Your structure and flow is decent. When doing Wordplay make sure it's something clever and not forced or played. I'd also say some harder hitting punches, you have punches, just a lot of them have been used or weren't set up to their full impact.

Appreciated

thanks fam , u iight u iiight

(but yo - non beef related - how do i get an avatar? Nothing will upload off google images )

i messed up his name on purpose to show not even eminem is untouchable , shown thru my verse you would understand that if you coulda dissected it better , again my lyrics go over peoples heads so have fun with your pity votes

dude i know who mathers is and i never said u was better i said i'll get at u when i get better but i forgot i'm already near my prime so we'll see whats good , and yeah i'm a post this battle on another site and see what the niggas say cuz only G's vote for me , u got the pussy feel bad votes ,

Forsure bro!

eminem fucker , dude fuck off fuckboi i'mm a murder u when i get better

yeah bro forsure! whens it start? i got like 3 touney on the go :P

Appreciate that, thanks fella. It's clever isn't it how much meaning you can inject into so few words. Lookin forward to reading everybody's.

Alright Faze? You'll have seen I put in my Haiku - good luck, when u putting yours in?

your a fuck head asking for voters to vote for u , i see u dog, pussy

fine fuckboi i'm a fuck u mom

no u send for 8 man, i ain't wasting 16 golden bars til u prove youself homeboy

Cuz all these noobs you beating, is miles away from my level...if you even think I try on this shit, you mistaken...it's a web site...and I don't waste my "Finishing moves" on noobs....you have no clue the shit I got and will come with...please, send me bars. I'll take that flame.

lmao, so I'm seeing ya let ya balls drop now and gettin' a lil Mad, tell you what....why don't you and Ateterlon sign up for the Tag Team Tourney, put your money where your mouth is...then we'll see what's good.

lol yeah bro been strung out for hours lol. and yes please!

CantFayzMe
Stick the shit talk into your bars and you wouldn't be able to tell the difference <<<< Um, Dude...That's the point of battle rapping. To talk shit about people within your bars....what is your point here?

Hey bro whats good? I just stopped partying today lol. its been a long couple nights. and it wont let ,e post in the forums. so can you get the names so i can start the brackets?