THERE YA GO YA GOT YA WISH, A CHALLENGE FROM A MOD LOL..... GOOD LUCK DUDE.

how you gonna challange wit a blind drop..wtf come on u trolling!!  lmaoooo

Tbh dude a challenge from a mod ain't that big of a challenge, don't suck yourself off by saying that ._.

Winner won this by having multi’s, properly set-up punchlines and not dissing themself. HVK had some really good lines, especially in the latter half of his verse, loved the firin society and the resident evil lines. He also had multi’s, which were complete and not broken. His set-ups related to his punches, and all around brought a really good verse. Felt a lot of the content in the beginning was a tad filler though. Savage had the opposite of the aforementioned things. He didn’t have multi’s, set-ups that connected to punches, misspelled everything, had really shoddy rhyming, and having the worst thing a battle verse can possibly have, which is a self diss (He states “I give a fuck about they obsolete opinions). His verse was all self hype as well, with not a single line aimed at his opponent.

HVK was clearly ahead on multies, punches, flow, concepts and execution.

savagesocietygunna you've clearly got a good grasp of the basic elements of battling, but in order to elevate to a winning level you need to work on two things: multies and punches. Multies is making sure every line has at least one chunk of several syllables as a rhyme (see HVK's verse for an example of what this looks like). Capitalise these to make them stand out more for voters. Your opening line was very well-constructed as far as its flow and rhyming, but try to have more complex rhymes. "Murder scene/emergency" in the final line was good, but then following it up with "murder spree" kind of let the scheme down because its rhyming "murder" twice.

HVK, you haven't battled since I've been on LB before now so I wasn't sure what to expect, but this was pretty dope, especially considering the battle it was made for. The first few lines I was like "eh, this is basically just word association, reads like its very dated" but then the punch came and it caught me totally off-guard but was excellent. Your multies all worked very cleanly, your punches were all reasonably solid and consistent, I'm struggling to give you feedback. There wasn't really a haymaker punch that will stay with me (although your opener was botb) but you didn't really need to expend one here. You really had three punches here; the first and third were both built up to over the whole punch, but the set-up for the middle one (the Danaerys one) seemed very rushed right at the end whereas the two lines of set-up were unrelated and kind of filler, I guess the punch just could have landed harder if you'd built it up over all the lines instead of just right at the end.

that Randy Savage, umbrella bit had me LMAOin not sure i understood the deneary part of the verse as for the rest of the verse i think u already know yet it was more than sufficient for this battle wherein savage was much better with his end rhymes in fact could be his best so far, i think it's time you focus on punchlines instead of the self hype along with capped end rhymes now ur ready for that next step.

Winner delivered a potent verse with solid multis and flow along with decent punches to snatch the W here. Loser here just didnt deliver any note worthy lines to make this a contest all i can say is keep elevating. But the win clearly goes to HVK here

im so lost!!!  wtf is he even talkin about nuffin he said even flowed rythems or ???? its ok .. multis? thank4 the feed back!!  but its a different between dickeating the mods n fair voting!..im post this on a cuople sites to see real reactions ..#!oo ill post comments!

Eh I've seen waay better from HVK but it isn't like you needed to go hard against Savage sorry fam but you got cooked and he didn't even try and thats no hate

Learn from ya losses take the advice of vets elevated Dont bitch about a L fam anyways mvgt HVK

ya hvk "umbrella" bar fpr resident evil, loved the wordplay ya i like that...hvk went harder delivered solif punches here m there ...n good !ultis. savage could use some improvement....but ya cap next time fv.

Clear winner here. Im what is known as a "GENUINE ARTIST" so when i give feedback you can bet it as fair and real as you'll find anywhere let alone this site. Nice drop HVK some old concepts but they were executed nicely. You had botb with the firing society punch good shit. Overall a good effort. Savage its not that you were wack or bad you were'nt but you really aint have no punchlines more like light jabs. Its not hate or bandwagoning a mod trust me if H lost i would vote against him but in this case he didnt. You got style and potential get creative in your set-ups that lead into actual punches you will recieve more positive responses. Much respect to both fairs in

goodlooking on all the comment .. hate or tru..! #savage

suleyksejun u a hater in my inbox calling me nigga an shit you are a bitches bitch.. take my battle pussy! dont run!

im asking this foreal no hate.. so in sum of yall eyes these so called punchline are called reaches.. in his first line frfr flames was his word . but he said .. hell catch a tan but can he mange?but then went too more line of nuffin b4 he said that your plan to hand me damage..now the randy savge hit perfect.. but the other shit reaches not punches .. lession learned..no8

he wanted this ,so once i hittem wit my (flames), hell catch a tan but he cant (maintain)?..he all oiled up in warpaints with plans to hand me( damage) ,this macho mans aRANDY SAVAGE.i read your battles ya style is tired an it weak.the only way you win this battle hire sumone i cant beat...this what you whated to say .. i would had quit if you spit like this ... goodshit tho.. i guess the voters seen this not what u really wrote.. hahahjokes

#sule your vote should not count you dickeating the shit outta HVK i diss my self da fuck r u talking about.. .wats the def of obsolete? why would i care about them .. dummy. stan dickhead..do u even kno HVK in really life stop letting these site make think u not who u r.. jus a lame on a keybored

IF YOU WOULD LIKE A FULL BROKEN DOWN EXPLANATION FOR MY ENTIRE VERSE SAVAGE THEN LET ME KNOW, I'LL BE HAPPY TO SEND IT TO YOU DUDE.

lol.kinda!!we good bro

For SavageSocietyGunner, since he wants a comprehensive list as to why he lost.

1. No multi’s. Not a single, multi. And even if there is one that I didn’t catch, you still need to capitalize them.

2. No punchlines. You had disses, not punchlines. There is a difference. Shocking? Yes. True? Yes. A punchline has a set-up and a flip. A set-up is the lead up to the diss, which is usually where the multi rhyming scheme is too. The flip is the diss itself, which is called a “flip” cause it’s  a play on the set-up. For example, take this line by HVK. “From readin your battles? It’s Daenerys an her dragon once I’ve sacked your city I’m FIRIN SOCIETY”. The set-up to this is “From” to “City” with “Firin Society” being the flip, since it connects firing society (nameplay) to firing society, the GOT battle. That is the proper format for a punchline, set-up then flip. Compare this to one font your lines “I guess I done hit a nerve, I got these nerds, private messaging me words.”. Not only is this not a punchline, diss or set-up, it’s literally self-hype, which is the key... to defeat. A punchline should be aimed directly at the opponent, you shouldn’t be going on ‘bout your struggles or about how I told you to shut the fuck up and stop shit talking. If you’re going to be going on about this stuff, do it in the cyphers, or forums, not on a battle. The line you posted isn’t a punchline, since it doesn’t contain a set-up to a flip. It ain’t a diss, since you ain’t insulting your opponent, unless of course you think calling someone a nerd is the ultimate insult. It ain’t a set-up, since there is no diss that the line leads up to. And providing the fact that the line is all about you... it’s self hype. Don’t have self-hype if you want to win. The closest you had to a punchline was the ambulance line, which 2smt executed to its full potential.

3. You dissed yourself. You said “I give a fuck bout they obsolete opinions.”. The worst part about this line is that you said you don’t know what obsolete means, yet you chose to use it... Against HVK of all people.... Obsolete means outdated. This line states “I, SavageSocietyGunner, do indeed take heed in their opinions and votes, despite the fact that I believe their votes Andy opionions to be outdated and not useful anymore.” To simplify, it means you take peoples opinions (who in your opinion their opinion is wrong) to heart. Which to simplify even further is basically dissing yourself for caring too much.

4. Bad formatting. Once again, rhyme schemes not capped, and it looks like a five year old wrote it. Make sure there are limited amount of spelling mistakes and grammar mistakes in it, and make sure your rhyme schemes aren’t broken either. Misspelling “Faget” and “fuckyoumean” isn’t helping your case. Make sure to use periods to separate two lines of different topics too.

Side-Note: The reason I told you to stop shittalking, is that if you keep shittalking instead of maximizing on the (admitted) very large amount of potential you have, then your just wasting all your time feuding instead of improving. I’m FVC, I don’t drop biased votes, which is why I left you a comprehensive list as to why I voted the way I did, particularly on your verse. I’m trying to help you improve. Message @guts and @HVK one time... for help... because they taught me everything I know bout this whole rap battle shit.

Tips and Tricks:

1. Don’t talk shit. Wasting time talking shit wont get you no where. Not in school, not in rapping, not in gaming... no where.

2. Revise your verses at least 3 times To make sure your lines are as best as they could be, and that you’re spelling mistake free.

3. Really read and study what I said earlier on how to make a punchline.

4. Make sure to include multi’s.

5. Listen to people’s advices, don’t just reject them.

im taking sav here cuz i can feel what hes saying, seems more suitable to an audience also