yeezus you gotta cap your multis and rhyming with just one syllable is considered too elementary here, Bnas gets this one easy for staying more relevant diss and structure wise both with really pretty impressive punches here and there good stuff man.

dont take my raps seriously theyre an empirical vanerial disease fueled by a near stimulant od a bag of kush and no sleep. i was dicking around, clown - ill still suck the life out your penis like its halloween on charlie brown and stick my left nut in each one of your eyelids to spread the syphales you'll soon die with you gallow queen lookin gutter mound.

LMFAOOO !!!!!!!!

Slim, I ain’t know where to start. First off you didn’t need have multi’s so you lose any credibility you would have had, even if you had any punchlines. Secondly, your format makes it really hard to understand, as the first period in your verse was 3 lines from the top, and not even because you had a long set up, but because you have a rant. Third, even if you did have multi’s, you didn’t cap ‘em. Since you didn’t cap ‘em, it’s  not my fault for not seeing them. Fourth, you had disses, not punchlines. With the aforementioned, I can’t give you a rating higher than 2, as you didn’t even attempt a punchline, you had no multi’s or rhyme caps, and you formatted it horribly. I gave you a point for filling the box and having actual legible rhymes.

Bnas, you sniped another poor soul. You had multi’s, punchlines, and attempts at wordplay and metaphors. However, said attempts didn’t make any sense, as nothing connected together. Due to the fact that none of the shit you said hit hard, and none of your shit connected, I can’t give a mark above 5, as there was nothing extraordinary. 

Appreciate the effort, and good luck to both of you.