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Dope cypher. Straight to the point. Creative af. Wordplay was there. I really enjoyed the wordplay such as you saying "the" and "your". Definitely some fire wordplay right there that I haven't seen before. The metaphors were deep like when you said "no cap" you also meant the cap that Leo wore when he graduated but also you probably meant like student never graduated from high school. And no cap like phroxen but you mean no cap cuz he's no phroxen. You also mean no cap like no cap on a pen cuz his writtens are dried out. You also meant no lie. I gotcha. You said student crashed the site so you're saying he's a bad driver. Women are bad drivers and I think students emcee might still be a women so you're talking about his emcee being a bitch and that's why you capped the b in Bitch. Dope personal. You said student should've passed the buck, meaning he doesn't give any money to the homeless, which means he hates the homeless cuz he's greedy which means student is HuNgReeDy. No shit. You really are creative. Now I see what others see. Gb fv noh8 kys vbf. We can't rate on cyphers but I give it a 9.7 and a half
Posted on: 2023-10-19 23:05:19
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Not Bad. Obviously I'm the topic but I'll still give you some real feedback, looking at you Polly 😂, your connections were there but overall your lines were too s t r e c h e d out, you're losing people in the setup rather then surprising them with the punchline, I'm actually guilty of this so I see it clearly. Work on those and you'll be successful, you can keep your style but ultimately it's an economy of words issue, it makes reading your verses feel like run on sentences. You fell off after the fleet bar but up until there it was pretty consistent. 6/10 Overall, could've filled the box or cut it down to an 8
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2023-10-20 17:06:21
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