Better!
I'll keep an eye on your battles to see how you improving. I'm nowhere near perfect but check mine out and see some of the other Turnbull ACs. Phenomomon is good too. I like Ateleron's bars because they're pretty unique in their style. Find what suits you and run with it. Experiment with some Cyphers too - not about battling but just play with rhymes and ideas.

sun in the SPACE, gun to his face, gum in his brac, you run on the chase cause your moms a disgrace,

Gun in his face worked - thats the one I was hoping you'd get. The ones after that - if you look at what you put - didn't rhyme the whole thing, they just rhymed the last word. For it to be a 'multi' (which is a multi-syllable rhyme) you gotta have all the words in your phrase rhymin.

Sun in his SPACe gum in his BRACE gun to his FACE to kill you without a TRACE to turn this battle into a murder CASE oyu better get the bear MASE im on the visious animal INTERFACE

thanks for the tips ill start my homework right now

Oh another thing that helped me when I started - come up with a theme and then build ideas from that. EG if theme was war, you can pic some words out from that - soldier, combat, militia, gunfire etc. Then use those words as part of your rhymes - 'Put a BLADE IN his back, I ABORT ILL WOMBATS I am RAIDEN you're wack in this MORTAL KOMBAT

Hi X - good tip would be to try and hget in the habit of CAPITALISING YOUR RHYMES. This makes it easier for ppl reading it to understand what you're trying to do. Also, a good bit of advice would be to take time on your verses - don't just churn them out. Maybe a good starting point is to take a phrase and come up with as many multis as you can. EG the phrase ... 'Sun in his Space'. So as homework - haha - make a list of 5 phrases which rhyme with sun in the space. FIIRST ONE FOR YOU - 1) Gum in his brace.

such sick lyrics man, help me out just starting out we battled earlier today i think you killed me any pointers or tips you could give me?