thats good...but check it..even if they sound identical, you gotta remember, both meanings have to sound smooth...the problem is more that 'bow talks' isnt a natural phrase....wordplay is tough lol

hmm i guess, maybe its an accent thing too, cuz wen i say them out aloud, i know they not 100% the same but they 90% the same. but yea, ill take that onboard, im all for positive criticism.

the one that sticks out to me was the 'botox/bow talks' line...they dont sound that much alike, and bow talks isnt that smooth of a wordplay...my wordplay used to be HORRID lol

appreciate the feedback bro, just curious, which bits did u think didnt make sense?