Whatitdo Class??????
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Jimmy Dean™-expelled due to missing this weeks class.
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MadVerbs
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Mind Fuck
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Path-2wk suspension
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Enfinite
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EDS
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Molly
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BLNK
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InZane123
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Phoenix
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Xplissit-Checking to see when the last time he was active... pending expulsion
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SpookyDeep
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Unyqe
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FiNAL WoRD
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~SHINIGAMI~
Okay so good job with the bars for the most part fellas, we had a few people that were expelled but replacement students are in order....
Starting new with us Week 2 will be @
Dissizit @
GRizzEAT and @
Student
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WEEK ONE GRADES------
Quote:
Originally Posted by Unyqe
My divine punches produce ALE'S/L'S I KEEP EXPORTED so I stay MAILIN' THESE FOOLS MORE CLIPS, so 'wine' n my 'cantina/can 'Tina' will DAMAGE FOLKS sending the HAMMER LOW/HAM 'MERLOT' when SPILLED IT LEAVES THE FLOOR RED!!
The wordplay was real iffy in this..... the multis were also suspect.. forced at times... delivery wasnt bad but needs a lot of work.... readability isnt really bad but its not good because of the forced multis...
Teachers Advice
Okay so its deff your freshman year, My advice to you is to stick to simpler concepts, and read your stuff aloud to make sure it reads smoothly, Use simpler multis, somtimes you have to take a step back to take one forward.
Grade:
You scored 47% on this weeks test. And Failed. Use the advice I gave to get a better score next week!
Quote:
Originally Posted by InZane123
'Fuck Politics'..ya Chick's TWERKIN' HER HOLE 'WORKIN' THA POLLS', lettin' APES SPRAY SEAMEN n Fuck an 'ARGU-MENT' I'll turn ya 'PARTY RED' if you 'DeBATE ZANE'S SPEAKIN' // Ya RHYMIN'-AIN'T-HOT so if you 'WINE-N-TAKE-SHOTS' then I'll STRAIGHT A BEAT HIM! YA GUYS? THEY'LL SHOUT ABUSE 'til ya "ConFIDING 'BOUT THE BOO'S" like FINDING OUT THE TRUTH in an "A.A MEETIN'!"..
This weeks grade - 68%
- not bad, its a D but still not good enuff to graduate from the freshman class. Use my tips for next week to move forward! I like what im seeing so far tho.
Teachers Advice
Dont cap all the multis, the reader will pick up on it , this will help for a smoother flow until you master them. The inner multis I wouldnt cap. Also, when you get time read some of the better textcees verses, or better yet, since youre an audio head ... watch this guy named, Heartless , on youtube, he is very creative.
Quote:
Originally Posted by Phoenix
I'll 'intoxicate your mind' n take over I'm the MESSIAH,SCARY DWELLER 'reprobate you outta society' you a PARIAH, WARY FELLER punches make his 'brain mellow' dna over the place leave u a slain fellow n make ur soul 'spirits of wine' like MARIAH CAREY CELLAR
Grade - 41%
Teachers Advice
Work on not forcing the multis, if it doesnt read smooth to you, then cross it out, try to stay on topic with the topic the entire bar, dont have soo much space between multi and multi.
Quote:
Originally Posted by EDS
Like heads or a "beer?" I "STILL CRACK OPEN" KILL RAP NOISES, cause if its snakes in the grass?you "STILL LACK POISON!" bite a rap? You DRILL BACK FOAMIN, for that bread you need, sober up. Get shot. Too REAL? BLACK...TOASTED! Try n STEAL THAT FLOW ISH? you can beg when I grab your leg. Pertend it's a keg, my MEALS TAPPED FLOWING.
Grade- 48%
Teachers Advice
work on not forcing the multis... read it aloud... lose some of the designs... good job staying on topic... try not to force a concept. READ IT ALOUD.
Quote:
Originally Posted by FiNAL WoRD
ud 'do anything for a high'', one day you'll Drown-in-vomit so stop n think, u aint never workin shit aint 'Never earned a chip', he aint never bin Proud at all his accomplishments? nahh! hes always 'lookin for sympathy in the bars' that he Drown all his sob Sorrows in..but my shots are piff, its like a Mouth of chronic/a shot of criss with a remaining ounce of pot pitched after you down a shot wit vodka its!, gottem 'throwin back at random' now hes 'In need of help'...alcoholics anonymous
Grade-68% + 5pts extra credit... 73%
Teachers Advice
Work on structure, so that it reads smoother if you plan to not cap your multis... Try to use longer multi sets, up the creativity of the punches, also try to fix the delivery to maximize the impact of the punch.
MindFuck
A -shot? What you WANT W/ FUCK?? Thought that you was weiser cause your BUZZING BUD.. guess I'll show you WHAT IS UP when showing you your 'too titty' to duke wit me bringing new meaning to DOUBLE CUPPED//
Grade-77% - GREAT JOB! ONE MORE SCORE OVER 75 PERCENT AND YOU GRADUATE FROM THE FRESHMAN CLASS!
Teachers Advice
Use longer multi sets, try to incorporate more of an audio flow with the inner multis, up the creativity, also work on the delivery, knowing when and where to place multis to make them hit harder.
Molly:
This clown needs to 'chill-out'! like SKIING ATTIRE.. just FLEXXIN like he's MEAN and does more 'IMPRESSIONS in the RING' than a C.Z. DeSIGNER/ His 8 line battles? the READING IS FIRE.. for HALF THE DROP, THEN GETS WEAK! so if he 'HAS A SHOT, w/ SIX-TEENS' he was DRINKING WITH MINORS!!!/
Cz is cubic zirconia btw..
Grade-77%- Great job! one more week over 75% and you will advance into sophomore status!
Teachers Advice
What took away from your punch score was the fact it didnt relate to the entire bar..... thats what hurt your score here... multis were good, add a little more of an audio feel to them and you will be right there.... Keep the entire bar on point!
Quote:
Originally Posted by BLNK
He's trying to "Kick It" but hasn't mastered the hand motions, that means he won't keep those "Two Arms Together" if he were acting out hand holding. Homie's a queer, he'll start showing his fear... Backing down, then bolting. So if he don't wanna "Be 'Ere" then I'm 'Cracking The Can Open.'(Beer.)
[Additional Tips]: Be more concise. I know you like to use correct grammar and all that... but get your points across a little sooner in the bar. Also, NEVER force wordplay... you usually excel in that department, but "Be 'Ere" was wack. Straight up. Also, take a little more time on your internal schemes.. don't just add them to add them.
[GRADE]: 62%
Quote:
Originally Posted by Path
Im tired of hearing these PRICKS ARE HOT, so i'll GRIP THA LOT ... CLIPS AH' LOCKED, n it dont matter if ur QUICK AH’ NOT, cuz when I PICK THA SHOT, We’ll c em 'go down faster' than an Italian LIQUOR SPOT (Italian lick her spot)
[Additional Tips]: Put more thought into your schemes. Your flow is on point, but the actual rhyming words were very weak. Also, avoid empty disses like "prick" in your schemes because they're regarded as filler. Read your wordplay aloud after you write it and make sure it reads correctly for both meanings, not just one.
[GRADE]: 55%
Quote:
Originally Posted by ~SHINIGAMI~
I keep my "Bars Open" for any ballers willin' to TAKE THE SHOTS, and guaranteed the "heat sensation" that'll leave these rookies with a bitter face as if they TASTED SCOTCH! I FOLD-CATS for everything I bring is COKE-JACK. see how you clowns be TALKIN' TOO SOON cuz if this PRO-SNAP/SCHNAPP the "Punch" will give ya a "WALK ON THE MOON"
[Additional Tips]: Be careful with what you put in quotations.. people expect wordplay to be in quotes, and when it isn't it takes a lot of focus off of your bar. Also, make sure you know your voice when you're writing (or spitting). What I mean by that is... if you want to use slang like "clowns be talkin" then write your whole verse with that voice.. switching mid bar and speaking properly looks weird.
[GRADE]: 55%
Quote:
Originally Posted by MadVerbs
Ayo, you claim that you can ''Handle Your Own'' ..then it should take LOTS TO DROP YA so why are you always that ''Drunk Bitch Under The Table'' from a few SHOTS OF VODKA!?
If you think that you'll WIN YOU'RE DUMB & stop talking money because you've BEEN A BUM & with ''Shots I'll Leave You Lit'' ..you're not drinking GIN OR RUM!
[Additional Tips]: Don't use the first punch that comes to mind because it usually won't be as good as the next one(s) you think of. Also, keep wordplay in quotes and everything else out of them.
[GRADE]: 45%
Quote:
Originally Posted by Enfinite
Your "bars were weak off the launch" and NEVA LANDED, you'll drop like HARD LIQUOR when "Shots drop" from bad "BAR" TENDERS, face it, a simple "90 degree flip of the wrist" won't make this battle LEVEL HANDED!!!
[Additional Tips]: Work on the structure of your bars. Like I said, when your scheme starts in one bar and isn't seen until the next one, with nothing to connect them, you will lose the reader. Also, try not to use the same word twice in a bar (or in a verse for that matter). There are tons of words to choose from... don't pigeon-hole yourself.
[GRADE]: 36%
Two students stood out this week in @
Mind Fuck and @
Molly both scoring over 75% ... one more week of this and they will graduate from the
Freshman Class!
Week 2's concept will be up shortly...... Goodluck to our newest students.... and lets keep elevating.
The Teach,
Rupt
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