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Posted on: 2008-07-09 22:38:45

Alright homie. You had some good concepts in there but you really needed to develop them a little bit more and that would've increased the quality of the piece. Especially for a diss verse, make sure that you write it just like a battle verse in terms of including creative metaphors, similies, and wordplay to setup clever punches and disses. Also, your rhyme scheme was a little difficult to follow so make sure you tighten that up a bit and get more internals and other rhymes in there so that your rhyme scheme really stands out and the flow moves along smoothly. Just some friendly advice to help you out bro. Feel free to hit me up any time you need some tips or advice. 1 ~LD
Rated: 8

Posted on: 2008-07-09 23:43:27

Co Sign Sparta.But imma give cyphers 10 lool
Rated: 10

Posted on: 2008-07-10 03:00:41

hot drop blud ill give it a 9 man keep it up
Rated: 9

Posted on: 2008-07-10 11:47:43

hot one famo 8's
Rated: 8

Posted on: 2008-07-10 15:26:43

i give it 8's...nd instead of drawing out a long explanation...ima jus say i co-sign on what sparta said...good concepts, jus need development
Rated: 8

Posted on: 2008-07-11 15:27:29

Hot drop. 10
Rated: 10

Posted on: 2008-07-14 09:13:52

hot
Rated: 9

Posted on: 2008-07-17 08:56:00

agree with Sparta. no hate.
Rated: 8

Posted on: 2008-07-22 01:30:11

hate vote wright back
Rated: 1

Posted on: 2008-07-28 22:38:06

good drop fam but kinda like sparta said tighten ur lines up a lil bit and some punches to the mix and edge up ur rhym schem and here check out this cypher tell me wht u thin thanxxx http://www.letsbeef. com/cypher_details.p hp?section=tb&id=263 64
Rated: 6

Posted on: 2008-08-04 08:07:15

nice drop
Rated: 8

Posted on: 2008-08-13 17:15:08