01-26-2010, 05:21 PM
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dude....do you have more than one battle?
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dude....do you have more than one battle?
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01-26-2010, 05:25 PM
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i got 6..lol
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i got 6..lol
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my fault...i was peeping tha audio stats....i'll peep em
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my fault...i was peeping tha audio stats....i'll peep em
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thanks...and i got four audios...but yea..you ill so give me feedback if u can
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thanks...and i got four audios...but yea..you ill so give me feedback if u can
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incredible k sucks
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no doubt...
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