Lets Be Real!!!!!

[Q]

Break down of some bars of my battle with GRizzEAT. Just wondering how his bars beat mine??…..Lets Be Real!!!!

This is EASY, LORD.. Im Already 'Eatin Good, Fella' But FEED ME MORE!! & After ma rap we wudn see "Soul come bak" offa WIGI BOARD!!
^your open was your only good line!

My opening line has more content, better concept consistency.
Fam MY WRITING EXCELLENT “Lyrical Tactics” with Mah TYPE’A INTELLIGENTS “Verses’ Starts Off” LIKE ARMY ADVANCEMENTS Where as your opens dont “Deploy Successfully” like SKY DIVING ACCIDENTS!!!!…


32?? Then Imma FLARE UP ON YOU, TRICK.. Im CLaSSicK, Mainly cause Ive said ma SHARE OF FORMAL SCRIPTS.. Me a Biter-What? I'll leave u & ya "Ghost Writer, Fuked"... LMMFAO @ Yall "PAIR AH NORMAL PRICKS"<--Spooky'ish!!//
^After his opener: I never said you were a biter in my verse, not once, so you build up is false & the punch? Terrible wordplay & nothing creative @ all..

After my opener:
If MAGS GET LIFTED QUICKLY MAYNE my “Thirsty Finger Leave this Soft Pops” ‘CAP TWISTED’ & ‘BODY DRAINED’/ See Cores a MAD BASTERD WHEN SHOTTYS AIMED that’ll put this “Infants Ass’ thru ‘Shit Days ” like reLIVIN’ BEIN’ POTTY TRAINED!!!!…


Boi ukno u cant PUNCH WITH THA GRIZZLE.. "Rip ya pack" w/o a HUNCH THAT UR BRITTLE.. Cause I 'Flex arms', till "Cores, tuned up" & left "CHRUNCHED IN THA MIDDLE"!!
^First your arms are by your sides, second, flexing your arms doesn’t exercise your core/stomach/abs, so another bad punch!

Then his:
U ah 'Fukin Fella, Huh?'.. Mr. You DID WHAT W/ THEM GAYS? Damn sho ain "CLIP PUMP WITH THA GAGE" Cause gainst Griz that'll "Work out Deadly" enuff make'em 'SIT UP, IN HIS GRAVE' <-- Sweat'n yet?//
^Like the one before it & weak as fuck!!..

Mine:
When yah “Lose, To Sooth The Pain” I’d SUGGEST INTOXICATION but this ’Bums’ got a “Homeless Attitude” he’d never ‘ADDRESS’ THE SITUATION that his “Small Dick” couldn’t IMPRESS A HORNY ASIAN after “10yrs Of abstinence” & EAGER FOR PENETRATION!!!!…
^This is way more complex/creative & is a harder punch….

His Next:
Faggot walkin around in a LACY GAY BLONDE SKIRT, Tryna TRACE THA WAY RHYMES WORKS.. Cause yall know Grizz ah make 'Soul Rock' Like a MACY GREY CONCERT!!
^Nothing hard hitting @ all here..

My Next:
He’s no threat he’s an “Elephants Worst Nightmare” a MOUSE FULL OF HATE Think he got “Clean Manners/Manors?” Please.. His HOUSIN’/HOUSE-IN ESTATE/A-STATE!!!!…
^Creative wordplay here.

His Next:
& You BOAST BEST BUT TRUTH IS, u got a "Weak flo" & u WONT TEST THA ROOF, BITCH.. WANT EXTRA PROOF.. SHIIIT, Its a 'Real Wrap'. They asked who's Grizzy on LB?? He Replied "MOS DEF THA ROOTS"<-- True Artist//
^Other than saying an Artists name, whats hard about this? Seriously?

My Next:
Guns? You “To Young To Touch” like a CHILDISH‘CUNT’ so if yah start ‘Fuckin with Me? Things’ll “Go Horribly Wrong” like VIOLENT ‘STUNTS’/ Thinks cos he smokes “Bush Weed” he got ‘WILDISH’ BLUNTS that helps with his SAVAGE PUNS!?! Please your Rhymes are like gays reading a wine list “Soft Fruity Twist” with a MILDISH PUNCH!!!!…
^Punch for Punch, this was better!

His Next:
'Goin Nutty'?? CHEK THA SCRODEM..Nigga u ain Clappin Lead. I got Guns "Stackin Heads".. TEKS? I "TOTEM" But rappin.. He'll "Fold after that flop".. Cause ma TEXTS HOLD'EM!!
^Concept was good but wasn’t fully worked out & so therefore was a weak punch!

My Next:
If I see him CRUSIN’ AT NGIHT “He’ll Hit The Ground, Wheelchair Bound” ‘ROLLIN’ FOR LIFE/ See Cores the IMPLOSIVE TYPE “Tension Builds” an GROWS OVER TIME till I “Snap & Be Like Construction Deliverys“…‘UNLOAD ON SIGHT’!!!!…
^First Off, Implosive means to explode on the inside, & in a mental health way, were a person snaps, flips out (for the dumb comment on the battle).. This is a better punch yet again!

His Next:
This KID STILL IN CHARGE?? Stop it, He ain got PIFF SKILL IN BARS.. I'll have tha lil BITCH PEELIN SCARS cause we all know this hoe wudn "Throw hands in" even in a case of 'MIS-DEALIN CARDS'<-- So on Deck//
^Concept was ok-ish, but nothing to strong here!

My Next:
You couldn’t get “Minded/Mind-Did” by A BABYSITTIN’ SURGEON FAM/ so when you “Start Talkin’ no one Minds You” like A BAD PARENTS ATTENTION SPAN!!!!…


His Closer:
Naw, *Wayne Swag* Im sooo Goon'd in this bitch.. Better yet Im MORE OF A GOBLIN.. Rockin? Guns stay POURIN & POPPIN... "Bottom line" u shudn "Kick it w/ a Thug" that'll "Nip it in tha Bud" can get to tha 'CORE OF THA PROBLEM'//.. ImCLaSSicK.
^Nip it in the Bud can get to tha CORE OF THA PROBLEM??…. Oooookkkkkaaaayyyyy…

My Closer:
My Punchlines? only THERE FOR ONE REASON like “Selfish Boyfriends & Virgins” I don’t CARE IF IM HURTIN’ cos WE’RE STILL PROCEEDIN’!!!!… If he was a “Shampoo Model?” it’d be FOR HAIR THAT’S WORTHLESS & IM FAIRLY CERTAIN ya never see em’ make sense like “Blind People” fighting over A PAIR OF CURTAINS!!!!…
^Its better than his, End of!!

[Q]

Break down of some bars of my battle with GRizzEAT. Just wondering how his bars beat mine??…..Lets Be Real!!!!

This is EASY, LORD.. Im Already 'Eatin Good, Fella' But FEED ME MORE!! & After ma rap we wudn see "Soul come bak" offa WIGI BOARD!!
^your open was your only good line!

My opening line has more content, better concept consistency.
Fam MY WRITING EXCELLENT “Lyrical Tactics” with Mah TYPE’A INTELLIGENTS “Verses’ Starts Off” LIKE ARMY ADVANCEMENTS Where as your opens dont “Deploy Successfully” like SKY DIVING ACCIDENTS!!!!…


32?? Then Imma FLARE UP ON YOU, TRICK.. Im CLaSSicK, Mainly cause Ive said ma SHARE OF FORMAL SCRIPTS.. Me a Biter-What? I'll leave u & ya "Ghost Writer, Fuked"... LMMFAO @ Yall "PAIR AH NORMAL PRICKS"<--Spooky'ish!!//
^After his opener: I never said you were a biter in my verse, not once, so you build up is false & the punch? Terrible wordplay & nothing creative @ all..

After my opener:
If MAGS GET LIFTED QUICKLY MAYNE my “Thirsty Finger Leave this Soft Pops” ‘CAP TWISTED’ & ‘BODY DRAINED’/ See Cores a MAD BASTERD WHEN SHOTTYS AIMED that’ll put this “Infants Ass’ thru ‘Shit Days ” like reLIVIN’ BEIN’ POTTY TRAINED!!!!…


Boi ukno u cant PUNCH WITH THA GRIZZLE.. "Rip ya pack" w/o a HUNCH THAT UR BRITTLE.. Cause I 'Flex arms', till "Cores, tuned up" & left "CHRUNCHED IN THA MIDDLE"!!
^First your arms are by your sides, second, flexing your arms doesn’t exercise your core/stomach/abs, so another bad punch!

Then his:
U ah 'Fukin Fella, Huh?'.. Mr. You DID WHAT W/ THEM GAYS? Damn sho ain "CLIP PUMP WITH THA GAGE" Cause gainst Griz that'll "Work out Deadly" enuff make'em 'SIT UP, IN HIS GRAVE' <-- Sweat'n yet?//
^Like the one before it & weak as fuck!!..

Mine:
When yah “Lose, To Sooth The Pain” I’d SUGGEST INTOXICATION but this ’Bums’ got a “Homeless Attitude” he’d never ‘ADDRESS’ THE SITUATION that his “Small Dick” couldn’t IMPRESS A HORNY ASIAN after “10yrs Of abstinence” & EAGER FOR PENETRATION!!!!…
^This is way more complex/creative & is a harder punch….

His Next:
Faggot walkin around in a LACY GAY BLONDE SKIRT, Tryna TRACE THA WAY RHYMES WORKS.. Cause yall know Grizz ah make 'Soul Rock' Like a MACY GREY CONCERT!!
^Nothing hard hitting @ all here..

My Next:
He’s no threat he’s an “Elephants Worst Nightmare” a MOUSE FULL OF HATE Think he got “Clean Manners/Manors?” Please.. His HOUSIN’/HOUSE-IN ESTATE/A-STATE!!!!…
^Creative wordplay here.

His Next:
& You BOAST BEST BUT TRUTH IS, u got a "Weak flo" & u WONT TEST THA ROOF, BITCH.. WANT EXTRA PROOF.. SHIIIT, Its a 'Real Wrap'. They asked who's Grizzy on LB?? He Replied "MOS DEF THA ROOTS"<-- True Artist//
^Other than saying an Artists name, whats hard about this? Seriously?

My Next:
Guns? You “To Young To Touch” like a CHILDISH‘CUNT’ so if yah start ‘Fuckin with Me? Things’ll “Go Horribly Wrong” like VIOLENT ‘STUNTS’/ Thinks cos he smokes “Bush Weed” he got ‘WILDISH’ BLUNTS that helps with his SAVAGE PUNS!?! Please your Rhymes are like gays reading a wine list “Soft Fruity Twist” with a MILDISH PUNCH!!!!…
^Punch for Punch, this was better!

His Next:
'Goin Nutty'?? CHEK THA SCRODEM..Nigga u ain Clappin Lead. I got Guns "Stackin Heads".. TEKS? I "TOTEM" But rappin.. He'll "Fold after that flop".. Cause ma TEXTS HOLD'EM!!
^Concept was good but wasn’t fully worked out & so therefore was a weak punch!

My Next:
If I see him CRUSIN’ AT NGIHT “He’ll Hit The Ground, Wheelchair Bound” ‘ROLLIN’ FOR LIFE/ See Cores the IMPLOSIVE TYPE “Tension Builds” an GROWS OVER TIME till I “Snap & Be Like Construction Deliverys“…‘UNLOAD ON SIGHT’!!!!…
^First Off, Implosive means to explode on the inside, & in a mental health way, were a person snaps, flips out (for the dumb comment on the battle).. This is a better punch yet again!

His Next:
This KID STILL IN CHARGE?? Stop it, He ain got PIFF SKILL IN BARS.. I'll have tha lil BITCH PEELIN SCARS cause we all know this hoe wudn "Throw hands in" even in a case of 'MIS-DEALIN CARDS'<-- So on Deck//
^Concept was ok-ish, but nothing to strong here!

My Next:
You couldn’t get “Minded/Mind-Did” by A BABYSITTIN’ SURGEON FAM/ so when you “Start Talkin’ no one Minds You” like A BAD PARENTS ATTENTION SPAN!!!!…


His Closer:
Naw, *Wayne Swag* Im sooo Goon'd in this bitch.. Better yet Im MORE OF A GOBLIN.. Rockin? Guns stay POURIN & POPPIN... "Bottom line" u shudn "Kick it w/ a Thug" that'll "Nip it in tha Bud" can get to tha 'CORE OF THA PROBLEM'//.. ImCLaSSicK.
^Nip it in the Bud can get to tha CORE OF THA PROBLEM??…. Oooookkkkkaaaayyyyy…

My Closer:
My Punchlines? only THERE FOR ONE REASON like “Selfish Boyfriends & Virgins” I don’t CARE IF IM HURTIN’ cos WE’RE STILL PROCEEDIN’!!!!… If he was a “Shampoo Model?” it’d be FOR HAIR THAT’S WORTHLESS & IM FAIRLY CERTAIN ya never see em’ make sense like “Blind People” fighting over A PAIR OF CURTAINS!!!!…
^Its better than his, End of!!

[Arize]

wow.....

~opens mouth~...

fxcking dope verses... esp TW....

[Arize]

wow.....

~opens mouth~...

fxcking dope verses... esp TW....

[Lizman]

Okay
Your Mouth Is Open
What Now?

I Don't Understand Your Internet Slang Rude...Eh Dude

Originally Posted by JusT-C

^ Broken syllable count and closer doesnt rhyme. and that's just for a kick off

Didn't want to read the rest. I aint up to it right now.

Also If You Would've Fused "opens" With A Golf Metaphor It Wouldv'e Been Better

[Lizman]

Okay
Your Mouth Is Open
What Now?

I Don't Understand Your Internet Slang Rude...Eh Dude

Originally Posted by JusT-C

^ Broken syllable count and closer doesnt rhyme. and that's just for a kick off

Didn't want to read the rest. I aint up to it right now.

Also If You Would've Fused "opens" With A Golf Metaphor It Wouldv'e Been Better

[Q]

TW??....

[Q]

TW??....

[Just C]

Originally Posted by CoRe sOuL

Break down of some bars of my battle with GRizzEAT. Just wondering how his bars beat mine??…..Lets Be Real!!!!

This is EASY, LORD.. Im Already 'Eatin Good, Fella' But FEED ME MORE!! & After ma rap we wudn see "Soul come bak" offa WIGI BOARD!!
^your open was your only good line!

My opening line has more content, better concept consistency.
Fam MY WRITING EXCELLENT “Lyrical Tactics” with Mah TYPE’A INTELLIGENTS “Verses’ Starts Off” LIKE ARMY ADVANCEMENTS Where as your opens dont “Deploy Successfully” like SKY DIVING ACCIDENTS!!!!…

^ Broken syllable count and closer doesnt rhyme. and that's just for a kick off

Didn't want to read the rest. I aint up to it right now.

[Just C]

Originally Posted by CoRe sOuL

Break down of some bars of my battle with GRizzEAT. Just wondering how his bars beat mine??…..Lets Be Real!!!!

This is EASY, LORD.. Im Already 'Eatin Good, Fella' But FEED ME MORE!! & After ma rap we wudn see "Soul come bak" offa WIGI BOARD!!
^your open was your only good line!

My opening line has more content, better concept consistency.
Fam MY WRITING EXCELLENT “Lyrical Tactics” with Mah TYPE’A INTELLIGENTS “Verses’ Starts Off” LIKE ARMY ADVANCEMENTS Where as your opens dont “Deploy Successfully” like SKY DIVING ACCIDENTS!!!!…

^ Broken syllable count and closer doesnt rhyme. and that's just for a kick off

Didn't want to read the rest. I aint up to it right now.

[Q]

My syllables aint broken..

[Q]

My syllables aint broken..

[Catharsis]

TBH his flow was better...maybe it's an accent thing but a lot of your multi's are mismatched ex. 'child-ish' 'wildish' 'violent' 'mild-ish' okay but 'savage'? so cabbage and violent rhyme? cuz' cabbage and savage rhyme..... but thats off topic. His swag is better and his set ups were more effective. That's why he won IMO....but that's just my opinion. Obviously you feel differently lol.

[Catharsis]

TBH his flow was better...maybe it's an accent thing but a lot of your multi's are mismatched ex. 'child-ish' 'wildish' 'violent' 'mild-ish' okay but 'savage'? so cabbage and violent rhyme? cuz' cabbage and savage rhyme..... but thats off topic. His swag is better and his set ups were more effective. That's why he won IMO....but that's just my opinion. Obviously you feel differently lol.

[Just C]

They are broken. and ARMY doesnt rhyme with DIVING and ADVANCEMENTS doesn't rhyme with ACCIDENTS..

and Lizman fuck off posting bullshit. deleting ya posts to keep this on topic. He wants feedback. not your bullshit gibberish

[Just C]

They are broken. and ARMY doesnt rhyme with DIVING and ADVANCEMENTS doesn't rhyme with ACCIDENTS..

and Lizman fuck off posting bullshit. deleting ya posts to keep this on topic. He wants feedback. not your bullshit gibberish

[Q]

Heard of Slant Rhyming Before??

[Q]

Heard of Slant Rhyming Before??

[Just C]

Originally Posted by CoRe sOuL

Heard of Slant Rhyming Before??

There is a difference between slant rhyming and not rhyming at all. I been doing this long enough to know when something rhymes. That what I mentioned in my previous post didn't rhyme at all. atleast not to me it didn't. where are you from? It might help explain the problem.

[Just C]

Originally Posted by CoRe sOuL

Heard of Slant Rhyming Before??

There is a difference between slant rhyming and not rhyming at all. I been doing this long enough to know when something rhymes. That what I mentioned in my previous post didn't rhyme at all. atleast not to me it didn't. where are you from? It might help explain the problem.